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Sidain


Just a guy that love a few things too much, drawing, videogames, music(dubstep), and now writing. Here we go

Comments ( 24 )

Nice needs a little touch up but it is hard enough to find a good DD story

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Thanks, I'll be sure to make sure that the next chapter is a bit more...umm wait, what's the word I'm looking for...meh, you know what I mean.

Omg this chapter was awesome can't wait for the other chapters :)

My pleasure keep up the good work :)

and received a small concession from the impact.

Concussion.

and the mare could tell that it wasn’t a pony from the way its snot was shaped.

Snout

Those are just the first two I saw. This needs a LOT of editing. Hate for hatred, Extracted for exact. Get a pre-reader, and you may have a decent story here.

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Thanks man, I'm going back over it now, and I'll be more careful for now on. :twilightsmile:

The story is good the grammar is horrible overall the story is a 3/5

3599150 Well, I'll be reading this tonight. Hard to find Diamond Dog romance + clop fics that aren't oneshots. Though I do have to ask, why didn't you put the Diamond Dogs character/species tag?

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Cause I thought that was the tag for the diamond dogs that kidnapped Rarity.

3632729 They may have been the intention when Knighty added it, but I've always seen people use it when they have a main character that's a diamond dog.

btw, can you add more character tags to a story once it's been posted? I haven't posted anything myself so I don't know how the system works.

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Yeah you can, but I'm going to leave it like the way it is cause I still think that the diamond dog tag is referring to the diamond dogs from the show.

This could be good.

But I agree: just like the Changeling tag doesn't just mean that specific Changeling and the Crystal Pony tag means the race in general I always think of the Diamond Dog tag as one for the species. Besides, it makes it easier to search for. For a Diamond Dog lover like me, that's always a plus.

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Hey thanks!:pinkiehappy: Good to know that I can do something right.:heart:

over fill on the size a tad because at 3 g they would be about the size of semi's wheels too big to kiss around

3671699 sorry dude just trying to keep it a tad real like in erotic section but still not too shabby

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Ah tis alright, just that breast expansion is kind of my thing...and its far too rare.

3671790 fair enough just may want to do some thing do even her up

Dude, what Jake said, but what stands out to me is below. I can overlook some of the numerous other mistakes, but this sentence...

However, whatever the powers be seem to be against the mare forced her to tip over a protruded root, causing her to fell horn first into the dirt, and rolling down a hill.

I can't. I just can't. I look at this, and my inner grammar Nazi goes "NEIN!" then flicks me off and stomps out the door in those black rubber boots. You get the picture. This sentence, I just can't.

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