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MasaStormyPonez


That one guy who writes cringe pee erotica and pretty weird stuff. If you enjoy the wackiness, consider giving my stories a try!

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Pipp’s and Zipp’s stomachs turned at the revelation. They REALLY didn’t want to know what kind of negotiations their mother was going to have with Alphabittle!

The fun ones. Are you gonna write something with them?

”Nice cock, Sheriff!”

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I keep associating this with Sunny, perhaps because of 4chan memes.

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Are you gonna write something with them?

Very unlikely, but that would be at least something different. Let’s see if I ever get the inspiration for that. :twilightblush:

I keep associating this with Sunny, perhaps because of 4chan memes.

In my headcanon Zipp keeps calling Hitch Sheriff instead of his real name for I think it fits her character better. It makes her feel sassier. :ajsmug:

Over all a good story but you could use a proofreader.

”Master Alphabittle is away at the moment,” some random unicorn answered as he was working, ”He said about going to have negotiations with some Pegasus queen. I don’t know the details, though. Beats me!”

Yes. "Negotiations". Totally.

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Just did some edits, but true, I don’t have one atm. :twilightsheepish:
Let’s see in the future.

Thanks for the feedback! :scootangel:

Loved this story and I've read your other story

Hard Cider incident I believe the title was some time ago.

As the writer of this story, I gotta say that the stupidest thing in this has to be that Hitch somehow knows how to have the perfect kind of sex with his more experienced partner even though it's his first time doing it (and just because he happens to have a huge dick).
But that's porn logic, I guess. :twilightblush:

Comment posted by WHEN deleted Mar 31st, 2022

”Nope, I am NOT going to have drinking contest with you, Zipp!” Hitch shook his head, ”I still get fan mail because of those pics! My old neighbor sent me a photo of her boobs and texted me she wanted to ”polish my gun”... She used to be such a sweet old lady!”

LMAAAO, this fic is pure gold, the comedy is on point

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Hitch gets all the mares, even the old ones. :raritywink:

Vik

I absolutely loved this story! I loved seeing Hitch do my favorite pee scenario (guy peeing on a tree) and I really liked the pee scene that Zipp got too. Loved reading the sex scene as well.

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Thanks! :pinkiehappy:

What I'm not happy about in this, tho, is that Zipp acts maybe a little too much out of character for the series wasn't out yet and her personality wasn't established - she wouldn't act that forward if I wrote this now. Also I didn't have a proof reader that time.

I was surprised how graphic that sex scene turned out to be, but I too enjoyed writing it. :rainbowlaugh: I tried to imagine how Zipp would feel it, being a female.

It’s good (if a tad rushed) once it gets into the scene itself, but the parts outsife of the main sex scene were extremely rushed and felt very crudely done — almost more of an outline than an actual story. If you’re in that much of a hurry to get to the ‘good part’, it would be better to skip that stuff entirely and just start with the good part. Any needed context could be added after the fact, in character thoughts or dialog.

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Thanks for the feedback! :pinkiehappy:
I admit I was partially experimenting with this one and wasn't sure about the pacing, if I wrote this now, I would do it differently. :twilightsmile:

Zitch ship for the win! :twilightblush:

Comment posted by potatochair deleted Oct 29th, 2023

that was adorable and hilarious. not a fan of the peeing stuff but it actually did add some comedy to the story and there back and forth kept making me giggle. I feel for poor hitch I am in his boat when it comes to experience lol. I find this ship to be very wholesome ands sweet not sure of it's official name but it is a cute one

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