Deathsia
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oh...um...oh my...
Pony Demon Train Conductor: ALL ABOARD THE TRAIN TO PONY HELL!
Me: That's my train. *hands him my ticket and walks on*
Funny story, laughed my ass off XP
Only one thing: The translations of Pinkie's drunken slurring isn't really necessary, and kind of breaks the flow.
For the rest: This are the kind of stories you either love, or hate.
382366 I'm with you there.
Not this time boner, you will be erradicated.
Clopfic. No thanks.
Slice of Life tag FTW
i'm gonna hafta to invest in a desk and a chair if i continue reading stories like this.
the floor makes my boner uncomfortable
Ah yes, another erotic tale from Deathsia, let's see how it goes!
This story:
>> The Writer of Fate so your my eager passenger aboard my train. Welcome to Pony Hell. I'll be your conductor and guide.
All I need to say can be summed up in two words;
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No! Attenuate, not eradicate!
...or stimulate?
...perhaps?
I don't know if its lack of sleep, or if this story is really that funny, but I was in stitches the whole time
Aaaaaaw yeeeaah
I DO NOT UNDERSTAND DALEKS HAVE NO CONCEPT OF THIS
Okay, it just makes me laugh that I'm doing this, but it isn't a complaint, it's just a correction (what, just 'cause I hate people who hate a story because of bad spelling and grammar doesn't mean I can't make friendly corrections! So,
*your (possessive, when something belongs to someone)
*You're (contraction: you are)
Yes yes, I'll take any flack I get for that, but really, I'll move on.
The story itself was actually really good, though using booze as a loosener is way overdone, there's not many other things that can believably get Fluttershy into a clop, so for that you're forgiven. The characters you picked are decent, though Mane 6 characters are always used, but it was a good mix. I always, in these kinds of stories, see Fluttershy as playing the reluctant-until-everything-gets-rolling participant, Pinkie as the comedy relief that loosens everyone up beforehand, and RD as the one who pushes everything into the actual clopping. Also, you pretty much just picked out my clopping faves, since Fluttershy is best pony, then Pinkie and RD, which kind of tie, and then Twilight, AJ, background ponies, then Rarity. (sorry Rarity lovers.
Also, I just posted a thing on clopping names, feel free to check it out. Anyway, I can see that the roles you chose for them were EXACTLY as I always imagine them, though they are pretty telegraphed in their day to say personality though, aren't they?
Anyway, the one thing I love about whatever clop I seem to read, is that it keeps a sense of good natured humor about it, and that little piece at the end was the icing on the cake. Good work my man, keep it up!
Oh....ummm....oh my...
I remember this.
This was hilarious. I remember reading it a long time ago actually.
Silver out!
Hmm... needs work, but cute. :P
Drunk Fluttershy is the best!
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No not my favorite pony D:
..... Have you ever in your life been drunk? It takes more than half a minute for the alcohol to hit their system, and nobody actually slurs like that. Sometimes, if they are very drunk, they will have a hard time forming the words, but "ish" is not part of that. Usually it is just pauses and issues forming long sentences. So yeah, if you want this to be a bit better, slow down on how fast the alcohol hits and rewrite the "drunken slurring".
Im sorry but when i first got insanely drunk
it took me a long ass time till i reached my limit
of course ive had alcohol before but i still was able to drink a shit ton of alcohol before i was drunk to the limit
FILLIES GONE WILD!
Cutie-clop is the bestest clop!!
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