Chapter 1
Laura groaned as the sunlight seeped under her eyelids. Birds chirped happily around her. She rolled over and growled under her breath. The sun was too bright, the birds were noisy, and the grass was tickling her side. Wait. . . grass? Laura's eyes shot open as she sat up.
"What the. . . ?"
She was laying in a large open field, a forest just to her left. She'd never been here before, but everything looked very familiar. Laura ran her hand through her hair in confusion. Only. . . she had no hand. Lowering her arm, she gazed at where her hands should have been. A hoof. A brown hoof. Laura jumped to her feet, stumbling slightly once on all fours. She looked herself over, barely containing her excitement. She was a pony, and not just a pony, but a pegasus. White main body with brown thrown in. A blonde mane and tail. She was a paint!
"Oh my gosh, oh my gosh, oh my gosh!"
Laura flexed her wings, catching sight of something on her flank.
"What. . . my cutie mark!"
Laura tried to get a good look at her cutie mark, unintentionally chasing her tail. She grew dizzy and sat down before finally getting a good look at her destiny. It was a. . . feather? No, a drop of ink was at the tip. So a quill? Made sense, she did love to write.
A groan interrupted her thoughts. Not to far from here she woke up, were two other ponies. One was a dark brown earth pony with short red hair. The mare was older then Laura, if the slight wrinkles and crow feet had anything to say. The earth pony sat up and rubbed her face. She blinked and looked over at Laura. The earth pony's eyes widened.
"Is. . . is that a pegasus?!"
That voice. . .
"Mom?"
The mare squinted and tilted her head.
"Laura?"
Anna tried to stand up on two feet, only to come crashing down to the ground. Laura walked forward, trying to not trip on her own hooves.
"Careful, Mom. Stand on all fours."
Anna shakily stood up before looking herself over.
"L-Laura. . . am. . . am I a horse?"
Laura pinned back her ears in uncertainty.
"Err, no. Um. . . we're ponies."
"PONIES?!"
The stallion next to Anna grumbled.
"Give me five more minute, and then I'll get up, Anna."
Laura smiled behind her hoof. There was no question that that was her dad.
"Peter! Peter, wake up!"
Peter slowly uncurled and looked up at Anna. He was a light brown unicorn with a blonde mane. Peter blinked, shook his head, and blinked again.
"Anna? Laura?"
Peter looked between his wife and his daughter before closing his eyes and laying back down.
"Nope, not today. Not happening. I'll wake up soon after a night of a little too much beer. I bet Laura has that pony show she likes playing on the TV. Yep."
Anna snorted and stomped her hooves,
"This is not a dream, Peter! Wake up!"
Peter looked up at Anna.
"It has to be a dream, there is no way this is real."
He laid back down and rolled over. . . and promptly bolted up right and jumped forward.
"There is no way in he-"
"Hay."
"-that this is happening! I refuse to believe it!"
Peter paced back and forth, stumbling slightly. Anna shifted her weight before she spoke up.
"Alright, we all need to calm down. First things first. What is the last thing any of us remember?"
Peter frowned.
"Last thing I remember I was reading a book in bed."
Anna nodded.
"Yeah, I was putting away some clean sheets. Laura, what were you doing?"
Laura shuffled her hooves awkwardly before looking down.
"I was day dreaming about Ponyville, and then I wish I could go there. . . "
Anna and Peter exchanged glances.
"That may explain why we're here, but not how."
Laura perked up.
"Oh! Twilight could totally help us! We just need to go to Ponyville!"
Laura turned around and started to trot towards Ponyville. They could just see it beyond the meadow they were in. Anna raced after her daughter, grabbing her tail in her hooves.
"Woah, woah, woah! We can't go into Ponytown-"
"Ponyville"
"-Ponyville, Ponytown. It doesn't mater. It's just a stupid show."
Laura frowned and shuffled her wings in anger.
"It is not some stupid show. It is a wonderful world that teaches about friendship and tolerance. Don't diss it."
"Laura, none of it's real! It's just a baby's cartoon!"
"If I remember correctly, you would always ask me 'Laura, you do know those ponies aren't real, right?'. Yet, here we are. They're real, as real as us!"
Anna stomped her hoof.
"Don't talk to me like that! I am the adult here, and what I say goes!"
"I'm 18, that makes me an adult too. You keep telling me I'm an adult, act like it. Well, I am!"
"18 or not, I'm older and smarter than you! It's my way or the highway!"
Laura dropped to her haunches, and looked at her mother.
"Alright, what's your idea?"
Anna grimaced before looking to her husband. Peter raised a hoof defensively.
'Don't look at me, I am not getting into the middle of this.'
Laura shook her head and stood up.
"I thought so. I watch the show, I learned about this world. So I think that since I know so much about this place, I should take the lead."
Peter nodded.
"I have to agree with her, Anna. We know nothing about this place. Laura does. Our best bet is to follow her lead."
Anna simply snorted and shrugged her shoulders. Laura nodded and started to trot towards the town.
A dark figure grinned from his hiding place in the Everfree Forest. He watched as the three humans turned ponies walked towards Ponyville. His pawns were in place, and the chess board was set up. With the game in motion, all he needed to do was sit back and watch as everything fell into place.
"Oh, this is going to be fun."
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I DEMAND MOAR!
in bed*
Other than that, good job keep up the good work.
You have intrigued me
let's see where you go with this tentative fav
I saw this, clicked read later, and went back to the Scrubs episode I was watching. After several minutes, I realized that I couldn't focus and just had to know.
Well, at least it's better than that time I decided Lines and Webs was good after school reading. Much like that time, I don't regret a single minute of it. Please continue, good sir.
