• Member Since 11th Nov, 2011
  • offline last seen June 10th

ChromeRegios


Someone who's sensitive on things that's vulgar and violent. I WILL retaliate if anyone who's agressive towards me.

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377606 Couldn't have said it better myself. For once I see a creative picture used for these kind of comments.

might of worked if it was longer.:applejackunsure:

It looks like it was writen using scattered thoughts, as in there is no flow between sentences and there are simply there. My assumption is these are Trixie's thoughts as she is dying and her mind is shutting down. If this is true for a future reference you will need to make it longer and include details as to why she is dying.

Er...no, this is indeed wasted potential. The paragraphing is weird, there's odd capitalization in places, the flow doesn't make any sense, I don't even get what's going on, we don't get a clear picture of just what "Trixie" is going through...just, no. Good idea, albeit a sad one that I'd rather not see, but...no. Better luck next time. :ajsleepy:

What did I just read?

Did you do any editing at all? :rainbowhuh::facehoof:

Meh, Bad-ish. Not worse, but bad... ish.

not my favorite but deserves a like

About the so called "sadness" It was a good story, but it could have been a lot better. Maybe a sequel?

Yay, balanced out the likes and dislikes! :trollestia:

don't be a hater :ajbemused:

dis guy worked hard on this

i liked it mustache 4 u! :moustache:

Not feeling it and I had to watch a very close friend of mine succumb to a inoperable brain tumor. It doesn't seem to be a factor of using Trixie, because I like her, no it seems to be lacking in the type of writing, pacing, and impact of true emotion. Keep trying.

:ajbemused: had great potential but was never put into play

*sighs*

Okay, read it. Now time for the painstaking process of fixing all the little grammar errors that made me want to choke you. :pinkiecrazy:

Also, why is this marked as incomplete?

For everyone who doesn't get this... I am disappointed. She's lonely. She's depressed. She wants to take her life due to the loneliness. I know that feel. That's probably why I'm the only one who noticed.

You decide to keep my comments I see. :pinkiecrazy:

~G

Gives feels, but don't stand out from others. Still decent.

Why must I do this to myself?
Reading a Sadfic about my favorite pony....


Good job. I liked it.

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