This story is On Hiatus until I have finished some other projects or this miraculously becomes a featured story, lol. (Mainly just the first one, the second one there is a 'Best case scenario' kind of thing)
A traumatic event separated Rainbow Dash from Scootaloo at a very young age and neither of them remember. Find out what happens when the past is unraveled and new bonds are formed.
If you like what you read here don't forget to 'watch' and 'favorite', or if not, drop a comment letting my know why so I can improve my next chapters!
The original author of the picture is deviant Art user Frankier77
Chapters (10)
seems legit.... like awesomely legit... like I want this now... like I will give this story a roofie so I can take it back to my place and make sweet sweet squeals with it... I havent taken my meds yet...
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Wasn't really rushed all to much to me, but, I am the writer so I am a bit bias, can you be a bit more specific?
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Oooook then, and Yes I would appreciate it if you did not make a Sequel to this, at least not until it is finished (If you can even make a sequel at that point as its planned to be a long one story)
1205573 its a joke... baby stories are sequels
Seems a bit rushed... but prologues are hard to not rush.
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Well, there was other things there originally, but, we (We being me, Enlistedpony, and avorin) were unable to come up with something better to really put there so it was decided to leave it at that.
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This. This exactly. Take your time, you're rushing through potentially valuable story telling by trying to get to the reveal right away. There are entire stories dedicated to Rainbow discovering the orphan Scoot, you don't need to rush it right away. The other thing to look out for is "Talking Head Syndrome." That is, you have a lot of dialogue but not a lot of description. Please see the following comment I've blatantly taken from another fic:
Also:
You've got a good start, I look forward to see how this unfolds.
The room became engulfed in a blaze of fire that quickly filled up the entire room.
Redundant sentence is redundant
Two things; You could elaborate a bit more on Dash finding out that Scoots is homeless and, it's "sparse", not spartan. Other than that, this looks good and I'm looking forward to more
This fic is going to be amazing, I can feel it in my bones
Loved the originality, hopping for more
I really like this fic.
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Thanks
Pretty nice until now. Looking forward to more chapters.
Bloody hell, this is going to make me cry later on. I know it.
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Spoilers, you'd be right.
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Actually, Spoiler
You don't be sad, well you will be, but the heartwarmingness will balance it out.
Also, you would probably be more mad at certain ponies that have yet to be mentioned in the story than you will sad......but, spoilers.
Man I sure do love this story. Actually I love all Scootadash stories, except clop ones
I need more, right now, this second.
Awww, another great chapter!
Moustache for you!
"...I have my hands full as it is with my newest orders..."
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Otherwise, keep up the good work.
So interesting
argh right in the feels
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As it was intended to I hope.
A cliffhanger
I should have seen this coming, I look forward to your next chapter.
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Technically its not that much of a cliff hanger, I mean, it could be worse, it could be the end of the story, lol.
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*Spoilers*
Their going to find out very soon that, and I'm sorry, but that's when everything changes.
Good work I would like to see more.
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Hopefully I will upload another part tomorrow. (I.e. Later today for those of you in and before Eastern Standard/Daylight Time)
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Just wanted to state that I fixed this.
"You'll Be In My Heart" would fit very well here.
I have to Say that Nurse kinda sucks at giving bad news
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Yes, that was intended.
2 updates within the same day, this has to be a dream come true
I think I would really like to see somepony take the administration of that orphanage and rip them a new one. I think that Luna would be the perfect pony to head up the investigation. How about a sub plot if you haven't done this already. Just a thought, it's your story after all. Looking forward to more of this .
1225953 agreed totally awesome but does this double feature mean you won't be updateing anytime soon?
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I hope thats not true, although this may be one of those 'spur of the moment' writings.
Yes send Luna, Celestia may be to mad to do it herself
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Indeed you are correct, there will be no update tomorrow, in fact part 5 was meant for tomorrow, but I uploaded it today, because I am awesome, don't expect an update for a few days while me and my team write the next few chapters, We try to get ahead so we can release a chapter a day, we will release chapter 6 sometime within the next 4 or 5 days.
More! MORE!!! :D If this was Reddit I'd Upvote you to heaven!!!
1226190 i hope that the people that have tortured scootaloo burn, long, and slowly.
My heart!
Such a good story.
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Hmm, my editor said something very similar while I was writing that scene, lol.
I was told not to give out anymore spoilers
But I can say this, regardless of what happens in the story, certain people are pushing for Celestia to send them to the sun, granted I can't tell you what is actually going to happen, but sending them to the sun for eternity is on the table.
I'm really hoping we get to see what happens to that orphanage once Celestia gets word of what went on there.
Catharsis is Magic. 
1228549 no send them somewhere else them being on the sun would discrace celestia's sun or luna's moon
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If you have a better idea, I am all ears.
I actually (Jokingly serious) suggested to my team that we send them to the moon, then send the moon into the sun, then send the sun into a black hole, but meh, that's just me. I figure if they are powerful to move the sun and the moon, they can make new ones, right? lol.
1230730 have them banished to the griffon lands or dragon lands while whereing signs that say "FREE FOOD".
signs must be branded to the skin.
If anyone saw my last comment before I removed it, I just put it up there to mess with Enlistedpony, lol, ignore it if you saw it. *IT WAS NOT A SPOILER* It was a fake spoiler to mess with enlisted, lol.
This is just WONDERFUL!
This NEEDS to be featured and this NEEDS to have more upvotes!