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Ah dude, I think you had a bit of a problem you put he, or him, where you should put 'I' at the end I was confused when you start the hug I didn't know who was talking.
Also why he didn't ask the princesses if they would like to be his friends too?
3993023 Sorry, I went through and edited it from he and him to I. I guess I missed some. Also, I will go into a friendship with the princesses later as my character has a problem trying to focus on a ton of people all at once and some things slip past his mind, he was ridiculously excited and he was a bit unsure of whether or not he was going to be incinerated. I will go and fix my mistakes, thank you for finding that and telling me.
it appears this story isn't doing very well.
3999809 'Tis fine.
It has only been up for a little while.
To elaborate a hair on the comment before mine, you seem to have a hard time deciding whether this is first or third person. You may wanna look over it and fix those as it really jerks you out of the story.
Okay... One tiny little annoyance on this.
"By way of answer"
You really need to kill that phrase because it sounds bad and really doesn't make sense.
Answering was the action itself. The term "by way of" would explain how. So you could answer by way of a hypothetical question, but you can't really state by way of an answer.
Awesome.
4066169 I understood what Lightingace meant, unfortunately I cannot find where I messed it up in the story. I originally started this as a 3rd person but went through and changed it later. The other thing is a typo, along with the fact that I didn't realize how bad it sounded. Thank you for pointing it out.
So, I take it "Sweet & Elite" hadn't happened yet?
Because Rarity and Blueblood apparently made up in time for her Canterlot tour. See here:
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Together at an airship christening, no violence in sight.
Secondly, how did Prince "I'm afraid of dirt" Blueblood become some kind of violent thug? Wouldn't some OC fit the role better?
4138739 I apologize if I haven't made it quite clear, though I should put the tag up. This begins at the end of season 3 but not everything that happens in the show happened in my story prior to the character arriving. Also, this is a tweaked version of Blueblood. I don't like him so I decided to use him as a way to bring my characters anger to the surface and allude to future story bits. As I said I am sorry that I wasn't clear.
While the main character borders on Stuishness, the interaction between him, Rainbow, and Pinkie Pie is priceless, and I've seen so few stories that do a good job of giving another character Pinkie's powers.
4160136 I kind of figured that Tec would fall into the Gary Stu category, though I do tend to try to keep him away from that. Also, he isn't going to have all of Pinkie's powers. He will have some, but those will be put forward in later chapters and it won't be many. We have already seen the damage too many Pinkies can do.
Also, if anyone has any ideas on how to keep him away from Gary Stu please, feel free to share.
Finally, next chapter shows Tec in a good bit of trouble and showcases more of Tec's imperfections. I already have it started.
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you do realize that none of that actually happened right?
it was a day dream.
Do you know a person by the name of tecreatoromega?
4193007 Nope. I can't say that I do.
4193024 Because this is exactly like him, he knows the ponies, and has a dog that one of the original names is anubis, also his shortened nickname online is tec.
4193029 Then that is one hell of a coincidence. Tec, in this case, is actually shortened from TEC-TheEternal my deviantart tag, TEC being an acronym for The Eternal Curse. Anubis is the name of the dog that I actually have.
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A daydream?
Noooo, I think not. It would have to have been a daydream taking up almost her entire stay in Canterlot, after which she fell into bed without having the time to finish Twilight's dress; excepting the part she did finish, which, according to your theory, also would've been part of her daydream.
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but she was never really with him at all. the only time they talked was in the best night ever.
so really none of that really happened.
4192865 It was a montage. I would prefer that if this is going to turn into an argument of sorts that you both take it to PM. If it isn't then fine. I just don't want to risk it.
so what going happen in next chapter?
4196183 You will see.
Not a bad tale.
Rodrick- I actually would have done worse to blueballs if I was in your situation, Tec.
that sad so what happen next chapter?
4236380 Patience grasshopper.
He never said he was a human before talking to the princesses.
4244603 Thank you for pointing that out. I have rectified it now.
This is a really great story. I can't wait for the next chapter. Will it be soon?
4246856 I will try. I am trying to decide whether or not to break up the next part into multiple chapters.
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Why not make a blog post asking your followers wether they want one large chapter or many small chapters?
4247955 That's the thing. The size of the chapters wouldn't change the detail that I would go in for each day would.
I am doing a mass edit on all of the chapters. I am fixing it so that there will be no more changing of Point of view at all.
You know, I'm not very fond of anthro fics or HIE fics, but I gave this a shot like I said I would, and I love it so far.
It's got a couple grammar issues, but it's not too bad. I'm going to fave this once I'm caught up. For now, take a like, friend. 
You keep switching from third person to first person and back again, sometimes within the same sentence. You really need to go back and fix that, but all in all it's a good story. Though, commas go before "but," not after.
4312406 As I said I am doing a mass edit of the chapters. Thank you for the compliments.
I really love this so far. I'm confused though. Do you have a prior story with Tec in it on another site? It seems like information about him is being presented as if we should already know...
4314012 No. I am going to reveal things as I go along. Though, what caused you to think that? Gidget?
4314114 Yes, and the fact that you gave absolutely no indication that he was a wizard before the fourth chapter, then it's all of a sudden an integral part of his life. It just seemed like I was missing backstory that I should have already read, as if I'm now reading a sequel. Not to say it's not an excellent sequel...It's just that it feels amiss.
4314114 P.S.: As far as first stories go, this blows mine out of the water.
4314219 This isn't my first story, my first successful one and my first one on this profile. I had a profile on this site before, but I lost my account info. I still only had one story on that profile, but once again that wasn't my first story either. I Roleplay a lot. I mean seriously a lot. GURPS, OWoD, NWoD, D'n'D, online, freestyle, you name it, I have probably at least heard of it, if not run at least one game. I created a lot of stories to go along with those games and a lot of characters for them as well. Not to mention the original fictions I tried to write.
4314303 Ah, I see.
Well you are an excellent weaver of tales. Your grammar could use some work, but that's easily fixed with some light studying. 
4314384 Thank you. Once I have my editing done and my 6th chapter up I am going to start looking into your tales as well, if I haven't read some of them already.
4314389 I thought you said in the blog that a lot of mine were in your read later list...or maybe that was Cydox.
I can't remember. 
4314401 No, probably Cydox my read later is practically empty. I only have stuff in my read later that I didn't want to favorite.
4314411 It amazes me how differently we all use that box.
4314439 It amazes me sometimes too.
Ooo! Random thought. At some point in time I will be posting up a AU Pony Fic called Ascension. It's going to be an Adventure fic primarily. Not HiE. Haven't decided on Anthro or not.
4314461 I think you should try doing a non-anthro, just to step out of your comfort zone a little, seeing as you've already done an anthro fic.
4314573 I just might. Ascension is going to be long... So is Tec in Equestria... I have to give this story a new name the one I have is just so... original
4314709 @ The Video: I giggled.
What abooooouuuuttt..... For a Spell(?)