Here's something you probably don't know about the workings of the universe. In between each dimension is a space known as The Ether. Here a force known as The Guardians patrol the boundaries between each of the galaxies. When a leak is found they quickly fix it and restore balance to the universe. But suddenly a catastrophe has struck, multiple leaks have been detected and they are all flowing down to a single dimension that holds a single solitary world known as Equestria. Creatures are using the leaks to invade the world and the Guardians are fearful for the survival of the Equestria. The amount of damage could tear it apart. So they call in their top agent. He is a being known as the Wanderer. A human in appearance he is nothing short of amazing, able to change into any shape and wield any weapon. His powers are limitless and his ego matches it. Is Equestria ready to handle a visit from an unstoppable and over-charismatic enigma?
As Big Mac would say: "Nnnope"
Dedicated to Robin Williams.
The critics are raving:
"This is one of the few stories I've seen that involve original characters from the sole imagination of the author, and I thank you for making it. - Irongalley
"I had tears I was laughing so bloody hard." - Doctor Magnum
"Words cannot discribe how awesome everything I just read was
10/10 game of the year" - Setlef a.k.a Silent Charger
"I APPROVE! I goddamn fucking approve!" - Angels
Thewatcher509 calls it an "Awesomely Epic Super Extravagant Spine-Busting Action-Smashing Swash Buckling Tear Jerking Game Referencing Music Accompanying Enigma-Appearing Story"
So lock in and buckle up for the most wildest ride of the century. Prepare for everything and expect the completely unexpected!
Because the Wanderer is in town!
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Rated teen for language and some adult content
Crossover tag added for appearances by some special characters.
Don't lemme down, comrade!
This is one of the few stories I've seen that involve original characters from the sole imagination of the author, and I thank you for making it.
So, yeah. Like and fav, will read in a bit.
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Thanks mate!
And if you haven't read it yet you better prepare yourself and I hope you like bad jokes and AC/DC
What is this a crossover of?
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I put the crossover tag there because of the many characters that appear especially when stuff starts coming through the rifts into Equestria. And example would be maybe say Locust come through from the Gears of War universe or maybe even Godzilla. No one knows what might come through though. So it's all gonna be very very random.
Heh. Funny. MORE!
I had tears I was laughing so bloody hard. Good Lord you have outdone yourself E. I cant wait for the rest of it. Bring it on!
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Oh uh....they are? Really? I didnt notice? Sorry if that bothers you?
I'm glad ya still like it.
only thing that, in my opinion, can even just barely resemble a problem is...the beginning's very Looooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooong paragraph
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Oooooooooohhhhh okay I see now.
Very sorry about that I will see what I can do about that right now. Thank you
Fuck yes. I adore this kind of writing/character as I have done a few myself. And good music choice by the way.
But now it's just missing one thing.
MORE CHAPTERS!!!!!
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2313756 Dunno about sentences but the paragraphs were a little long.
Other than that, I'm really looking forward to when he acts like a badass around ponies lol
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I'll try doing that in the next chapter see how it turns out. Thanks mate.
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Oh well thank you I appreciate it.
Oh man, I need to get to work on the next chapter.....
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BRB!
Oh and don't forget to pun.
Very badly.
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Did you get the Jesus pun?
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Yes.
Yes I did.
Excellently bad. Good show.
I need more of this!!!!
mmmmm dat Lost Planet reference
References all Around!
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What? Where?
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That was the point my dear
2315315 Cat-G It's used to describe Akrid"animals of that universe" that are fucking MASSIVE
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OH YEAH!
Forgot about that one
lol
I apologize for any comments that could be considered rude, but you need an editor my friend.
Run-on sentences, forgotten punctuation, improper capitalization, characters speaking outside of their archetypes, poor paragraph construction, etc...
Don't get me wrong, I like the premise, and the world you created, but sometimes it is just too unbelievable; and not in the good, creative way!
I understand that they have been around each other for an inconceivable amount of time, so they could get informal around each other, but there is no order to this! Not even a single paragraph explaining why King Leonidas was was worthy to be sitting next to Zeus, no few sentences explaining the structure to how their society is set up!. Nothing.
