===Maybe you'll get a spoiler for yourself!===
OC - Randell, finds himself in the familiar world of mlp as the pony who must maintain the main plot by influencing both small and global events, but in such a way that the main plot does not change.
He must learn to manipulate fate like strings, because what can go wrong? Right?
Will he succeed? How will he act? What decisions will he take? We will find out as the story progresses, so enjoy reading, I hope you enjoy it!
===I will add tags as I write the story====
Chapters (1)
Yes!!! Cool, when is the sequel!?
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I'd like to do it this coming weekend, but I'm a student, so I can't promise
Understand. Good luck and new victories, because one already exists.
woah, kinda freaky start!
keep it up!~
I look forward to the next chapter ❤️🍓
Finally read the first chapter so far it's interesting, I am looking forward to see how it will pan out.
Also, a little suggestion to help in your writing, avoid using the same words, or sentence structure as the one before, as it often give a sense of repetitiveness, like the arriving and entering the tent part, as you can infer that it follow up to it. The dialogue is fine for the most part but the descriptions that you give in how they say it comes of as very neutral tone and makes the dialogue feel lifeless; I would suggest that you use more colorful descriptive terms like: "she cheerfully added" "I grumbled in annoyance", "he shrugged indifferently" as just to name a few examples. And the last point you might want to explain give your protagonist a little back story to him, like why he likes these kinds of fantasy books or his relation to his friends if only a few hints, or like why is his sister also with the trip, shouldn't they be in different grades, how well do they get along.
You might want to look into using a next to speech program like Balabolka (yes it's free) to help pick up on your mistakes and sentence structure.
Keep in mind these are just suggestions, best of luck on your story.
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Hey, thanks for the advice! I'll keep it in mind and for now I'm using my favourite excuse - English isn't my native language
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Same situation here, I speak French actually, but the principles can apply to almost any languages
Ooooh I wonder how this version on Discord will handle the MLP Universe or Timeline
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It might be something unexpected, but if you have ideas, I can find a place for it
Do what Spike the Dragon Brony did. Change a few minor events, but keep the major ones more or less the same. Or f the timeline, help in a few events. Like have Randall go up to Trixie to act an assistant and ask Twilight with help with some of the illusions . And possibly call Rainbow out for 'pot meet kettle' type of thing.
One major change he could affect is help Twilight expose Chrysalis or calm her down and even suggest Twi "If you think this is a fake Cadence, ask her something both the real Cadence or Celestia would know. Don't directly confront her with accusations right away, infront of Celestia you should asked Cadence "Who's Sunset Shimmer?" "
Is Discord misspelled Diskord on purpose? Because it seems that way.
Also, from the fact that it's been over 9 months since this was updated, I think the chance of there being another chapter is definitely less than 100%.
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yes it is a mistake, thanks for noticing
The reason for the lack of updates is simple and corny, I don’t have enough time and energy to study and be creative at the same time, I can’t say if there will be updates or not, but I definitely want to continue updating all my projects. Well, politics got in the way a bit too