Tec, a brony, finds himself in Equestia and must now live in Equestia. He finds out more about himself in the process and learns that things may not always be exactly as they seem.
Ah dude, I think you had a bit of a problem you put he, or him, where you should put 'I' at the end I was confused when you start the hug I didn't know who was talking.
Also why he didn't ask the princesses if they would like to be his friends too?
To elaborate a hair on the comment before mine, you seem to have a hard time deciding whether this is first or third person. You may wanna look over it and fix those as it really jerks you out of the story.
You know, I'm not very fond of anthro fics or HIE fics, but I gave this a shot like I said I would, and I love it so far. It's got a couple grammar issues, but it's not too bad. I'm going to fave this once I'm caught up. For now, take a like, friend.
Ah dude, I think you had a bit of a problem you put he, or him, where you should put 'I' at the end I was confused when you start the hug I didn't know who was talking.
Also why he didn't ask the princesses if they would like to be his friends too?
To elaborate a hair on the comment before mine, you seem to have a hard time deciding whether this is first or third person. You may wanna look over it and fix those as it really jerks you out of the story.
He never said he was a human before talking to the princesses.
You know, I'm not very fond of anthro fics or HIE fics, but I gave this a shot like I said I would, and I love it so far. It's got a couple grammar issues, but it's not too bad. I'm going to fave this once I'm caught up. For now, take a like, friend.