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When Zipp chases down Sunny to a lonely coastline with a new lead from the ancient past, she finds herself pursued by a more recent history that keeps her stuck in the present.

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Rego

Rego #1 · Mar 14th, 2023 · 3 · ·

Glad to see this enter the light of day! And I can see the improvements Alchemik helped you with to get the story across the finish line. Good emotional thoroughfare and I think you stuck the landing. Thanks for sharing.

Flamewarrior02

Flamewarrior02 #2 · Mar 14th, 2023 · 2 · ·

This is very similar to a story I’m currently working on. To the point it references the exact concept…………

Are you spying on me?

Jymbroni

Jymbroni #3 · Mar 14th, 2023 · 1 · ·

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That's crazy; I started working on this 6 months ago and finally was able to publish it. Definitely let me know when you publish yours, because I'm interested in reading it!

PuzzleMaster98

PuzzleMaster98 #4 · Mar 14th, 2023 · 1 · ·

Very nice story!!

So sad with zipp and pipp's dad!!

TheAncientPolitzanian

TheAncientPolitzanian #5 · Mar 14th, 2023 · 1 · 1 ·

Nice story. Thanks for sharing it!

Turbotune

Turbotune #6 · Mar 14th, 2023 · 1 · 1 ·

how sweet!
the title confused me for a while, but it certainly made sence in the end!

BirdsBooksBrownies

BirdsBooksBrownies #7 · Mar 14th, 2023 · 2 · 1 ·

When I saw the title, I was expecting a silly story, maybe a touch of world-building but was NOT at all prepared for the heartfelt drama/tragedy. Excellent work Jymbroni, very well done.

Admiral Producer

Admiral Producer #8 · Mar 14th, 2023 · 2 · 1 ·

This was so beautiful, I…I genuinely don’t know what to say. This story was amazing on so many levels, nice work!! I’m so glad to see a story where Sunny and Zipp just…talk. Talk about their insecurities, the expectations they have to live up to, tragedies (more so in Sunny’s case), and more. This is an absolute favorite of mine. Keep up the amazing work.

Axolotl222

Axolotl222 #9 · Mar 14th, 2023 · 5 · 1 ·

Wow, I actually don't know where to begin with this one. You really did a great job with both characters here, especially Zipp. She's intelligent and compassionate, but also very guarded and sometimes really socially inept, and you've managed to capture all of that. I also liked the parallels with how they handled their grief by wanting to alone, yet Sunny seems to have largely moved on while Zipp is still pushing others away. And while we're at the romance was written here. Yeah, it kinda took a backseat, but I think going for something more subtle really paid off here.
But I would say the best part by far is the scene with Zipp's flashbacks. That's already really hard to pull off without coming across as corny (especially in written medium), but the fact that you manged to transition so smoothly in and out of that scene was just...
Okay, I'm gonna cut this short before I keep rambling. You'd said in another comment that you spent months working on this, it shows. Please, have a Bumblebipp.

Ebonyglow

Ebonyglow #10 · Mar 14th, 2023 · 3 · 1 ·

Been dying to see more g5 stories like this. Great stuff

Jymbroni

Jymbroni #11 · Mar 15th, 2023 · 5 · 1 ·

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Thank you so much!

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After watching the movie and all the shows, I always felt like Zipp so different from Queen Haven. I wanted to explore how Zipp was changed by these events and give Sunny somepony to relate too. And in writing this Zipp definitely comes across as a Daddy's girl.

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That was probably the hardest part for me to nail down, but I'm super happy that you enjoyed it!

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There was a lot of things I wanted to explore and still keep it a ship fic, to say it wasn't stressful is a severe understatement. 6 months later I'm happy to be done with it so others can enjoy it.

Racapinang

Racapinang #12 · Mar 20th, 2023 · 1 · 1 ·

Nice one! Though I didn't really understand the plot, but it's good nonetheless.

Jymbroni

Jymbroni #13 · Mar 21st, 2023 · · 1 ·

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If I may, I was wondering if you could explain to me what you had trouble with understanding, so I can do better in the future.

Racapinang

Racapinang #14 · Mar 21st, 2023 · 3 · 1 ·

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Hiya. just got a little confused when the flashback thingy, got mixed up a bit when I'm reading, not a big deal, I'm still enjoying the story tho.

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