Luna has lived a wonderful life as an alicorn, she has a sister that she cares for and has made friends along the way. All that changes after overhearing a conversation between Celestia and Discord that she was adopted by Celestia! Luna decides that it's time to get some answers and find out who she truly is, who her parents are. Shocking revelations will ensue, but will this journey be for better or for worse?
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the only part I have trouble with is this
first she was lonely and sitting then she was happy and playing with a phoenix
3173695 Oh wow. Thanks
guess I should fix that.
3174036
happy to help
3174038 Ok I think I fixed it now. Lol
3174061
OMG ITS BETTER NOWWWWWWWWW
Tune in next time for the next chapter of Luna's adventure!
3184004 Lol
Alright, the stereotypical abandoned building destination. Knowing these types of stories, there's probably going to-
3187276 Well I've already got the plot lined out. But it's a secret!
3187281
Good idea, don't want to leave people waiting or anything, just get the important stuff done, then sweat the small stuff later.
3187286 Well, I would love to hear what you think of the story so far! and would also like to hear the idea you had for the next chapter.
This is a very well thought out story. It has an amazing title that grabs the readers interest and the thought of Luna being adopted is very possible. There are some grammatical and spelling errors however and the only way I noticed these is because I have just finished Proofing one of my own stories. First of all you should really think about indenting your paragraphs. It makes it look more organized and professional. Second there is a spelling mishap around the part where Discord and Celestia are having their conversation. Towards the beginning, about 3 lines in, it says "Luna's eyes widened a bit then the put her hoof to her chin in thought." You must have accidentally hit the "t" key instead of the "s" but other than that this story is golden. I will continue to read the other parts and, if you would like, inform you of any other errors I see. Keep up the fantastic work!
3187316 Thanks! and If you could, I would very much appreciate the spelling checks. Sometimes I type to fast for my own good!
I'll get right on that! Thanks for the help! 
3187301
an interesting concept. A few bits of 
humor and 
feels sprinkled about while keeping the overall tone of the story, always a good idea. I actually have a few ideas of what could happen, but considering how many times I've seen the "abandoned child" theme done (which I'm surprised at, now that I think about it
), I might possibly bore into spoiler territory. I'll be honest, it wouldn't be the first time I've accidentally predicted the ending to something.
Well the story so far is well done,
3187591 With all honesty I would very much like to hear it! Even if you do manage to guess the ending, I won't hint if it's right or wrong either way. I would also like hear your ideas for what would happen!
3187609
But since you're so keen on knowing...
Well, as I said before, there are multiple ways of going about this, and frankly, to cover all of the bases might take up an absurd amount of space.
First off, there're only two main ways to go from where we are in the story:
1. Luna investigates and finds some kind of message left for her, probably concerning that her parents have moved elsewhere.
2. It turns out to be a shell of the building it used to be, nothing more. Using her super princess brain, Luna deduces that their might be a clue in the town archives considering who lived their in years prior, finding anything from names, a new address, jobs, or even physical descriptions.
From those there could be many more possibilities, such as getting lost in uncharted territories, battles with monsters, false leads from bad/outdated information, or more info on where her parents are, possibly pertaining to why they had to leave her. Any one of these things could happen multiple times, or maybe not at all.
Finally, there's usually a choice to be made, once they've reached the end of any trail they have:
1. Go through with completing your quest, satisfied after all you've gone through, and face potentially shocking truths.
2. Turn back, knowing that you may never see your parents again, but you've come to an understanding that they had their reasons for doing what they did, and from their actions, got you to where you are now.
Before I puke into the nearest waste receptacle from all the sappiness going on through my head, on the subject of Manehatten, possibly a Babs Seed cameo?
There, now quit bugging me about my thoughts.
3187807 To be honest, I was going to go with your first guess, but I had changed it last minute and now there's going to be a little surprise for you.
ok and i like it that Luna's now a mother now in this story and i like the name Crescent for her
3192205 Thanks! Funny thing, I was thought of that while I was taking a nap yesterday, and it just clicked!
3192218 Your welcome and that is funny
I like this...It is good...
But, i will say this. It is not great. It feels rather.......rushed.
3192521 that's what I was afraid of I'm sorry is it feels rushed. II can be impatient at times and will try to get the chapter out asap and I feel that because of that this story will be rushed it but I'm planning on making the chapters ahead to be a little longer and also more descriptive of the relationship between luna and crescent. again sorry if it feels rushed but I hope you enjoy the story. :)
So, Luna found the address. There was a photo of a couple and a kiddo. Luna gains a "daughter", and find divorce papers in the trash that are basically useless. Distraught, Luna and the new party member Crescent leave for Canterlot to get their new lives started. Did I get that right?
I can't shake the feeling that there's going to be this huge plot twist at the end, but I'm not going to tell you what I think this time.
But anyway, still a good chapter. Caught me off guard, but then again, that's not exactly a bad thing. No real complaints.
3193543 Glad you like it. But Luna is still going on her quest, the papers weren't the clue, the envelope was. And she still going with her new daughter. You'll just have to wait and see!
Wait..Philomena was in this?
3201406 Yeah. She was traveling with Luna but I kept forgetting to add her into the scenes.
Shit, that water prank.
HILARIOUS!
Oh man, I would have no remorse for a prank that good. None whatsoever.
3201707 Yeah, funny story behind that. I was sleeping over at a friends house, out cold mind you. And He decided that he would wake me up by dumping a bucket of freezing water on me!
Crescent is becoming more and more like me...
You haven't been spying on me have you?
i love it and what kind of alternate ending would you do for this story
3226572 I'll reveal that when it ends
3227560 ok and is it this going to end normal way and you will make a Bonus chapter with the alternate ending in it
3227743 if you guys want. Im letting you guys decide. :D
3227859 i want you to do that
3227859 i want you to do that and what are you letting you us decide
3227896 whether or not there should be an alternate ending. I dont want to write it and have people complain about it ruining the story. Cause some people do that
3227900 i don't want an alternate ending to this story i just want this story to end the normal way and ok
3227907 No problem
3228516 ok
3228516 i got a question when will the next chapter for this come out
3238042 I am currently working on it but there is no specific release date
3238062 ok
ok and please don't be an alternate ending to this story and i love it
3254600 I'm not, there's going to be an epilogue though, won't be as long as a regular chapter.
3254605 ok and i can't wait to read the epilogue when that comes out
3254613 It will be soon. Very soon
3254617 ok
i love the epilogue a lot and can you make a sequel for this story
3254792 I don't know yet. I have no idea what the sequel would really be about.
We'll just have to wait and see. 
3254799
The first thing that comes to mind would be seeing Luna and Crescent settling into Ponyville, getting to know people. Slice-of-life stuff.