A human has his dreams fullfilled as he is transported into the world of Equestria. But he is new. So will he fit in alright, or will he be thought as a deformed ape? He finds another boy with him, but he has to learn the ways that a human has to live in Equestria. There were three other boys, but they were put into the canterlot dungeons for a reason.
Follow Justin Yang in his new life in Equestria, where he will learn how to fit in with the ponies, learn the magic of friendship, and even go on dangerous quests to save his friends.
*NOTE!: This is my first ever Fanfic that I have written. I will accept comments on how bad I am, or if I need to practice my writing. I know that some parts are a little off, but I'll get better in writing soon! That means that the storyline will become better also as I improve my skills!
Looks interesting. Will read later.
I'm getting notifications that people are favoriting this! Three likes in 10 minutes... seems like A LOT to me! (Since I just started writing Fanfics, you know.) I'll keep working on this. Although I think I'll put out 3-6 chapters a day or something. But the holidays are near, so that'll put me back too. I'll try to upload chapters as fast as I can. This Fanfic is going to be a long one.
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Oh my, that's awfully a lot of chapters!
Make sure to get a pre-reader, and don't get too ahead of yourself. The more you rush, the more grammatical errors you'll miss upon writing. Write when you feel like it, otherwise you won't get good results. If you already have a plan written out, that's great! I'll put this on my read later list.
This will be the second HiE I would read.
See you soon with feedback!
10/10 so far! 3 to 6 chapters a day would be awesome! Keep up the good work.
This is good so far, I will be watching.
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Thanks everyone! ;D Subscribe to me on Youtube too... if you want to... my username is OfficialTheDDJBron3
that gives me a truth....CANTERLOTS NAME USED CAMELOTS NAME!
also,CHAIRMODE ACTIVATE AND A BROFIST FOR AWESOME STORY!
1762454Should I change it to "dungeons of canterlot"? I could if more people agree. Although it'd be a little annoying to have to find the sentence with all the rest and change it.
1762464no,its fine.
HMM, 2 dislikes.... they'll regret that later on. I'm planning to have something cool later.
not a bad start, seems interesting tho i'd be locked up quickly. no way i could resist hugging the CMC lol.
Hmm, his reaction to suddenly finding himself in Equestria was not what I hoped for...
But it's still good either way!
The words 'alien' constantly remind me of Spore.
Acceptable fic start, though. Got a +15 rep. bonus.
Your idea of Equestria is pretty interesting. I will continue to read, and I hope you will continue to interest me.
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Oh who am I kidding? I'm not like that at all bro
Story is fantastic so far, and sure, it can use some grammer work (just an itty bit), but it's fantastic! Faved and liked!
REGIDAR BLOCKING IN PROGRESS.
*Initiating*
*Task Complete*
Press any key to continue
] u
Except that one
] m
And that one
] a
No, not that one either
] d
Oh, so close
]
Wait, did you seriously press space? Denied.
] b
Still going eh? well A+ for trying.
] r
I'm running out of ways to tell you to that you've failed
] o
Console has been locked. Have a nice day!
Mergh...
I don't know...something tells me that he should not go to Ponyville.
Anyway, you do have some potential in your story. Continue like that, and you'll sure earn some respect. Another +15 rep. bonus.
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Doubtful. Spelling and grammar mistakes, as well as a story and plot that has been done to death by the fandom.
If meat is prohibited, why don't they eat fruits instead of grass and those things? I'd do that because I hate vegetarian stuff(not saying I'm a carnivore, though)
Anyway, you just earned a favorite.
1762633XD, I'd love to eat grass! *Walks outside and eats grass* ;D
1762584 What? I've been thinking of changing the description anyway, it needs to match the story a little more.
1762582 Umad bro?
Must... work.. on... grammar... must.... make... people... happy....! I'm just kidding. I'll work on my grammar as I write. Although I might only be able to upload 2 chapters... due to my family being busy today.
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I'm just uncomfortable with wish fulfillment stories.
Screw LtD.
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You have to do this!
>inb4 regidar
...
>inb4 featured
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*Vomits*
That's why I like being an Omnivore in Spore. Though sometimes I'm also a Herbivore.
Also, do those ponies recognize the Omnivore diet, or they only know Herbivore and Carnivore? If they do, most likely Alex told them.
1762730 When Alex told Justin the information stuff. It took me awhile to figure out that stuff. XD
HA HA! Wish Fulfillment!
I really hate wish fulfillment stories.
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Huh?
Though, he got lucky humans are Omnivores. If humans were Carnivores, being a vegetarian would be much harder.
1762748 It'd be kind of weird being a carnivore... Yumnomnom.... I kind of like eating vegetables with my meat.
OK SO I'M HERE
The concept:
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The execution:
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All in all:
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1762794 Okay. Whatever you want to say. I think I understand. ?_?
Sounds like this story was getting likes before the downvote wall hit. I find that interesting.
COMPLIMENT: I commend your willingness to improve.
1763168 Yeah.. sometimes I just don't get it
I had likes coming in, but then the downvotes appeared... came in really fast in 30 minutes... 
I'll continue the story anyway, just for the people who like this so far!
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Brofist and Brohoof my good bro!
1763195 Thanks. Also found out I may only upload 1 chapter or 0 chapters today... I'll make up for it tommorow! *I'm busy with family stuff and friends today
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Heh, it's fine.
But seriously, like some other people said. Make sure you have pre-readers. And don't overexert yourself. Don't write to please your readers. Write to please yourself.
Also, the concept is overdone and there is some grammar issues. Don't rush. and get some pre-readers.
1763224 Okay... I'll try I guess. I'm glad I'm thirteen, I'll have a long time to practice! Turning fourteen in june.
Also, this needs an editor pretty badly. Slow down on chapters and focus more on quality.
FUCK AMERICA!!!! BYM!!
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OH GOD
Get off of the internet RIGHT NOW if this is how you type.
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Get of the internet right now if that isn't how you type.
1763463nope.WAV
1763407 Excuse me, but what was the justification for that comment. That was completely unnecessary, and nationalistic.
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So your a marine...
1764876 No, I am actually a teacher up in Norway. The marine in the title is a refernce to the Space Marines from Warhammer 40K
However marine doesn't meant US marine.
Marine means seaboard soldier.
ALso, what is your problem with the US ?
The green and red bar are racing... o,o...
1762760 And that's how true Omnivores eat.
Bomb!
GAFAA! I'm so busy with my REAL LIFE that I keep forgetting about to write! I'm so, so sorry! My parents also like to limit my time on the computer, so I'll try my best to keep up with my writing guys!