The Apple family is living peacefully when a new neighbor buys the farm across they way. Who else would it be but the Flim Flam Brothers! However, something is different and no one sees it more than Big Mac. He starts seeing more and more of the brothers, Flim in particular in a new light. What will this lead to? And how will the two families feel about it?
Let me tell y'all a timeless tale of forbidden love, secret rendezvous, a love that is more beautiful than the world cares to admit, and they're both boys. Brushy Bill's new story, Love, Me
Chapters (8)
Didn't noticed this story, looking forward to reading it then.
can’t tell if this is Granny Smith being Granny Smith or something that becomes relevant later, but either way very fun!
aww, can definitely imagine this for each of the Apples!
haha, great payoff on this one. my jaw would drop too
aww, love the mental image here. really reminds me of early-series Big Mac, who is more perceptive and contemplative and kind, seeing something that the other Apples understandably do not
ooh, what a great setup for a star-crossed romance against the winds of family grudges!
ooh, a narrator!
always love glimpses into Equestrian cuisine
hehe, very sitcom-y, love it
love how cutting Applejack is about farmer stuff
aww that is just so precious!
hehe, nice
aww, he doesn’t want to have to hide his secret friendship!
augh just love how disdainful Applejack is
yeah that’s exactly what skeptical Applejack’s reaction would be!
aww, so cute!
somehow the stereotypical cowboy-esque narrator voice works really well with this story!
aww, nice to see Flam pick up on it and be instantly supportive, was worried that Flim’s family would also cause trouble for the pair
love this, so sweet!
and oof! definitely a genuine early Big Mac reaction, to get flustered and panic
oh, is this the narrator making an appearance in the story? like in The Big Lebowski?
hehe, nice
aww, so Big Mac! this is the character as he should be written
and a fun meta bit, in the author directly interfering in the plot to make sure the ship resolves as it should!
aww, that “How right you are,” especially just feels very Flim!
hehe, Flam’s doing great work as a secondary character here!
hehe, and of course Apple Bloom knew all along! love it
that is definitely the kind of terrible nickname to become a pet name
augh this is too cute!
probably the least preferred way they had for Applejack to find out, but the most exciting one for their story!
do love that the vegetables are the part that Granny Smith is trying to figure out
yeah that is definitely how Applejack would respond to that
and this! pitch-perfect
oh i totally could see this! Granny Smith retroactively remembering Flim and Flam’s past actions as less bad than they were
aww, title drop!
so true
aww, friendship lesson!
love that the narrator of the tale itself is both present and unconscious in the scene. really brings up some questions!
very Apple family member way to describe a love
and what a wonderfully sweet and happy ending. thank you for it!
This was a cute story. The narrator frame story (and his inclusion in the story itself) was interesting and different from what I've seen before, and I'm sure it only adds to the effect if you do it across multiple stories. Very cool twist on the formula!
Several times, I lost track of who was speaking. It looks like you start a new paragraph when a new pony talks, which is correct, but I recommend moving the break to whenever a different character takes an action. So for example, this:
...becomes this:
That way, you tie the active character to their words, which can make it a lot clearer who is saying what.
I enjoyed the ship you chose, and it was a fun redemption story for Flim, too. Nice work!