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Rainbow Dash runs away, but not before confessing her love for Applejack, leaving the orange pony confused. Applejack is intent on finding her friend, and bringing her back safely. Follow along with Applejack as she dives headfirst into the adventure of her life, searching for the one she loves.

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The story is good, a little confusing at parts. One thing to note, though. You should have someone read and proof this story before you put it up, there were a few small errors I noticed. Also, you might want to put flashbacks in italics so people can differentiate.

Live long and Prosper.

~E.C.

I'm a sucker for love stories, and read chapters 1-6 as fast as I could. I love the plot so far, and the twists.

Two psuedo criticisms: You didn't capitalize 'Apple Jack' in the latest chapter, in a sentence. Also ... I forgot the second one.

On to my watch list this goes.

Why, oh why do I start reading incomplete stories. I NEED to read the rest of this. Brilliant work.

I agree that you should have someone proof this before you submit chapters - lots of spelling errors - but I almost don't mind because it's just such a good, sweet story. :ajsmug: Appledash is just.... :heart:

Please update soon!

The suspense! It's too much! :pinkiegasp:

Please let them save Dashie though! I'll be so upset if that doesn't happen :raritycry:

Appledash is the best!

Grammar, grammar, grammar.

YOU BETTER SAVE DASHIE.

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I'm re-editing the whole story now, but the completed version is 123 pages long... So I'll update the un-edited stuff first to keep you guys from waiting too long ;)

Watch your spellcheck, it's changing your words for you.

Princess Celestial? who the hells Celestial? XD

292611 gaahhhhhhh I hate iPad spellcheck!

Loving it. I'd of expected more talk about previous events considering the past 9 chapters worth of horror Applejack went through.

294629 good advice :D I'll defs look into that whilst I am editing and re-writing the story later :)

Aaaaahhhh I want to know Dashie's secret! :twilightangry2:

The wing bit got me. :heart:

Ahhhhh cliffhanger! :twilightangry2: Please update soon!

Fluttershy arched her BACH...

Wow, Imagine that. Fluttershy having a famous composer with her! She must be soo well connected.

Hmm. That feels a bit unnecessary imo, and right now it doesn't really add much to the story. Still, story is not over yet, so I'll wait and see where you are going with it.

Why is it labelled incomplete? :pinkiegasp: More? :pinkiehappy:

A great story, well done. *claps*

Wow, i really love this story! The "cave-part" even made me cry :raritycry: Good work :pinkiehappy:

This was one of the best stories I've read. Some parts made me cry, while others made me laugh. Good job! :heart::raritystarry::pinkiesmile::ajsmug::rainbowlaugh::twilightblush::fluttershysad:

Perfect chapter ending.

I really like this story and I love the random characters

I want to sleep so bad,i hate you and your cliffhangers... xD

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Just about to upload the first chapter of the sequel ;) So yes, moar!

I finally found it! (It's DoctorDash from deviantart) and yay, now I can re-read it :) :pinkiehappy::ajsmug::raritystarry::twilightsmile::rainbowdetermined2::derpytongue2:

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Haha, awesome! Thanks! And thank you for all of the support :)

wait so in 2 months they got all older and stuff just like that? :rainbowhuh:

I don't know what to say dude. I tried to like this story, but once i got to chapter 10 I couldn't keep going.
For one, the characterization is just too entirely off: how completely helpless applejack is and her random, open comments about feelings for rainbow. We see in the Last roundup that she's hesitant to display her feelings, especially in the off-hand remarks you have in this story. Rainbow is also entirely off. Loyalty goes a long way in making a friend stick around (by definition). When we finally see her talk with applejack once they find her, she just Doesn't feel like Rainbow. I get she may have changed, but she's far too subdued, especially after waking up to the 'love of her life'. Pinkie is decent for the most part, but a bit too sad or reflective in parts.
On top of that, I'm curious as to how applejack spent a full two months away from her friends. Applebuck season Doesn't last anywhere near that long (as far as I can tell) and we know she keeps in contact with all her friends in the show while maintaining the farm, otherwise we would Never see her. It should go without saying that applejack would be at least a bit sad when she finds all her friends are leaving soon, even if she is happy for them; at least acknowledge that fact that she is sad but deals with it because it is for the best for them.
There are also certain words you chronically misspell. for example: 'Celestial' 'Derring do' and probably a couple others. I suppose I cannot blame you, but these are things you should pick up on when reading fanfiction, something pretty much mandatory before writing any.
Anyway, I really don't mean to flame or to be overly-harsh in my criticism, especially if this is among your first attempts, but hopefully this can be constructive for later fic writing and in the unfinished sequel to this. I'm no literary expert or expert fanfiction-writer, but i do have over two million words read and can, for the most part, feel out what doesn't belong in a romance/shipping fic.
So, haters, hate away; and, Malikvamp, happy writing. So ends this overly long comment.

