The start of the virus was unknown, but it started and spread through Equestria like wildfire, killing countless thousands of ponies. Hardly any are still alive, and the ones that are struggle to survive. The Mane Six are a few of the survivors, and this is a short, yet dark, tale of their struggle to survive.
Suggested official rating: PG-13 for disturbing violent content, some gore, and dark themes
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Inspired by:
"The Stand" by Stephen King (novel)
"The Hot Zone" by Richard Preston (non-fiction book)
"The Cough" (another MLP fanfic)
"Flu Season" (another MLP fanfic)
Chapters (1)
This does sound like the cough.......
......but BETTER!
That was TOO DETAILED
I'll like it but not fave, I don't think I can take any more when my throught was in nots by the end of the first paragraph.
That cover pic...
... I like it
These guys have somewhat annoyingly poor habits for staying safe, and maintaining a quarantine, especially considering the circumstances.
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1. Yes, I'm aware of that, It's kinda a main focus for these sort of stories, I'm not referring to that, I'm referring to the main cast in Twilight's treehouse.
2. Again, not referring to that, you established a reason, i.e. it was unexpected, quick, and lethal. I'm referring to the unexplained logic gaps, namely the survivors not seeming to of learned to be cautious.
3. Indeed, and managing your audiences willing suspense of disbelief is generally a rather universally accepted point of necessity for effective storytelling. Though, of course, I'm not talking about you the author, I'm talking specifically about the six survivors being rather innocent. There's logical reasons for that of course, even if they aren't covered within the narrative, but I'm not posting a full story critique, I'm posting an observation I made as a casual reader. Bit of a difference.
I think AJ sneezed.
This has really good potential, you just skip through it too quickly. Maybe you should add more detail and really go into depth on each day, otherwise great job so far!
Why are there so many dislikes?
2644237 Oh hai
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Ah! You read this story as well?
2650208 Yup. Pretty damn good, if you ask me. I don't know why, but I really like disease stories, and it popped up in the group Diseases, Plagues, and Illnesses so I just said why not.
2644619 I Think Its the spanish flu
Gah.
Achoo! ... O.o ...
The beginning, I could see the adaption of The Hot Zone. Pretty good. The beginning of the tree house scene, with them all crammed in with the bucket, worked, too.
When everyone in the treehouse starts sneezing, though, it got kind of silly. I wasn't particularly fond of "The Cough," but one thing it did right was the ambiguity of the line, "someone coughed." It wasn't clear if the disease had spread, or if Fluttershy was lying when she said it was her, or what.
I think you have the makings of something here, but then kind of blitzed through in madcap manner.
WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! POOR SCOOTALOO WAAAAAAH!!!!!! POOR SCOOTALOO! *OC is infected and dies in sleep and wakes up in heaven with princesses who can't die because are goddesses and can recreate world.* now in oc's POV. *Sees cutest wittle filly*
DAAAAAAAAW!! *Cuddles up to Scootaloo in heaven*
:|
:D
10/10
DAMN! That was good!
Needs a sequel, where they find out the culprit!
Good golly, I can't even...
I really hate how you killed off Fluttershy, but it was a great story. Good job.
*sneeze*
"WHO THE FUCK IS THAT?!"
"well fuck."
Hey, [Content Deleted] It's Carly! I read the story like I told you I would! I actually thought to was a great story! I was into it, you really do have a talent for writing. Anyways, I'll see you tomorrow! Bye.
the intro reminded me of the flash game pandemic. you make a virus and infect and kill everyone. ever played it?
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I haven't played it, I'll have to check it out sometime
the cough...omg i remember that fic...i hate cliffhangers. i was depressed for weeks
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This story is strongly based off "The Cough".
3800300 so it has the same damn cliffhanger ending?! dammit i hate cliffhanger endings >_>
love the use of the pic.
goodby world *sad face*
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So, you read this, eh?
Hey guys should I make my own alternative ending for this fanfiction? If I did it would be my first fanfiction. I don't know if anyone will read this since it's been almost a year but one person is all it takes
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If you want to, that's fine with me.
I was always a fan if dark stories regarding diseases. I must say, this story didn't disappoint!
2644678 In retrospect the moment Rarity sneezed they were all dead, although I must agree the way that they handled the whole quarantine situation was appalling.
Too bad you weren't inspired by the movie Outbreak or Contagion. Then this story may have ended differently.
I nearly had to skip past the Scootaloo intro
Once I got past that, though, it was fine
Probably Rainbow Dash, since she kept talking to Fluttershy.
Oh
So much gore! But I love it!
Really? That was almost mature? I've seen way more gory stories that are rated teen...
Anyway, great job!
All of them.....DEAD! If Rarity had it, Fluttershy and Rainbow obviously had it and since they were all in the same room......ALL OF THEM ARE DEAD!!!! This is kinda like the Black Plague, but more deadly and less symptoms. If this ever becomes reality.......it’s gonna suck.
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m.How'd the virus kill Spike? Zoonotic pandemics don't usually end up this deadly for multiple species at once. Is there some shared magical organ that ponies and dragons share in Equestria? If the virus disrupts that, perhaps that's where the shared leathality arises.
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TAKE COVERRR
Horses don't throw up either. The reasons they can't are related to their physiology and anatomy as well. First, the esophageal sphincter is much stronger in horses than in most other animals, making it difficult for it to open under backward pressure from the stomach, according to Equus magazine.
Muh Immersion man, muh immersion
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They CAN throw up, MLP and real life ponies are not the same, you can see it for yourself in a episode from the season 1 (Applebuck Season) where Applejack prepares cupcakes being sleepy.