Twilight Sparkle shed many tears in her immortal life, even in death she cried
the letter literally came to me in a dream...I woke up thinking it. the Epilogue came as I laid there not wanting to wake up
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Here lies the wistful delusions of the sleep addled mind. Actually wait, no, just me.
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I cried...the tears fell to the ground...and burnt holes into the hard wood floor. I cried...and my mother came in...and cussed me out. I went to the moon and died in a field somewhere...next to a wrench.
If you get that last part then you know about Moonbase Alpha.
Stay frosty!
~Hazard~
That's deep, seriously that is deep.
It was awesome. I am still going to die next to a wrench in a field somewhere. YOU'LL SEE!
Stay frosty!
~Hazard~
391555 lol, this literally came to me as I was waking up, the first thing I did this morning was put waffles in the toaster and open up my laptop to write
*slow clapping*
Good job, Dear sir
391565 Moonbase Alpha sounds familiar...but I don't know what the reference is
Deep indeed. Great story
TAKE ALL MY THUMBS! 
391550I only know of that game from Spike and Barley Let's play. They got a little robot named Henry the Third, with a pointy finger, and Barley carries a fan across the moon.
my Friend, who read this before I uploaded, told me that this is a smidge incomprehensible and kind of puts you in the middle. so now I'm debating if I should make a Prequel chapter. thoughts?
The thought of.....I can't even explain this!!
This is VERY Deep!
A prequel would be nice, like why was Twilight tortured, yet ponies still seem to be in charge. That confused me a lot. But that is besides the point.
The point is that it was a really nice take on the tortures of immortality and stuff. Keep it up.
Wow...So Deep = ambiguous?
Shit...Those Xiaolin monks were right...Sage advice can come from any.
This was great. Too bad FiMFiction doesn't accept entries with less than 1k words spread throughout; this would have made a great standalone.
391693 yeah. I had planned to have the Epilogue shorter, not changing them into alicorns. it was going to end when Shy Sparkle says Twilight was their ancestor. but alas, had to improvise
391667
That would take away the mystery. Leave it to the readers to decide what happened.
Am I the only pony who thought immortality was a curse before being reminded that everything else moves on, while you stand still?
391719 im actually writing the prequel right now
In a video of almost no importance at all one of the astronauts says "The solar panels are fucked."
Then another astronaut says "The wrench is lying in the field somewhere."
It was hilarious!
Stay frosty!
~Hazard~
This was a very interesting story... I liked it.
, Sparkler 
, and Posey 
?
. AJ's name was always AJ 
...
I must admit though. I am confused about the mixing of G1 names with the G4 setting?
Surprise
Dash is still called Dash though
My brain just exploded....
twice....
A little sad and deep for me.. but nice, i enjoyed it
392208 its a weird thing fimfiction.net is doing...no idea what G1 even is>>392229supposed to be like that :) glad you liked it
Dude I'm fucking serious I feel like dieing right now after reading this. I still wish I were immortal though.
I have a fucked up mind so I think I could fair a little better than most people.
Oh and I was almost crying by the way. This did make me feel like sobbing. Just like Marley and Me and My Little Dashie.
Stay frosty!
~Hazard~
392354 lol, you wouldn't be saying that in two thousand years of suffering. and yeah, i shed a manly tear as I was writing it...but trust me when I say my mind is almost certainly more fucked up than yours
392358 No really I could survive for that long. I might even turn into a murderer or something to release the tension. But until that day has come, then nope, I will still be sitting here discussing it with you over how I might be suffering but relieving it with being a murderer or something.
Not really but seriously if I were immortal I could probably outlast everyone else in the long run.(joke)
I would probably last about 5 thousand years then just flop into a pit and die. Just to see what its like.
Stay frosty!
~Hazard~
392371 that completely ruins immortality. the thing is Immortality would turn into a curse no matter what...you'd either suffer so much that you wish for death, or you'd lose your sanity. Immortality is never good...extended life works just fine, but not infinitely extended
LOL! FiMfiction is trollin us on Trollestia day!
I only just now realized the names are normal in the downloaded version.
Well played FiMfiction... Well played!
Looks like they have some sort of auto replace thing going on! LOL!
I can't read this. Not if I want to keep my poker face intact.
Maybe some other time.
393908 heh, i just read our last goodbye and midnight loss...this isn't nearly as sad as those two
393918
I just can't stand death stories with ponies. I love them, but I can't tolerate them.
Hope that made sense.
