Night Fury, a new creature to Equestria, goes on an adventure to explore Equestria in all it's glory. With new friends, new enemies, and a new view of the world... He will not only get the opportunity of a lifetime to start a new life in Equestria, but also be able to find a certain pair of somethings or... Someones that he thought he had lost years ago.
Warning: Story may contain mild suggestive themes and alcohol
Note: Big thanks to Cosmas The Explorer for being co-author to this story!
Chapters (52)
Shouldn't the f in NightFury be lowercase?
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Yes, I know. First time fanfic writing
Protip :Never introduce like this. Are you building a Great Wall or something?
I will tell you the problem of this kind of introduction if you interest.
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This is the simplest way that I could think of, I'm still getting used to this
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Ah no. This kind of introduction is got big weakness. First, you spoil the content out of there. Why? Introduction is not the thing to spoil the content of later chapter. Two, are you building a Great Wall or something? This will cause many readers don't want to read a hold fic anymore. No, stop that. Three, i read the content of this introduction.... Eh no no, you shouldn't do that because this cause your story as a Gary Stu.
So, any retort? I want to hear it from you
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This Intro is a rough brainstorm that took me a week to get through my head just so it could make a lick of sense to ME. At that time, I didn't care about it making sense to anyone else. I don't really no the norm when it comes to formatting an intro on FIMfiction, this is just something I came up with on the spot.
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Then congrat, you lost that one week for nothing. This is because you are thinking too much though. The introduction must be simple like.
Seriously, you can stop like this and done. An introduction is complete, not spoiling not wall of text. Then you will save other information that you just brainstorm for later chapter.
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For some reason, it doesn't make sense to me! On one hand I want to keep it simple, but on the other, I can't help but feel that not giving enough background on a character's history like what species they are. IT JUST DOESN'T MAKE ANY SENSE IN MY HEAD TO KEEP IT SHORT FOR SOME ODD REASON!
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Then are you want it hurt the readers or something? This introduction is just make sense to you but it not make sense to anyone, any readers. Look at this, you will scream the reader out of your fic with this introduction because they are already know what happens next to your later chapter.
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There, just changed it. You happy now?
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Good thing that you learned. But seriously, i want to criticism your story but that is if you want to hear or not.
so you used a pic of Cadence dressed as queen yharnam standing beside the paleblood moon but your story has no Bloodborne ties to it at all. maybe go with a different pic my mans.
How many chapters long will this story be?
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I'm going all the way to the season 9 finale, so this is gonna be a long one!
Is NightFury one word or two words?
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Two words, why? Are there any grammatical errors?
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I believe he/she is talking about the story's description. It says 'NightFury'.
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Ah, I see. I'll have that fixed right away! Thanks for the tip.
I not sure this was a good idea. Lying about what he eats was a bad idea. She should had different creatures eat different things and the world is not vegetarian only. And they should remember how they treated zecora and how nice she was in reality.
My guess blueblood. He always good for the role of self important idiot who acts like a jerk.
what does the mc look like?
MC?
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main character
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If you're asking, it's Night Fury
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No I'm asnwering that MC means main character and the other reviewer was asking how do they look like
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Oh, he's a black Jaguar. About at tall as alicorn Twilight.
This chapter was a nice bonding experience, but the story didn't seem to benefit other than he had trust issues over his own abilities.
Than again it is the first chapter...
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I am still confused... What is night furry?
A wolf? I don't seem to be able to imagen him so far...
I hope that he knows Cakes aren't meant to be transported high speed... So arrival might be fast, but transportation and delivery needs careful! Not to fast transportation unless the cake was supposed to be a thick soup like substance to be enjoyed that way...
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Think of a black Jaguar. That's basically what he is, but just a highly evolved version of one called a "Speed Shifter".
I guess the Royalty of Equestria just wanne make a new friend and want to chill some with the unknown Shapeshifting creature?
Questions time:
-What time period is this story in?
-What is his diat?
-What do he like to eat or drink?
-How old is he?
-Is he a adult or a teenager?
-He is a cat?
-Is his tongue barbed?
-Can he purrr?
-Did he likes to purrr or only under specific circumstances?
-Is he shy?
-Do he like kids/foals etc?
-Do he knows Derpy?
-Is Dr. WHOoves a thing?
-What to he things about the CMC?
Yet he didn't ask for directions?
Tummy need filling...
Awww sooo cute! Luna and Kitty Cat doing mischievous things ♡
Luna is sooo sooofffttt
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Pink Panther joke opportunity missed
Wait... The invasion is over
So this is the second attempt at getting the Wedding done... Neat!
Would that not be a forleg on a pony?
Friendzoned! ... Well male cats have barbed reproduction organs...
Maid
I hace sooo many questions...
- How is Fury paying for stuff ?
- How is Fury storing stuff ?
- Seriously? What the hell... Ponies act like that to all non Herbivores?
Fury is a carnivore or not?
- Can Fury read and write ?
- How is Fury earning money unless he depends on his Ambassador job he isn't even doing... Being payed as research subject makes more sence...
- Has he health ensurance and a doctor when he becomes sick or injured?
- They might want to try find out what is save for him to eat or not...
- Maybe he should start donating blood if he ever needs it...
- Fury could go hunting with Spike! Spike rides Fury and support him with his claws and dragon fire.
- Fury could be good at pest control... Than again they have Fluttershy...
Sombra will be a tough nut to crack.
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Spike the glorious and Nightfury his mighty steed indeed
Celestia plan to have Twilight ruling the Crystal Empire or already has a Glass window prepared?
That why Celestia wants Twilight to do it alone?
Don't nake sence to send NightFury with the
'Twilight had to do it alone'. Never did actually...
Speed
Great chapter. Helped me to learn a bit more about Nightfury the MC and your story in general.
Looking forward to reading more about it all.
Speed
Spike the Dragon knight and Nightfury his Speedy Companion and mighty steed
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Mixed them up?
Nightfury - Slayer of the Crystal Empire Tyran ♤
Great chapter!
I pictured him walking on two paws. Am I mistaken?
11613027I can confirm that he is a quadruped. I will admit that when I first thought of Night Fury being a feline, I immediately thought of capper from the MLP movie. But I decided to not do that in favor of continuity as I started this story in Season 2.