Celestia's final moments as Equestrian ends.
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You have the seeds for a good story here: there's a sense of dread - worldwide, in fact, the stakes are made clear, and there is a clear price to pay for harmonious recovery. The problem comes in during execution. This feels a little too rushed for a chapter not even 2,000 words long. There's enough here to fill another chapter, and it could have certainly used it. Ivan's inclusion was a little much; there was no real "hook" for why he should be there other than for plot convenience.
I want to like this, but there's just a lot missing from it.
I get the feeling it's a tribute story of some sort...
nice imagery
when i saw that picture......ow my heart and teary eyes....
when reading and finishing the last part of story.........soooo was this a dream or was this inside his head or was that implant is what caused the equestria dream and celestia was self aware that she and her world was a implant or what??????????? y u not make sense?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?