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Twilight Sparkle has been cast into exile on a small island far off from the main land of Equestria by Princess Celestia's orders. What could she have possibly done that would bring her into forced isolation like a prisoner; where she can't even send a letter? Is there any way off of this forsaken place?

Note: I have absolutely no idea what tags this should have, so I'm placing it in Random and Adventure for now.

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Very interesting! I wouldn't mind seeing more. But, it's already complete. :twilightsheepish:

if only there was more but still this was awsome:rainbowdetermined2: good job.
now if only we coulda seen celestias side of the story.

so, are there two Twilights at that point in time? cliffhanger... :derpyderp1:

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Thanks, you three. I was honestly hoping this would come out during the night, but there was a pretty big backlog of stories needing to be approved. I'm glad to see you like it, though. I would really love to add more to it, but like below, it'll have problems - and that's not even considering the fact that most of my ideas barely even get written. Or, they start, and just flop dead since I can't think on it anymore.

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Hm, Celestia's side... Well, there wasn't much besides the fact that Twilight did such horrible acts, and Celestia decided to exile her. Now, it would be interesting to go into her thoughts as to why she didn't do something else, but I probably won't be able to write it that well. May have mess ups, errors in flow, and the usual stuff I tend to have trouble with.

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Actually, in this, there is only one Twilight. Normally it is said that there would be two, yes, but this is no ordinary time travel spell. What it does is essentially erase the original with the one who's going back. Basically, original Twilight disappeared in a white flash while the future Twilight was going back. There is a time differentiation between these periods or "universes" if you want to call them that. Rather than instantly making one eradicated and the other also instantly being brought into the time, it removes the original, then has a waiting period for the traveling one. The white flash is not that different at all compared to her usual teleport spell. So, Rainbow pretty much thinks she just randomly warped.

I wouldn't mind two Twilights though. :twilightsmile:

I thank you all once more, as I didn't think this would get anything in viewers. Now if only I can somehow magically get more...

388812 what i mean is how celestia will react when she gets the letters twilight sent and her actions after wards.:pinkiesad2:

388812 in a way then, future Twilight just killed past Twilight... :twilightoops:

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Ah, okay. I was actually thinking of having Celestia come in towards the end. She warps in, trying to stop Twilight even though she wrote not to, but arrives a bit late as she says the last lines.

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Yep, pretty much. She went back to correct her mistakes and to live her life to the fullest by loving her friends. It's cruel if you think of it from the original Twilight's point, as she just randomly disappears and now sees nothing but the void.

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That actually crossed my mind real quick as I was writing the part of the letter. Bringing back all of her friends as skeletal minions and trying to have a party with them or something. As for expanding this, I most likely won't. I have about four short stories to write, two of which are completely new and thought up as of yesterday, and the other two having a ways to go still. On top of that, I have another two stories to add onto - which I haven't done in weeks or months now. I pretty much scrapped those two for now, though, so I'm only doing the shorts instead. It seems like I do better with those rather than trying to make longer ones. I will try to get to continuing the one about Trixie (yes, Trixie), which is a long continuous thing; not with chapters. I just hope my mind will let me write on it.

You know know what? Imma go against the flow. I kinda like it as a one shot better. Writing a sequel would dilute the impact of this glorious piece of work. :moustache: Love it! Can't wait to read your next piece.

Lack of background info, a misty aura and I couldn't stop reading.

5/5 sir, you made a good job!

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I'd have gone with Twilight merging her memories and her sense of continuity with her past self :v
Like reverse amnesia V:

'cause complete obliteration is really depressing :V

Almost surreal- and very interesting.

I keep finding the most ethereal things to read lately.... :twilightsmile:

Would the history repeat?...

i kinda wanna see celestias reactions to the letters

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More like they merged together. Future Twilight's memories would have been added to Past Twilight's, their bodies merged together. Both would have become one.

Hello! Have a review. An eye-catching setup and some intriguing hints at her island's past. Twilight's long exile has clearly sent her slightly mad, and this comes out a bit in her letter to Celestia. Where this fic falls down is that long poem all in Latin. It's no good translating that in the Author's Notes; if readers don't understand at the time then you'll probably lose them. Sadly that was the case for me.

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