Ever since she was a little filly, Lyra has had dreams of two-legged creatures with technology far beyond ponykind's own. She knows they exist, and she's determined to find any and all information about them.
Blake Johnson has spent the last several days running for his life. He has seen and done things that he wishes he could completely remove from his memory. He'll do anything to survive. But will his past drive him to the point of insanity, and will there be anyone there for him if he does?
Chapters (22)
um if he is going west why was he in germany
Nice story. Keep up the Chapters.
102108 I thought he was in Switzerland.
102108 Yes he is in Switzerland, not Germany.
102123 Thanks, I'll try to have at least one chapter a week.
damn cliffhanger!
More chapters and please make them quick updates
111813 Me gusta cliffhangers. It keeps people wanting to read moar.
111898 I will try my best, but writing is a tough process (for me). Plus, I also have school to worry about. I hope one or two updates a week is good for you.
111905
Yes.
Great Story, I look forward to more
116367 Muchos Gracias. Expect the next chapter by Tuesday or Wednesday.
111905
that's okay just don't make them any shorter then they are now
grate story btw 5 star and tracking
117779 Thanks. Don't worry about the chapters being super short. It's not my style to have 1,000 word chapters coming out like everyday, because it can hinder the quality of the story. I think it's better to think it through first and proofreading multiple times instead of churning out short chapters constantly.
Quality over quantity, as some might say.
FIRST and when you meant to spell trio you spelled 'tree' other than that i did not make notice any other mistakes and i can't wait for the next chapter
Great chapter, I avidly look forward to more!
More Please, want to see how he will deal with the guards and Luna
122690 You're first on the chapter, but thirteenth overall... But anyways thanks for catching that, it's been fixed.
122695 Thanks for commenting! Knowing that I have people who like my story is what keeps me writing.
122706 You'll get it, but don't expect updates every two or three days. It will be probably more of the lines of every four or five days. But thanks for reading!
I'm liking this story so far, the advice I would give would be to make sure your story still has a plot once everyone sits down and actually talks to each other. Right now, your story is being driven by Blake's desire to not be caught, but once that's settled you'll need something to fall back on. And I'll say it again, I'm liking what you have so far and I look forward to reading more.
122723 Thanks for the advice! I've actually already experienced this exact thing with my last fic. I got pretty far into the story but couldn't think of ways to continue it on so I had to shut it down. But don't worry, I've got plenty of different vague ideas of how I want this story to go.
u already know what I think -.-
I want in!!!
your the only one besides me who actully
can use my OC and get every thing right
123079 Muehehehehe... maybe. I'm not sure if I can find a good place to put Heat Stream in, but I'll try.
Awesome
dont forget to keep sending me chapters for review
Good so far, just hope Blake doesn't open fire on anypony.
123096 KK
123671 I don't want to spoil much of what's gonna happen in the future. You'll just have to wait and see, although I have a great idea for a cliffhanger for the next chapter.
Waiting for Moar...
But I were him I'd at least wear undies so if anyone tackled me to the ground it would be a lot less embaressing (ESP. If they tacked him like AJ did...)
good to here
good to hear* dame my spelling
just as expected, this was just as good as the previous chapter keep them coming
124079 You realize you can edit comments now, right?
124024 He just doesn't want to get hypothermia or anything. He would rather be safe than sorry, plus wet undies is kinda uncomfortable.
124418
Wet undies over jungle mode anyday for me.
Jeorge, jeorge, jeorge of the jungle, THAT'S NOT ME!
they are going to find him naked i know it...
125284
125342 You'll see. Next chapter will be out sometime today. I'm finished writing it but I still need to proofread and change some parts that I think need to be re-written.
Daàaaaaaaaawwwwwwwww
damm PTSD
127085 Yes! I was hoping at least a few people would get that reaction.
127190 Basically, yeah. That's what I was going for to make the story more interesting.
127252
now, i know that ive read a story with the human suffering from PTSD somewhere...
127269 Whiplash?
127281 you want some whiplash? here's some whiplash!!!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cPh_9sRJycI
127386
I meant the fanfiction "Whiplash"
127402 so you don't like metallica? that makes me a sad pand-- er pony
127481 I'm just not the heavy metal kinda guy...
it seems like that for a lot of bronies but why? same with sports it seems like not many bronies like nfl and such again i ask why>>127502
127503 Taste in music I guess. Maybe bronies are too interested in remixes of the show, possibly. And I don't mind the NFL, but the only interesting game for me is the Super Bowl. I am a huge college football fan though.
It's solid, So far. I was reading late at night so I'm wondering how credible I am when I say this but I think I saw a few grammatical errors.
It's not Twilight's search or Twilight's alien. I think you mistook 'thy' and 'thine' for meaning 'the'.
I've never heard the phrase 'private square'. I'd recommend replacing it.
127558 Honestly, I'm not surprised. I'm only human.
127836 That I'll probably replace. For some reason I feel uncomfortable saying "penis" or "dick", so I try and find words to replace it. The "private square" thing is just inside joke for the people at my school.
127831 Umm... that's what I did take them for.
"ART THOU READY FOR THY SEARCH FOR THINE ALIEN?” Luna shouted deeply.
This translates to: "Are you ready for the search for the alien?"
I dunno, I'm not really fluent in ancient English or whatever you want to call it. If you would be so glad as to tell me what it should really be, then be my guest.
127965
"ART THOU READY FOR THE SEARCH FOR THE ALIEN?”
127965 <"ART THOU READY FOR THY SEARCH FOR THINE ALIEN?” Luna shouted deeply.>
Translation "ARE YOU READY FOR YOUR SEARCH FOR YOUR ALIEN?" Luna shouted deeply.
Well now, in the words of Big Boss: "You're... pretty good"