Scribble is a young, smart, and (as much as she might hate the word) cute filly, but she has a lot on her plate at the moment. She's beginning to become a young mare rather than the young filly she was before, her mother is entering into a very serious relationship with a very important pony, and her talent isn't very much a talent. Life was never easy for Cute Little Scribble, but messy times are ahead for her.
Images of Scribble and her world!
Edited by: Fade and Over Thought Name
Chapters (8)
Hmm, the re-write looks like it's going to be less disjointed than the first write. Also, I would suggest against renaming this, mostly due to personal preference.
Also, also, expect an edited chapter in the near future.
3426470 that was my intention, and THANK YOU FOR THE FEEDBACK! *kisses you on the cheek* it's really nice to get feedback
3426616 I just have one question. Are you a guy?
I ask this because my inner, nonexistent, homophobe is raging at the possibility that I was kissed on the face by a dude through cyber-space.
3426695 *points to my name* guess
3426719 What is female?
3426731 dottir means daughter...
Yes, I totally knew that before just now, that's why I typed female and not, say, because of pure dumb luck. Also, my inner, nonexistent homophobe is calm now.
3426776 that sounds serious... you should see a doctor about that.
Already have, there's nothing to be done about him. Though he's harmless literally all of the time, his anti-gay rants get really old really fast.
3426791 Please refer to the comment above that I forgot to push the reply button on.
3426871
Excellent rewriting thus far!
3426945 thanks.
3426900 Is that you passively aggressively voicing your disapproval through the lack of typing?
3426987 no, you made a reply with no link, I made a link with no reply. Simple joke
3427004 Ah... It flew right over my head. Anyway, I'm glad I didn't earn your passive aggressive ire.
I love the rewrite! I would offer to be an editor but I'm currently writing my story and NaNoWriMo(National Novel Writing Month) this month.
Also I can't find the mistake I mentioned earlier.
Edit:
Skater should start with a capital letter, right?
3427894 yes.
So far, so good. Still needs a good once-over by an editor, though. You seem to have real trouble remembering to capitalize, and other grammar errors abound. Also, what's a PB&B? Peanut butter and bread? I'm at a loss here. As for your question about what to rename the story, I vote for "Don't Call Me Cute" It's a cute title, and very attention-getting.
3428221 peanut butter and banana sandvich.
3428221 the fact you read my story makes me squee like a little school filly.
3428159 you talk funny.
Ah, peanut butter and banana. I've heard good things about it, but never tried it. I'd like to see you squee like a school filly. And yes, I do talk funny. I like the way it makes me feel.
3428255. Here's how me squeeing looks like.
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Damn, that's cute...
3429532
Heh heh. Never seen it, but I will now.
Oh hey this chapter.I enjoyed it the first time and I enjoyed it the second time.
3445432 thanks! I hope this one is better though...
Heh, this chapter at start implied they had sex just before running to school.
3446457 yes it did.
Well Vikinga, I couldn't edit but I could proofread because I spotted a good amount of spelling and grammar errors. I don't feel like showing them all. Nor be that person but I still want to say that.
3450296 you can be that person in PM, it makes me happy to know that people actually read it, and that feedback is sure proof!
For some reason... I feel like calling Scribble "Cute" from now on, just to mess with her.
I can't wait for more!
Ninja Scribble is adorable.
Wow, this is SO good! I usually don't like OC back stories that much, but with this one iris barely that I take my self time to leave a comment before reading the next chapter!
3930708 you've made my entire day!
3930708 umm... huh? I get that you liked it, but I think you've been autocorrected.
Okay, Scribble is adorable. Though I hope she manages to gain vengeance on the Pink Devil.
3932191 *hugs you really tightly* thank you so much for commenting!
3932281
You're welcome :)
I also look forward to her meeting the CMC, though I'm sure thats been mentioned by others.
3932292 she did in a earlier version, confusion abounded.
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Your avatar is adorebol!
3935011 Yes, yes it is.
If Scribble is a pegasus, why does she need the cloud walking spell? Aren't pegasi suppose to be able to walk on clouds anyway?
3980908 her wings are too small to fly, she's lacking in the Pegasi magic abilities.
I remember reading this from a while a go. It seemed to change since then. Also, I feel like Scribble's mother could get a bit more backstory. Other than that, here a few questions to take in mind. Who did Scribble's mom date? How were Scribble's relationships with the ponies her mother brought home? What did Scribble think of her mother when she brought Ponies home? How has the constant moving effected (affected?) Scribble as a character? Just come critical thinking I hope you take in mind for some elaboration on things in the story.
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3987946 EEEEE! *glomp of joy* She's dated lots of female celebs. Scribble generally wants her mom to be happy, and It's given her a very free attitude towards love. How do you think I could show it better in story?
3988004 I don't know. I just feel that Scribble could have shown more emotion toward moving into a new town (yet again). How difficult it is to live a life such as hers with her disabilities and constant moving/readjusting. I see it in small glimpses, and it doesn't have to be prominent in the story, but by doing this, Scribble's character becomes more than adorable, funny,
an evil mastermindmatchmaker.3988024 She has moved about 2 times in her life, and like any dissability she learned to cope. She isn't saddened by her dissability except for the few times it really sticks out. She is kind of isolated, but has grown used to it.
3988167 I see. Okay then, I read through it again, and it actually seems fine. Thanks for answering my questions. I'll keep close eyes on this story. But before I go, I want to know if you're still looking for an editor?