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Discombobulated Soul


As a writer, my expansive vocabulary and thorough knowledge of grammar are my only saving graces. Please help, the world is too vorticose and gyratory!

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Harmony is dead.


After a long, desperate war, the vile ponies have finally conquered the last shreds of resistance anycreature had to offer. But as their crushed enemies are taken to their homeland in chains and cages, hope, the antithesis to ponykind, remains in the form of three individuals.

Together, they Hope to take back their lands. They Hope to rebel against the wicked ponies. They Hope to free the world, and return Harmony to it...somehow. These days, Hope is all they have left.

But at least they have each other, and with friendship, anything is possible.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 23 )

If this is a universe where heroes are villains and villains are heroes, then I'm wondering what the status of characters who were originally villains in canon but later became heroes are.

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Options for this are: A) Captured / Imprisoned, B) Enslaved via magic, C) Corrupted to the ponies' side, or D) Dead.

If this truly a mirror to canon, the option B is most likely for any non-pony reformed such as the Changelings and option C for any reformed pony such as Starlight or Trixie. As for races such as the Dragons, Kirin, Griffins, etc. Any of the options could apply.

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interesting then it turns out Thorax, who from the very beginning was originally good, does it turn out to be a villain and a traitor to his own people?

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Or since Changelings turned good in cannon, is a mass corruption event incoming?

Or since Chrysalis won in cannon intially followed by a huge loss, is she set for a huge win here?

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given the events of the first chapter in which almost all changelings seem to die in the war, I think this "mass corruption" is only possible if they rise as zombies.

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I think this "mass corruption" is only possible if they rise as zombies.

If Discord is involved, I wouldn't bet against it.

Xuf

I look forward to continuing.

Wait can we get a backstory on how the queen of the changlings(can’t spell her name) adopted cozy glow or how she was found in the first place because I feel like we need more info about what happen that caused all of this to hit the fan

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Never fear, for all of that will most certainly come later. Stay tuned, and you'll get your answers!

Straight into the action. I like it!

I also like how the evils are switched around, and not just ponies being a little bit more vile because the badguys did something. Seems like the ponies are truly ruthless and always has been, while everyone else was just trying to be left alone, or to change the world for the better. Being an AU this story got a lot more interesting for me.

I just got an idea.
What if, the entire show is just a propaganda in this story?
A story to show how ponies are perfect and spread only harmony across the lands, while in reality they are commiting atrocities.

Maybe the M6 are just actors? Maybe Luna is a broken mare who gave up on the fight she lost a thousand years ago and abstains from the dream realm for the sake of those who keep fighting.

Nice set up to dark versions of the characters. Although now I'm curious, what is the differences between the unique Changeling classes?

Aww! This chapter is so sweet! I do love cute fluff. Especially Cozy Glow fluff. I also appreciate the dialogue of Tirek and Chrysalis discussing their situation. It's all very practical and well done. Looking forward to future chapters.

They'd been found.

Should have taken more magic.

If he drained the bell dry, maybe he would be a actual threat.

Comment posted by Xuf deleted Dec 18th, 2022
Xuf

It's amazing. I look forward to continuing. :twilightsmile:

Isn't this just the mirrorverse? But blacker?

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Not quite, but pretty much. The Mirrorverse (as far as I know) focused on heroes and villains switching roles, whereas this universe is more about the roles of entire nations and races.

As of now, the story's merely in its baby phase, but there's a lot to come that will probably clear things up.

(Now if only my muse would let me work on this story more often...)

At the most interesting place :raritydespair:

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This story is far from dead! I'm focusing (or trying to, at least) on other things right now and I can't promise anything, but there's no way I'm letting it end here.

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