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Hmm, randomly peo- I mean, ponies are gathering...
So far I like it, and there is not that many errors either!
P.S.
I should be done editing chapter one by tonight. And it will posted in my dropbox. I will PM you when I've completed my task.
great chapter! love everybody's personality.
Last bit genius!
Conrad seems like a funny fellow.
So far i'm entranced. You can thank Sarikano for your new reader ^_^
Well. Back to being utterly confused.
What the hell HAPPENED in this Chapter? Everything was going smooth until- OH GOD CAR CHASE WITH GUNS. And then, hey, we get a new Pony. Conrad. ...With a crime saturated family history, apparently. And, has a bunch of people chasing him. Because this will end well. Totally. No doubt.
Okay, so he's rescued... And I realize that James is a bit... Rude. As well as realizing that they have strange speech patterns. I saw "Nay" used in Conrad's speech, which threw me off, not gonna lie.
But, anyways, come on, give the pegasus a break, James, you saved his fricken life, and I'll be he's having some serious issues right about now. Plus I have a feeling that he isn't unnaturally good at keeping calm in most situations like you are, nor is he gifted with the ability to just kind of accept everything as it comes as a fact of a new life, so... yeah, kinda knocked you a few pegs down for favorite character so far, giving that title to Qubert.
And then, Loki. Entering without permission, and... Oh whatever. I'm not even going to question this. Actually, yes, I am. But. No. ...I don't even know what to say! She's just. There. What can I say? Well, I noticed that the ponies keep their Human names... Maybe, Conrad, I dunno, but if that's the case, then... WHO NAMED THEIR KID... LOKI? Honestly.
So it seems all the ponies are starting to gather, coincidentally, at the Smith Manor. I guess the real adventure is about to begin, sadly. I was enjoying reading about James, or... Alexia... Bah, no. His name is James. Anyway, I was enjoying reading about his struggles as a pony. And, the magic lessons. I find those intriguing as well. But we have to get to the genocidal war sometime, I guess...
But, uh, hey! Good to see the services are back on for the manor! That'll make things easier for sure, especially now that Conrad and Loki are there. Gosh, I'd just love to see Quberts reaction to this. "Damn it James, you got TWO others sick as well?! They gotta pay rent too." Heh heh. You really are all heart, Q.
Ah, and we have the humor in there too. Angry dildo usage. Perfect. Also, I feel as if Loki's going to be the comedic relief. Phew. Thought this story was going to be all doom and gloom. With Dildo's.
Next chapter. Yay. Fun.
Norse mythology gives me the feels that Loki is going to be their pinkie pie
This is a sadly true statement.
awesome
What is this nonsense, is James now seeing himself as girl? Because human MALE is still human MALE, even if his body was turned into pony FEMALE against his own will. :P
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Maybe because James got used to be an unicorn mare. Like in the story called: Fluttershy Flutterguy, in chapter three.
4842793 It really truly depends. He could have accepted it. He could have simply pushed it aside as unimportant compared to surviving, or it could have simply altered his mind (hormones) to make it acceptable. Or, in other words "one day I will figure out what sexually attracts me, I will orgasm to it, and then I will have to spend the rest of my life with this knowledge."
I don't know how to feel about this story. The dialogue is just bad, the narration as clunky as it gets, and the main character's personality bounces around like a superball, but the story incredibly gripping all the same and I want to see where it goes.
why loki just why?
"It was a nearly dawn"
That was amusing, but in the end, a mistake, i'd imagine.
Best fic~ And introduction of Loki! Gotta love her.
And now we have the three tribes covered.
Nice work.
which brings to mind....
NEET
I have 3 major problems with this chapter:
1. You put too much in this chapter. I'm not saying it was too long, but it feels like you jammed 3 chapters' worth of content into one.
2. It was rushed. Kinda goes with the first point. 3 chapters, crammed into the LENGTH of one.
3. James should just be James. Even if he is a magical talking horse, he should not just embrace it wholeheartedly, he should at least try to keep some semblance of himself. He acts like he hated who he was, and wanted to be anything else as soon as possible. But, he says stuff like 'Oh noes I won't be me' and can't masturbate because of it. Srsly? I once was crying over the concept of death in my bed at night, but I thought of something kinda hot, one thing led to another, then was done jerking before my tears dried.
I have 3 major problems with this chapter:
1. You put too much in this chapter. I'm not saying it was too long, but it feels like you jammed 3 chapters' worth of content into one.
2. It was rushed. Kinda goes with the first point. 3 chapters, crammed into the LENGTH of one.
3. James should just be James. Even if he is a magical talking horse, he should not just embrace it wholeheartedly, he should at least try to keep some semblance of himself. He acts like he hated who he was, and wanted to be anything else as soon as possible. But, he says stuff like 'Oh noes I won't be me' and can't masturbate because of it. Srsly? I once was crying over the concept of death in my bed at night, but I thought of something kinda hot, one thing led to another, then was done jerking before my tears dried.
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It can kind of be explained by 'magic' there's a transformation here and the specifics of it aren't known to us readers NOR the characters its occuring to. The demi-god of chaos from another world/dimension/universe triggered it, the results of said transformation might be chaotic and vary between each individual. As a result, Tune might be mentally transforming to accept the changes to prevent a catastrophic mental meltdown, or maybe Tune is just one of those people who adapts to a situation and just runs with it, there are people out there that take hits and keep trucking without a worry in the world after all.
I agree with the pacing in this chapter, it's roughly three chapters worth of content pushed into one, I was struggling to read along because I felt like there was very little reprieve from it all.
I can't BELIEVE i missed making this reference before . If nobody else is gonna...
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Reasons to love the Simpsons.
#mediumsneaky?
“a grass green
earthpony mare with a pink mane”hey, it’s me!