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There are only three real monsters: Dracula, Blackula, and Son of Kong.

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Lyra and Bon-Bon look through an old photo album and reflect on their lives. They look back at their lives, starting with when they met all the way through their marriage and beyond. Lyra and Bon-Bon do their best to deal with all the problems they face, both physical and emotional, throughout their lives in the best way they know how. By looking to each other for support.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 15 )

More please! c:

For the love of all things good MOAR!

keep up the story, its great :twilightsmile:

"the Sacred Stone of the Buakakai?" :facehoof: Also, I see a twist coming in the end. Don't want to spoil it, but I have a feeling things aren't as they seem. Still adorable in the meantime though.

Yeah, Buakakai is a really obscure reference that I doubt anyone will get. I made myself laugh though.

Well I'm not going to deny that there's going to be a twist, and I'm glad you're not going to spoil it, but I hope that I'm not making it too obvious.

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It feels a trifle heavy-handed. Spoiling it is impossible, though, since there's so many possibilities of what it might be. Debilitating illness, falling out of love, one of them is dead, both of them are dead, it's all a dream, one of them is being arrested for something. All the standard tragedy tropes could apply, really.

But it was a really sweet first date.

I hope that the heavy-handedness isn't too out of place since each chapter is going to get progressively more so. Also, as you pointed out the twist could be any one of a number of tragedy tropes. But, I do hope that it doesn't feel cliched or become too predictable.

Oh, and thank you for the compliment. I try to keep the shipping stuff really innocent and sweet.

Slight author's note here. I may have decided to finish and publish this chapter after writing for several hours while sleep deprived and slightly intoxicated. In short, I have edited about half of the chapter and thus I may need to go back and finish editing later. I just wanted to get this posted. So, if you notice any errors (anymore than normal) take solace in the fact that I'll fix them, eventually, probably... maybe...

Cliffhangers! I must know why the "present day" scenes are so heavy and emotional.

On errors: a lot of little things, but a sort of jarring one is that you stopped indenting three-fourths of the way through.

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Which is odd considering I never stopped indenting when I was actually writing in the word document I used to type this story up. I noticed it when I went back and looked over the chapter. I even went back to the to the word file to make sure I didn't screw up and not realize it. Sorry about that though. I have no idea what happened. But, I will go back and fix it, since it is, as you said, jarring. Oh, and I'm also working on fixing all the little errors as well, across all the chapters.

Not gonna lie. I like this better than the Trixie story up top. Hope you update it again sometime soon.

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