I find a problem with how power and success are just handed to your main character, so far he is shaping up to be the "ultimate badass", a horrible choice for any author; as readers find them stale over time, and no one can relate to him.
I want to see him struggle, to feel his frustration when dealing with mortals, to experience all of his prior adventures which led up to his extremely satisfying position of power. In order to make your readers fall in love with your character, you must not be afraid to kill him, make him suffer. So far though, everything is handed to him on a silver platter.
There are good things however...
The way you go about a "Human" in Equestria is refreshing, albeit unorthodox. I would love to fall in love with your Ether, and the entire lore with this story...
But I, as the reader, am not allowed!
If you would like some help, my services as a collaborator, editor, and writer are available to you.
As fair warning though, (and as you have already seen by my post) I can be very frank, persistent, and sometimes annoying; but I assure you I mean well.
I truly think you have a very good premise here, it just needs some work.
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Uh....I have an editor first off he just hasn't been able to look at my story yet but I appreciate the offer and will consider it.
As for the "problems" you see, it is a prologue meant to introduce everyone and the setting that is all I intended for it to be, explanations WILL come in the later chapters including about the council I promise you that. But I put the Random tag there for a reason as I, and I shit you not, made this up as I went along and it turned out better than I could have ever hoped for. I know I have some some problems here and there but it happens and I will try to fix it and I would most certainly appreciate the help. The character of the Wanderer starts out as an enigma that no one knows anything about but over time more and more of his character is revealed. He has weaknesses, he will have his moments of suffering , and you can be damn well be sure he is going to struggle with dealing with the ponies. He is not an ultimate badass just a badass with a hidden side and a lot of weight on his shoulders with this job he has to do. Without the powers he was given he wouldn't stand a chance. More will be revealed about this character you have my word as an Eccentric. But why cant you enjoy it? That's why I wrote this to make people laugh and give them an entirely new world to explore. I don't want to appear as a jackass right now I don't. I want to be the funny man with the awesome stories and a friend. I really really appreciate the help and I will ask you if I need it. Thank you.
I think you should spell it Aether instead of ether. Because when I see it spelled ether, I think of the type of chemical compound and not the space between reality. Just personal preference is all. Either way is fine.
B-B-B-B-Badass man
Words cannot discribe how awesome everything I just read was
10/10 game of the year
Excited To Read The Next Chapter 'Cuz Now I'm THUNDERSTRUCK
IM THE MAIN CHARACTER
or not (gestures toward name)
MOAR!!!!!!
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Lol not really but its good to see a fellow enigma taking an interest in my story. Im sure you'll like it
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RIGHT AWAY SIR! MOAR CHAPTERS COMING UP!
As long as we dont get Nazi Zombie Robot Pirate Alien Daleks, i think we'll be fine.
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*smiles evilly*
2325878..Don't you dare.
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heheheheheheehehehehehehe *snort* hehe
2325992.. Ah well..it COULD be worse....And no, i'm not telling you how.
Was this 'Wanderer' by any chance inspired by the Mysterious Stranger of Fallout fame?
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Nnnnnnope I had this character and his name in my head for quite some time. I've never even played that game YET. So no this is my own original character thank you very much
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Ah. Alright then. Just curious.
lol almost 6k words in prolog gj
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lol thanks
*inserts one coin* moar?
MY COINS! *Slams a reasonably sized safe onto the counter* TAKE THEM YOU MAGNIFICENT BASTARD!
*Inserts one coin, selects continue with 99 coins ready* Lets do this.
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IM RICH! IM RICH! HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
Let the games begin!
*shovels coins into the screen of computer*
I need more! I have to continue!
Okay so I finally got around to reading this and what a read. Best thing I have read on this site and it actually made me laugh. Nice job E
Now for the next chapter
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!!!!
NOW CONTINUE
I will give you all of my money to make more of this. Please dont stop this awesome rollercoaster ride.
Thunder on!