Luna's Bad Day

Luna is feeling a little bit grumpy and isn't in the best of moods for some odd reason, luckily, she has a friend that will do anything to cheer her up, even if it comes to exploiting her greatest weakness.

Note: Proofread by Sudrian Engineer

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Lulamoon-Crystal

Lulamoon-Crystal #1 · Oct 18th, 2021 · 2 · ·

Ummmm

Xena Skywalker

Xena Skywalker #2 · Oct 20th, 2021 · 3 · ·

This is a very good one-shot.

Mocha Star

Mocha Star #3 · Jul 8th, 2022 · 4 · 1 ·

Cute, but a lot of little grammatical issues... also, is Nightfury a literal cat, or something else?
You don't really describe what he is or his relationship is with Luna.
Overall, good but needs an editor.

NightFurySpeedey8156

NightFurySpeedey8156 #4 · Jul 8th, 2022 · 3 · ·

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1. He's a jaguar, big as post coronation Twilight.

2. This is a separate one shot that I made in tandem with my big project story, "To Equestria And Beyond". This story has nothing in common with my bigger stories' cannon and has grammatical errors in it's own right, but if you so wish, give it a look for a little background on there relationship in that separate story.

3. I'm still learning how to make fanfics so I'm not at my best with this.

I hope you enjoyed reading it regardless and that there points clear things up.

Mocha Star

Mocha Star #5 · Jul 8th, 2022 · 3 · ·

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I did enjoy it! I was guessing he was a jaguar, I don't know how but I was thinking it.
Describe him and other unknown creatures from now on.
🎤🎤🎤
It'll make everything so much the better for your readers.

NightFurySpeedey8156