394039 eh the actual fic and the epilogue isn't so much death...but the prequel, if you don't like death I wouldn't read it
391578 when you see, you will learn the wonders of JOHN MADDEN.
392354 according to The Doctor, it's alot easier if everyone dies really quickly, not one by one. if you become immortal, don't get any ideas.
405856 but that would never naturally happen. everyone you know and love wouldn't all die quickly, they'd go one by one. and if you did something to change that, you either make them suffer through it as well or fall into the category of not sane depending on what actions you take
405911 WMDs my friend. WMDs. "one mans death is a tragedy. a millions deaths is a statistic."-Joesph Stalin
don't look at me like that.
the worst suffering i could wish upon anyone is immortality and plenty of friends so the poor bastard can loose all of theim right in front of him.
or over 900,000 papercuts.
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww....... how sweet. I didn't understand most of it, but it was sweet and the point was clear.
613675 thanks, this one was supposed to make you think about it to understand- I also put a bit of prologue/epilogue to help clarify a bit
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Ya. T'was pretty deep.
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Ya. T'was pretty deep.
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613728 glad you liked it
Many manly tears have been shed. Well done. God, I don't know what inspired you to write that, but the poem, and it was that, in combination with the final letter from, and it makes me whimper to write this, Princess Twilight Sparkle came together to make possibly one of the saddest fics I've read to date, and yet somehow, the happiest thing I've read in the past month.
write on! This is definitely going into my mailbag review coming up in a week or so. Keep an eye on it. I know I'll be keeping an eye on you. :) oh and one question that bugged the crap out of me, and I really badly want some kind of answer no matter how convoluted, and that is: how did Fluttershy and Twilight have children? Let alone 3 of them? I'm all for fillyfoolers, as anyone who's read my reviews knows, but I'd like to know how they went about having children? i know i shouldn't be worried about realism in a fic about TALKING PONIES, but i'd kinda like your input on how you think they'd go about doing it.
You have managed to connect with your audience in a few thousand words in a way only a few can achieve. I salute you, and I hope to see more of this coming from whence it came.
679735 you'll have to link me that review when it comes up. as for the mare-mare children. Magic. simple as that. read up on some of my other more developed fics and I've got it all around. as for my inspiriation to write this...I literally woke up too early so I was thinking and the first three lines of the poem thingy came to mind. I just continued it and wrote a prologue and epilogue around it
679779 yeah, I'll be linking everyone else to it that I review, hopefully I can get an audience sometime soon.
major need for some audience suggestions, because as is, I don't leave waters comfortable to me. Oh, and expect a review on another story in a couple of seconds, I write them at home then copy em to their respective stories once I get a chance. Anyway, once again, brilliant storytelling method. just expect 2 more comments to pop up on your other stories, "FiM but so is love" and "the night smells of lavender" which of course will be coming about as soon as it's complete... :P, both VERY good, by the way. i just felt this one mixed best with the stories i had. i wanted a motley mix.
679847 i could write a blog with a link to the review. that'll snag you a couple hundred reads possibly
679856 yeah, that'd be helpful.anyway, give what I've reviewed thus far a read, i've got a bit of a flare for the dramatic, or so I'm told by everyone i know, so assuming you can sort through the melodrama that is the fandom uber-drama gushing forth from the first few bits, you could just skip to the third review, that's where i really start to buckle down and start reviewing. take a look and see what you think. if you like it, I could review your stories a little more regularly.
679898 where are the reviews? may i have link please?
679938 yeah, here they are, blogs are weird, it all starts at the bottom. Just scroll up past the first three if you're just interested in the review work. Also note that I like to keep a flow about them, each story flows into the next through some contrived method or another http://www.fimfiction.net/user/s00perguy/blog
679955 i really like your reviews. they're well made and are focused on the story elements- and not about what the author does wrong. I'd be happy to have you review any and all of my stories
679980 yay, my work is appreciated! But seriously, all I've got left to publish are my Minalkra double bill and then the mailbag which is already done, and then I'll get started on your library. Fortunately a mailbag provides the flow I like in that it allows a fork-in-the-road to my reviews, which I'm sure I'll use repeatedly when an abrupt change in direction is called for. I'd say your reviews will start coming out some time next week. See my last review for a slightly more accurate representation of my review schedule, or lack there of.
I appear to be a stone when I'm wide awake, but had I read this while I was tired after an all-nighter I would be crying like a baby.
This is a good story; short, bitter-sweet. It's a nice break from all the love story mush I've been reading.
Faved.