Rainbow Dash is faced with a choice after her dream ends up not being what she hoped it would be.
This is a first person point of view story told from Rainbow Dash's perspective, this was particularly hard for me because I have never had to do any first person stories that actually have interaction with other ponies in them. This was an idea that popped into my head and I decided to write it down.
The cover art is a picture I pulled from the Deviantart user Twigileia
Page generated in 0.106 seconds
Total duration
894 users online
365,468 hits today, 2,724,632 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
Dem feels...
I very much liked this story. It was a fun one to read. I did see a few slips into present tense, but for the most part, I was able to ignore them. And the letter from Twilight... Didn't flow like Twilight's words. It felt a bit choppy/broken up. Other than that, nicely done. I'll give an upvote. You deserve it.
Well done.
<3 DarqFox
2227876
Well, as I said I've never done a first person story that had to deal with interactions before, so it was a bit tough keeping tense.
On the note of the letter, I did that a few times, but I wasn't really able to find a version that I was really happy with, I completely agree, but that was the best way I was able to word it in my opinion.
Thank you for the upvote!
2229366
I'll be getting into that in a 'sister/counterpart story' that will be showing Twi's point of view in all this.
Wow, that, that was quite touching. It's short, sad, and a great one-shot. The portrayal of Spitfire as a complete douchebag boss who only cares about the fame was well done, I mean, it's pretty cold hearted to say "we don't need quitters" in front of someone who lost a loved one recently. So well done for invoking a feel fest within me, I have to hide it right now (on the train and all). Didn't help that 'May It Be' from the credits of Lord Of The Rings: Fellowship Of The Ring came on as I was reading it, known by me as one of the most emotionally charged songs of all time and almost always gives me a reaction. So hopefully I don't look too weird on the train right about now.
So, all in all, a wonderful story, came into it not knowing what to expect, and came out with a new favourite. Will definitely read this again at some later date.
2419729
Well thank you.
Honestly this was meant to be a short story, an exercise as I started to get back into writing again after my long break because of my dog passing, and I am happy to say I did get back into it after this story, I do plan on writing a sequel to this story, well, more like a prequel, that shows Twilight's point of view, at some point.
But again, thank you very much, it makes me happy to know people are still looking into my stories, lol.
This is interesting.
I like it.
As emotional as this story was, I can't give it a like or a favorite.
And it's because of one major thing that ruins the experience for me:
Spitfire's behavior.
I know this has the alternate universe tag, so I had to expect some divergences from canon, but portraying Spitfire the way she was in here is something that I just can't accept, whether a story takes place within the mane universe or not.
In fact, had Spitfire been portrayed as being sympathetic towards Rainbow's situation, I'd have actually given this a favorite, since the rest of it was well written and very emotional.
Where
Is the romance tag?