Price of Pride

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Rainbow Dash is tracking a set of mysterious tracks in hopes of finding a thief that has been plaguing Ponyville. She is confident in her ability to bring the thief down and return the stolen goods.

She was wrong.

Her pride now clouds her judgement and a price will be paid.

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Thanks to Mr101 for Pre-Reading

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LivingLie

LivingLie #1 · Jul 28th, 2013 · 15 · 9 ·

The pride of your heart has deceived you, you who live in the clefts of the rocks and make your home on the heights, you who say to yourself, 'Who can bring me down to the ground?' - Obadiah 1:3, The Holy Bible

Really, A bible quote. . . Just really? And it's so backhanded to the character of Rainbow Dash. There's a difference between pride and arrogance. Rainbow Dash acted against someone she perceived as a harmful element. Granted she was wrong, and a somewhat pig-headed, but nowhere near as bad as the quote refers to. It was well written, but the actions don't warrant the outcome.

kratos

kratos #2 · Jul 28th, 2013 · 10 · 8 ·

ok so lets recap rainbow was punished for her arrogance and you did this by somehow cutting off her wing with a 1/1,000,000,000 lucky as shamrock sunday axe chop I BAIL SRRY

MemeShitlord

MemeShitlord #3 · Aug 3rd, 2013 · 1 · 3 ·

toplel

PitchParade

PitchParade #4 · Jan 24th, 2015 · 4 · 1 ·

2948076 arrogance is caused by pride and they're not really that different. and i think its the 'who can bring me down to the ground' part that mainly connects to the story. i'm not saying your wrong but it still connects pretty well to the story.

Undead_Pride

Undead_Pride #5 · Feb 13th, 2015 · 5 · 4 ·

This story does not receive enough credit.

Moonreaper666

Moonreaper666 #6 · Feb 14th, 2015 · · 2 ·

RD would make a great champion of Slaanesh!

Moonreaper666

Moonreaper666 #7 · Feb 14th, 2015 · 4 · 1 ·

2948076 TV canon supports this scenario. If she never met the other five, she would do something stupid like this.

LivingLie

LivingLie #8 · Feb 14th, 2015 · 2 · 3 ·

5623760 Dude I wrote this comment 80 weeks ago. Let. it. go.

Asashi - Dark Fist Inari

Asashi - Dark Fist Inari #9 · May 23rd, 2015 · 2 · 2 ·

It's a load of garbage entirely, there I had to be the one to say it, not that I minded.

Peacekeeper

Peacekeeper #10 · Aug 10th, 2015 · 1 · 3 ·

bad story imo sorry m8.

AetherToast

AetherToast #11 · Oct 4th, 2015 · 2 · 2 ·

Eh, not bad for a shirt story. Kinda reminds me of some short stories like 'The Monkey's Paw' or 'The Tell-Tale Heart'. Don't see why everyone is ragging on it.

Teikan