Look into my eyes... It's where my demons hide... Don't get too close, it's dark inside...
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this... is... creepy... but... good...
Omg I was like what and then I was like awesome
Beautiful! Let the heads roll!
The detail of the deaths of sweetie and scoots made mebut the cliffhanger made me go but over all a good story
is there gonna b a 4th story?????
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Of course there will be! I wouldn't leave ya all hanging like that. It should be out soon, still working on it
You do know you don't have to put that parental advisory thing there. The mature tag speaks for itself.
Heads will roll...wait they already are...LOL
2615989 you said that over a year ago!!!!
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Been busy, I don't have a lot of time on my hands. Also, do you know how hard it is to work on stories on phones?
4531674 yes i do right now
I find that bit funny for some reason.
My lone criticism of this story is that you do a lot of "telling" you explain way too much, instead of explaining you could provide an image for example when you said
It would run smoother as:
Additionally you use "said" too much, use other words like "stated" "questioned" "admitted", this will avoid the monotonous use of "said".
My one criticism of this story has to do with this paragraph:
I feel like that last sentence would have worked better if that first "normal" was replaced with "scared".
This zeems familiar