"Pinkie?"
"Yes CDR?"
"Table please."
"Here you go."
"Thanks."
*uses table to bash through groups of people blocking the path to the fic*
Well, this is an interesting take. Faved and liked.
Quick but funny, MOAR!
moving a little fast for my taste but still amazing work.
Moving a bit too fast, and theiir reacions were too light. But still good.
'minuet' -> minute
'weigh' ->weight
'tv' -> TV
'simple' -> simply
It's Sombra! He's working from the shadows! (Normally I would have accused Discord, but I felt like letting King Sombra be the one accused of bringing humans into Equestria for once.)
This is kind-of interesting so far.
Oh, I love them so! Glad to see a character with such refined taste, even in a disoriented state of mind.
Here are the classics, you're welcome.
... Sorry, I couldn't resist.
Plotwise. Personally, I would be more horrified and confused to wake up just to find myself as a horse kinda out of nowhere. (Or dragon, for that matter, despite what my avatar might suggest.) But hey, it's comedy, so I would give it a pass.
Skipped the how. Skipped the existential angst. Skipped the long drawn-out stumbling with hooves. Skipped mourning hand loss. Skipped stumbling around the Everfree forest fighting monsters. Skipped a huge injury and hospital stay in Ponyville. Skipped endlessly pondering reality vs fiction. Very show-cannon - no vulgarity, no "I'm a real physical pony with fur, nudity, and vulgar bits", no bathroom quandry.
Just got right down to it. Quick, to-the-point, efficient. Good solid idea with the 'rents involved.
LOVE IT!
Now how do I follow the *story...* I followed someone else, but it didn't alert me when they had new chapters out. I'm following YOU but I don't see a button to follow the story... :P
*follows you and hopes for the best...*
This is good. The HiE story has been done a lot and it's nice to see one with the person who wanted to be there having one potential problem. And the fact that Laura has a little more knowledge of Equestria than her parents will make for some comic scenes
Join the club. I've got a similar work.
We need more stories where a brony has their parents come along for the ride.
Anna reminds me of my mother... I hate my mother.
Will wait and see.
Good concept, bad grammar.
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I agree with the last line. This WILL be fun.
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I do love it
Hmmmmm...Not everyday I see a cliched fimfic storyline (Fan in Equestria) given a genuinely original twist (In my knowledge at least). Still, I expect an explenation beyond a simple wish. This story in all honesty sounds like a comedy plotline but I see potential in this story and will keep an eye on it.
Hmm.... short, concise and to the point. This idea intrigues me very much.
I suggest finding a pre-reader/editor though. There were plenty mistakes that someone else who's familiar with correct grammar would've caught easily. The dialogue is a bit choppy and descriptions are rather vague, but it's nothing that plenty of practice can't fix.
Gonna favorite and hit 'dat like button for now. This is something that I haven't seen done before in an HiE, and I like it a lot.
2166180 Clicking the favorite button (the little star next to the like/dislike bar) alerts you when there are new updates. Hitting the follow button alerts you when an author has either posted a new fic or a new blog post. Hope this helps.
Her parents came with her?
Brilliant.
You area genusus!
MOAR
I like it! Another!
But seriously, I like it. There are way to many HiE stories but this one is just a little bit different.
MOAT!!!!
The mom.
I think that there is a secret meeting moms attend to compare notes on how to be bossy and ill-tempered. I'm pretty sure mine was in charge of it. That being said, it reminds me of home. I eagerly await the next chapter.
if you ever go to ponyvilla somehow the first do is to visit Twilight
I really don't like the "Brony wishes self into Equestria through IMAGINATION", but this is an interesting way to throw a wrench in the wish fulfillment works. Conflict that really is kind of ignored about these stories is what happens to your family? What happens to those you left behind? Cleans up a little bit of the problems with the story genre,, yet opens up a new passageway. The clear solution here is ANGST. ALL OF IT. MAKE THEM CRY FOR THE FACT THAT THEY WILL NEVER SEE THE PEOPLE THEY LOVE AGAIN! CRY!
But seriously, I would like to see this go there, and even if they dont, it seems like it'll be fun either way
Oh, come on! No drama, no problems with the parents, and they easily follow their child's lead! There is no way that that kind of idea is realistic. But at least it is simple writing and doesn't entail a bunch of nonsensical emotional bullshit!
I look forward to seeing more of your work, carry on, and good luck.
ISA
An interesting concept, to be sure, but your characters don't act like people...
You've just woken up to find your entire family have been turned into ponies and transported to an alternate reality... are you REALLY dense enough to brush off what's right in front of your faces?
Most likely it's a dream, but what does it matter regardless? You might as well get your bearings.
Also, the parents' regard for their daughter's fandom is really douchy, and the daughter's defense of MLP sounds more like what someone with no insight into the brony fandom THINKS a brony might say defensively. It all comes off as stilted, and I don't get any impression of their personalities beyond, "daughter is pegasister: parents disapprove."
Thing is, there needs to be more to these characters than their positions on a single issue. Elsewise, the upcoming story is going to be grating, annoying and very boring. You can't put bland characters in and expect the canon ponies' personalities to do all the work in generating hi-jinks that entertain the reader.
Not quite what it said in the contract, did it?
Or have they failed to read the fine print?
Regardless, this shall prove to be a most curious outcome.
Continue. We shall be watching on most eagerly.
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Moat!? What moat? I don't see a moat anywhere.
Interesting story. Can't wait to see more.
4094003 Typo I meanr Moar not Moat
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I know. I just couldn't help myself.
More plz
7037355 I think it's dead...
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this makes me sad that it was shot down before taking flight