Twilight and Chrysalis attempt to do the other's job with predictable results.
Written for the Equestria Daily Writer's Training Ground #007: "Simple Ways"
It's opposite day in Equestria! Write about someone swapping roles for a time.
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I liked it, only bad side of this it was so short.
"So I had to kidnap and impersonate myself" - Only you, Twilight.
This concept is nice, but you never really do anything with it. Try cutting away the last part and expand the story with maybe five or so chapters.
I like this story, it's funny and simple, I love that Chrysalis did alot better with Spike then Twilight did with the changelings...
"Come minion.” that line sold it for me.
I DEMAND MORE! AS KING OF THE CHANGELINGS!
Cute, but hopefully the "completed" flag on this story is an error. Even as a one-shot, this feels like it needs another chapter. You only explained one day. What happened during the rest of the week? How did Ponyville react to Chrysalis? What happened in the aftermath? What embarrassing changes to Library policy did Chrysalis make that Twilight now has to deal with? How will Twilight deal with the fact that Chrysalis did a better job on an assignment than she did?
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You're right that I don't go anywhere with the concept, but I really only wanted to make a quick story in order to actually finish and publish something. So instead of trying to set up a whole story I decided to have the characters not really do learn or do anything special, unlike how these stories normally go. I might redo it one day with an actual plotline if I get some inspiriation.
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I know that it's short, but that was sort of the point, at least while I was writing it because I didn't have much time. I'm not dismissing any chance of continuation, I just don't have anything planned. Still, if I think of something good I might write some more. The questions you raise are certainly a good starting point though.
So, I did a reading of your story. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=41v-iwDeapE (I will take it down if you want, but I don't know why you would
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Wow, I was not expecting anyone to do something like that. Thank you.
Amusing enough premise, but it could do with a second work-through; if you ever feel like doing this again and expanding upon it, tightening it up, when there's no time limit, it'd be pretty good.
Also, I noticed that a bunch of times you used "it's" when you meant "its". "It's" is a contraction of "it is", while "its" means "belonging to it". Take the word "his" as your model. See how there's no apostrophe?
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Thanks for the corrections, I know the difference but I didn't really edit this much. And yeah, I'm definitely getting the impression that I should redo this with a little more effort.
*Grins and claps* Very nicely done. I gotta admit I really felt for the poor changelings
Too short and I didn't exactly like the ending.
I feel like that would be so adorable, but I can't find a picture that even closely resembles this.
ok this was very entertaining. But it would be nice to see this expanded somehow. to cover the entire week.
Hahahaha... Already cracked.
Biggest complaint: way to short :))
Well Twilight got her therapy session, at least. No pony would ever listen to her ranting all week long.