Only Luna can appear out of nowhere in a fanfic and still make sense :P

Throwout this story I was really looking for a kingdom hearts quote. Something along the lines of : "We may never meet again, but we'll never forget each other".

The buffalo were a wondering tribe
that should be 'a wandering tribe'

"So?" Braeburn truly didn't understand where Applejack's worry came from. "I'm in love with a tree orchard!"
I laughed my ass off:rainbowlaugh:

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Haha, thanks! I'll be sure to fix that. And yeah, I was pretty proud of that line XD

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well its not a wonder you age over 2 months. :rainbowlaugh:
I'd like to see where this goes now.

OMG! Where did all these come from? Three of your stories just popped up all at once, and as I get back on, I see them.:rainbowderp:
I read the descriptions, see the likes, the comments, the characters, and the AppleDashieness, and I was like "Oh god... So.. much... to... read... I don't know if I can finish my story looking at these. And I have Applejoy that I have to read. By Celestia, why does AppleDash have to be so popular:raritydespair:" Anyways, they look really interesting, and I promise I will get to them ASAP, but first, I must finish a chapter to a story of mine, finish a different story of mine, and finish all of the Applejoy series. This will probably take... two-three weeks, but once that is done, These are all waiting in order: Snowed In, Following a Rainbow, and Mending a Broken Rainbow. I really like the description to these, and the comments and likes only want to make me read ever so more. Keep up the good work, and I will leave you a comment on my thoughts on the story later.:ajsmug:

From hell, to you, and back again,
Soto Konoha

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Haha, sounds good :) I can't wait to hear from you!

Short but still a snatched up my attention I want to know how this goes!

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Then keep reading ;) I look forward to hearing from you!

-Cracks knuckles-

Hmm...Much to say, but a tear could explain what words can't. ...-Tear-

When I first saw that you had 15 chapters and only....a thousand or so words each, a few only 900, I came in with low standards. I think that was you're strong suite, because this was pretty commendable. It is well written compared to other stories and you panned it out rather well! I am excited to read the next addition, caring for Rainbow. However...One peeve of mine seems to be with every romance story in My Little Pony, especially with Rainbow Dash and Applejack. The love connection. It happens so fast. Just Bam! They love each other. You stretched out them from literally being together in a creative, enthralling way, but this happens in every MLP love story I've read. However, it is excusable because you put quite a lot of time into this, even with the hilarious grammar and spelling errors, so please, keep up the good work. Peace!

so sad tag. alot of things can be meant by that. is this an actual sad story or does things end good? or just bittersweet. could you maybe explain your reasoning for the sad tag too? PM me if you want your answer to not be public.

EDIT: the sequel double vision thing makes me even more confuse. fuuuuuu(at the situation, not you)

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Don't worry, I'm a sucker for happy endings! Some of the middle parts are just a little sad, though in all honesty maybe not sad enough for me to use that tag :P

It is fantastic. :yay: It is amazing. :pinkiehappy: It is stunningly beautiful! :twilightsmile: Thank you for the great and wonderful story, I love it so much!

"Nightmare moon spoke softly"
"One of Nightmare Moon's large wings"
"Nightmare Moon had a strange"
"Nightmare Moon's voice was longer calm. She was crying. Nightmare moon was crying!"
i think you mean Luna, not sure what prompted the calling her Nightmare moon but you switch back to Luna after those so idk.

"In the room sat all of Applejack's closest friends, all busy having fun and hanging each other."
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i recommend linking the sequel and vise versa. i have bad memory and was about to read this, i would have been upset on knowing there was a sequel. because i like to read fics and there sequels in one shot, so i can get the full plot before i forget any part of it.

I almost made it through dry, and you had to go and throw in that ending line.
You magnificent bastard. :fluttercry:

No comments? I shall fix that!:rainbowdetermined2:
I like the part where AJ was stuck in between Pinkie and RD. :rainbowlaugh: :ajsleepy: :pinkiegasp: :heart:

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