This story is a sequel to From the Ashes
The Hive hidden in the Scarred Forest, officially dubbed the 'Scarred City' by its allies, has already changed twice in recent memory. The first time was when Chrysalis reached out to Equestria for peace and Twilight Sparkle joined their family. The second was when Twilight Sparkle ascended to the throne and changed things for the better. Now, as the queen finally opens their eyes, the whole world will see how they will change. For better or for worse.
Chapters (4)
That cover could be what Tera's Hive looks like. After all, geomancy has to do with the Earth, so who's to say that it can't be used to make a Hive like that. Or at least make the two chasms that surround it.
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naw the cover is what the forest of the hive mind looks like
That makes it even more Epic!
is it one body with two personalities? or are they still separate individuals with some hints of the other in them?
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They're two separate bodies, but their individual minds have somewhat fused, as have their genetics. There's enough of them left that isn't fused to still be two different people, but only just.
sweet!
Good to see a new level-headed queen.
"They're here~"
'though our allies lands are safe' - our allies' lands
'She flushed that form her mind' - from
Huh, didn't see that coming. Nice twist. Plus it let's them do the creepy finish each other's thoughts speak.
So good to see Chryssie back.
'standing at the door, looking iwnded' - I think you meant inside?
'where they were so stuff they were' - stuffed
I bet she's so deep in mischief we can't see her horn...
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Horn? they don't have horns
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Then she's deeper into mischief than even I gave her credit for.
Oh yes I want to "see" her face when chrysalis turns out to be okay.
It will be quite intriguing to "see" what will occur in the form of reactions of all the other queens with the new queen, the love production, the loving intertwined queens, and all the other fragments of news.
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you guys are making me think I goofed somewhere
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Oh no I love the direction where the story is going.
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I'm sorry, I didn't mean to make you think that. i don't think you could do anything to make me not enjoy this story. It's quite excellent.
The more I read about them, the more I love the idea of Chryssie and Twilight being linked like that.
Ooooh, someone's getting a promotion.
I wonder if they'll eventually share the mods needed to produce live with others, or are they working with them only because of Twilight.
'She said, her done a little shaky' - tone
'veteran warriors was show of that' - was a show
'Twilight and CHrysalis both gained curious looks' - Chrysalis
'Spike started, he frills flattening in embarrassment' - his frills
'during my time feral' - feral time or time as a feral (though I suppose this may start as well if you're going for a more old timey style)
'kissed her on the head livingly before turning for their beds' - lovingly
'dumbfounded and mazed that this brood' - amazed
Ooooh, Chryssie's mom is back, nice. She seems pretty cool.
Good to see the hostilities waning among the Queens.
Hmm, neutral Queens who just want to be left alone, and reasonable, judging just how much the council Queens used to fight each other.
In general, keep up the good work, can't wait to learn more about this setting.
'felt the other’s queen’s tears' - the other queen's tears
'authority and sleight annoyance' - slight
'Mel concluded, Hostess Chreia has the floor' - Meal
'twilight speak alone at this time' - remove at
'Twilight an Crysalis remained status' - standing
'fro myou' - from you
'The Hostess puts her hands on Twilight’s and Chrysalis’ shoulders respectively' - put
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the ability to produce love isn't something they can replicate, they've been trying since day one.
Being honest,I'm a bit nervous stuff has been going very well,something is going to happen I just don't know what at the moment.
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yeah its has been going TOOO well and i feel it will be big
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Haven't they gone through enough? Life isn't all hardships, sometimes there are happy endings TT.TT
but that would be boring
Lyra, huh? Name similarity with a certain teal unicorn just a coincidence?
Still, yay for some things getting resolved! Funny how it took the appearance of her long-lost mother for Chrysalid to finally see reason. Oh well.
She has no idea how lucky she is that Twilight is as forgiving, or at least willing to provide chances for forgiveness.
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Lyra may or may not be my antipaladin iconic in my DnD games. She's my profile picture. So not Lyra Heartstrings XD.
Is the dinner over jet, I'm confused since they didn't hold the population couts.
Just re-read all three stories in one day. PLEASE , tell me there will be more of this epic story coming out soon (2-3 months) ??
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definitely by then, hopefully sometime soon sine DJ Valkyri-3 is coming to an end soon.
Cool
I am surprise I did not find this story sooner, it good story,
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It's not particularly old, though it has been bloody ages since I've updated it. I need to do that. Glad you liked it!
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I am a fan of like 80% of your stories you great writer and glade to see u back
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thank you!
when can we expect the next chapter? i would really like to finish the story.
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Hopefully sometime soon. I've hit a rather shitty patch of life recently and it'll take me a while to crawl out of it, so I'm trying to focus on getting more of glow of the moon out, but I plan on 100% finishing this sometime soon. Or at least continuing it if it goes for long
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I'm sorry to hear about your run of bad luck I will be praying for you.
Amazing story I would love to see it continued. Mabye if you need some fillers just do some slice of life chapters with hive expansion, the main 6, or canterlot business until you have some more ideas for the plot.
When are you going to update this.
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When I finish Clockwork Dreams
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Sorry for super late response, but filler is what usually kills a story for me XD
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I understand that, I was just trying to help if you needed any ideas^_^
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Ok
Where is the image from? I'd like to get that as wallpaper.
Okay, so they aren't some siamese twin-being or some weird abomination. And the shared mind thing isn't too weird since there's a hivemind already.
Still, I bet they get to have a bit of fun where they make their eyes glow white, and then start speaking in unison in some creepy tone.
Also, while I am normally against plugins, I've heard good things about Grammarly. It suggests words for you and has some extremely advanced spell-checking and correction. I really like your stories, but the typos are really rather bad.
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It was a fairly standard Yggdrasil picture that a friend edited
When can we expect the next chapter?
yes please do, rise is a great story and should be finished
Almost to the one year aniversery of no updates. :(
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gods has it already been that long? This one, Seeker, and Clockwork Dreams are on the top of the list when I get back to writing. When that actually happens is anyone's guess unfortunately.
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Well whenever you get around to it, if you wouldnt mind doing a breif recap thing, cus I am pretty sure I wouldnt have any clue whats going on or what names mean what.