• Member Since 29th Oct, 2012
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Earl of Grey

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I have no idea what I'm doing.

All the more interesting. Me likey! :pinkiehappy:

DashFire. DEFINITELY at the top of my read later. have a like instantly.

Let me know what you think when you get around to it.

1538622 in about 4 or 5 hours when i get home from school

Not upvoting, not downvoting. good, but can't give it an upvote.

Any particular reason why? I'm always looking to improve.

I don't have any real reason why. I just...couldn't get into it for some reason. Maybe it was HOW you told the story. At first, I thought it was a stallion Pegasus. Then i thought it was Soarin'. Then I found out it was Dashie. Then I realized that this was Dashie x Spitty. I was...confused, I guess I could say. I liked but didn't like at the same time. Really hard to describe. I'll give you an upvote, but I do that to all fics anyway. I'm alot like Fluttershy when it comes to that.

I figured the fact that I tagged Dash and Spitfire as the main characters was clear enough, but I can see where you're coming from. There's definitely a bit of ambiguity at the start, something which was semi-intentional but also just a side effect of what tends to happen when I write stream-of-consciousness like this. I thank you for your like, and hope you enjoyed the story anyway.

I guess I did and (between you and me) I don't look at the tags! :twilightblush: If it's clop and the description sounds good, I read it. Right now I like M/M and M/M/M clops. My editor/mentor/only friend Fimbulvinter has me hooked. His stories are just so awesome! To me at least. Most hate M/M and M/M/M clop right off.

I'll hand it to you, this was a solid story. Even aside from the clop, your descriptions and the picture you paint in one's mind was extraordinary. I found this story pretty much riveting just based off of the imagery and wordsmithing.

"... of smoke and honey... " has to be one of my favorite lines, one I just might use in the future. Keep up the good work! :pinkiehappy:

Thank you! You complimenting my prose like that means a lot to me, since it's the thing I try to focus on most in a story like this. I'll try to live up to the standard I've set here in the future.

Believe me, I understand what goes into writing something like this, and I must say that you have quite the knack for creating a scene in one's mind. You have a gift for fine prose, and I look forward to seeing what you do in the future.

:pinkiegasp: Sunyo lief rona mi'n igrattianos!!!
Simply wonderful and exciting.

It's a hot an interesting tale. Honestly, I'd like to know more about their relationship.

This was so freaking amazing! I can't get over how well put this awesome story is! I love the hurricane aspect. I love the "how it is to live" aspect. The details, the rain, the flashing lightning, the intensity of dash and spitfire . It's all so beautiful. Good job, 4 hoofs up.

Thank you very much!

You have a very interesting narrative style that actually works really well for this story. It's very intriguing and sets the mood perfectly. You have very detailed and beautiful descriptions that never gets dull, which is a huge plus. The sex was nice too. Personally, I'm a bit tired of this concept where they're not really together, but either just meet randomly at a bar, are nothing more than fuckbuddies etc., but that's just me.

The only thing that really warrants any complaints is the ambiguity in the beginning of the story. Don't think of your stories as fanfics posted on this site, but think of them as real books. Don't rely on character tags to convey anything. Instead, add something like 'my cyan blue fur/hooves, my rainbow mane' or something along those lines to make sure your audience knows what's going on for sure.

Lastly, it appears that this is an alternate account. Mind telling me which is your main one? I'd like to see more of your stuff.

1578423 Thanks a bunch for the insight and praise!

I definitely understand where you're coming from with the whole 'not really together' type thing, but this was really more of an experiment than anything else, so I didn't want to tie myself up with a more involved plot/relationship in case I didn't want to continue it later. Judging by the reception this has received so far, though, I may actually decide to expand upon their relationship in the future.

As for the ambiguity, I actually agree with you, and will be making edits accordingly sometime soon.

Oh, and I'll PM you that link to my main account now. :pinkiesmile:

so. much. fricking. awesomeness.

I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Dude that was beautiful. You are an amazing author and I hope you continue to write:pinkiesmile:

Don't worry, I have no plans of stopping.

DashFire clop, poetic and meaningful. My life, complete.

1634694 Thank you very much.

This was truly BEAUTIFUL!

As an adrenalin junky storm riding surfer, I can truly appreciate the thrill Rainbow gets when she rides the lightning stop. I absolutely love it. You truly captured the essence of the thrill of riding nature's storms. It is unlike any other adrenalin sport, because the storm itself has a personality, and it is ever shifting, it's ALIVE, and it is the reason I live.

Oh, and the sex was nice too.

TC likes my story?


Also, I think you'll be pleased to know this is part one of a three-part oneshot trilogy.

:moustache:Spike of approval

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