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Interesting start, Discord saving a world with friendship and ponies. I can't wait to see what happens with the alien demons (red skin and horns). There are a few big grammatical errors, but the unique story plot and good character development convinced me to favorite and thumb up this story. Keep up the good work and try harder to catch those errors, and this story could go far!
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Thanks for the feedback. As for the errors, i do try a couple of rereads, but i thinking being the author makes it difficult to find them all. I'd be more than happy to correct any you or anyone else point out.
Horny red ones, and a hellish earth.
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The oblivion gates must have been opened, its what
discord,er Mehrunes Dagon would do.Well now, i am glad that i decided to give this story a try. Great chapter!
This is definitely interesting to say the least. Very original, yet with zero noticeable spelling/grammar errors. (As is often the downfall of good stories.) The only thing that I can point out that could possibly be better, is the fact that his has received surprisingly little attention. It seems to have some serious promise... Ah well, back to reading to find out.
I can see where this is going
This chapter has me so confused with the characters and setting.
I need stuff spelled out for me in crayons though so I'm def the minority.
Woah. This escalated... Quick. Yeah, I have to agree with you James, you are NOT reacting to this well enough.
Oh well. At least you have a decent costume for the party.
Also, gotta say, I like the idea of having to "Unlock" the chapters to a book. :P Thats pretty rad, yo.
Alright, second time reading this chapter, and oh man. One thing that really impresses me in this chapter is the way you describe James and his style of life. Just fantastic.
James is just an average guy! I mean, YEAH he DOES talk to himself quite often and quite dramatically at that, but then again he does live alone and as far as I can tell, has but one friend, and he doesn't seem to react all that well to some things (the tome, the tail, though the tail was sort of believable... I can't really say much on that, since I don't have one myself. I wouldn't know if it would hurt like that if it was all stuffed up the way it was), but hey, maybe he's just immune to that kind of stuff. He WAS surprised at how well he was taking it, so I'll give him that.
But hey, I commend his ability to make light of the situations he is in. Get a mysterious book? Open it and find its an interesting read about a subject you rather enjoy. Get a tail? Got a costume party? Hey, I wont even have to go shopping. Plus, LOVE the color. That's my kind of blue, yo. And it feels great to pet, as... creepy as that sounds. <.< -- >.> *Strokes tail*
But anyway yeah! Scruffy face, pudge, short dark brown greasy hair, fast food breakfasts, super early morning job, slight ass of a friend... Love it. Average guy saves the Earth. :P
His interactions with his friend Qubert, (interesting choice of name) especially the ones at the post office, just felt natural, you know? Like two honest to goodness real friends having a conversation.
Ah, so far I am liking the Human characters! Way to go, you've achieved the near impossible, and I'm certainly happy you have.
Alright, enough fawning over the humans.
As far as the story is coming along, I am throughly enjoying it. It's got plenty going on, without being overwhelming, and it's written quite well. So, yeah, I think I'll read more!
On the last note, screw you Madeline. Just. Screw you. :T
I take the exact same approach to my facial hair
So far this story has my win
Just "Hadn't" works in this instance
This is my second time reading through this story and I just have to say that it is one of my favourite stories I have read on this site.
nice
2402311 I immediately recognized that star trek reference about Q and the Q continuum when Tune called Qubert "Q"
Small typo here.
Nuance
Was just reading this again and "At the clock-in area he saw the half dozen other carriers along with the closest person he had to a friend, Qubert Smith. He took one look at Tune and gave an impressed whistle." Hasn't been long enough in the story that we'd automatically know who "Tune" is, and English pronouns are horrible and arbitrary. But I lost track of who's he at the second sentence enough for it to be jarring, so it's probably wise to say "Qubert took one look at Tune" instead of using the pronoun. I know I'm piccayunish but those jarring moments are what make stories hardest to read.
I make it a policy to never use pronouns myself.
Looks interesting. But gosh dang it; why must he go to a costume party?.. (Smacks head against imaginary wall.)
Also, why does this guy talk to himself out-loud so much? I don't do that unless I hear talking I'm trying to ignore, and need to reinforce my thoughts by saying them outside my head, so I can hear them with my ears. (I can't do anything very complex, with people talking. I can't even listen to music containing words, while I read or work on something.)
He should read some of Jack Vance's Dying Earth stories. It makes a lot more sense in context.
From a gameplay perspective, the lack of flexibility is a way to allow magic to be incredibly useful and incredibly powerful without completely overwhelming the game. It encourages discretion, careful planning, and lateral thinking.
Mana pool systems more easily turn into: spam your buffs, spam your most powerful spells, wash, rinse, repeat. They are thus more suited to video games than to tabletop games.
A misnomer is an incorrect or unsuitable name. Misconception is the closest accurate word.
Dude you would be surprised, blue is one of the least unusual colors one can have in Equestria...
I think he accepted the situation far too easily, but so far it's lookin' good
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I mean, he's got a possible solution, and some folks can be accepting for strangeness...Discord mighta chosen him randomly cause he was -interesting- and all~ That's my thought anyways.
i predict horse head mask
I know I'm like. Super late to the party? but "hadn’t of" should be "hadn't've". Technically the words are "had not have", though that doesn't sound right saying it like that. Otherwise you can leave it simply at "hadn't".
I found a typo!
Grammar weirdness has been marked for demolition.
Time for take 3 on reading through this!
I wouldn't've gone to that party anyway. I'm an introvert, even if I wasn't turning into a pony, I still wouldn't go. I would just stay home and wait while ordering various foods from McDonalds, Chick fil a, and subway. If it was my last day as a human, I would at least enjoy it.