Why did Chrysalis attack Canterlot when she already ruled a Changeling Hive full of Changelings that loved her? Was it desire for more power, was there a love famine starving her subjects, or was there another reason behind it?
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"Why did Chrysalis attack Canterlot when she already ruled a Changeling Hive full of Changelings that loved her? Was it desire for more power, was there a love famine starving her subjects, or was there another reason behind it?"
She already said the reason she attacked Canterlot was to feed her changelings. Maybe put an alternate universe tag on it? I unno, just an opinion.
Grace - Tony Iommi with Glenn Hughes
Chrysalis already stated that the attack was to feed her changelings. This is probably AU...
Interesting conception for start. Let's see how it will roll out
Aanndd the plot thickens.
The magic body-switching spell felt like a bit much.
But the last part? Brilliant.
Strange can't find any other word to describe it
Interesting. You should make a sequel sometime. Perhaps one where somehow someway the truth can be revealed.
1678332 What this guy said.
Sorry but your story does not explain why Celestia in Chrysalis body would be so mean to Twilight and her friends, I fell this whole idea wont work unless you change what happen in wedding event.
Eh. The thoroughness of that geas made it feel like a blatant plot device, and I think Celestia's 'fall' should have been slower - she wouldn't have forsaken her ponies on such short notice. I picture it happening in stages - first frantic denial, of course, she can't leap to acceptance too quickly. Then acclimation to her new station, grudgingly, realizing she has to perform her duties as a queen or an entire species will die out; she's too compassionate to doom them all on petty revenge. Then the grudges can grow - frustration that nobody in her court has noticed the deception, anger that nobody's realized the truth. Constant rage at Chrysalis for stealing her life, and it's easier to feel hatred like this, now that she isn't the perfect ruler of the land. Feeling her changelings through the Hive and feeling their love, believing that they're more loyal subjects than hers ever were. She develops an active love for her changelings and hatred for the country that let her fall from grace without batting an eye - then she makes the invasion.
It's a cool premise, but I think it needs some work.
2991415 Maybe I should expand this story?
3137494 Yes, I think that'd be a good idea. Things just need to happen more slowly, and more onscreen, to make this work.
When real life lets me, I'll work more on this, I could add several more chapters.
I really love your appreciation of the Changeling concept and species, I'm not overstating it when I say your grasp of their biography and workings is the best I've seen. I envy your imagination in working this concept as well; the Celestia/Chrysalis angle is usually obvious or overworked but you've managed to create a whole another angle to to relationship and the rivalry, which is brilliant.
Unlike a few other people in the comments, I actually thought it was well-paced. it's definitely crying out for a sequel, but I thought up to where you got it was well timed and you never lost the readers' attention.
Critically, I felt difficulty feeling into the separate idiosyncrasies of the different characters or situations. Each character almost spoke in the same manner, and the tension so well created by the story in certain moments wasn't particularly reflected in the characters' speech or dialogue.
Overall I really liked it though. Above all it was interesting, which is what a story should be.
3.5/5
This was very interesting. As 2991415 and 3225978 said, this could use some editing and expansion, but the premise is certainly unique, and I look forward to any possible updates.
Well this won't end well for Celestia if she breaks that law.