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Suzuki Satoru have been transported to a new world in the last day of the Yggdrasil game instead of get thrown out of the server, and the world in which he has landed it's full of... ¿ponies?, fortunately for him, his guild and all his inhabitants have come with him; ¿What will be the reaction of the inhabitants of Equestria before the coming of an undead of the highest order?.

This Story happens during and a little before of the last My Little Pony movie and later the series.

This it's my very first try of a story in English, it can be found a Spanish version, (my mother language) on the fan fiction site, I will be posting just this part of the story here because it is the only one that is a full crossover with MLP, and will be posting chapters as fast as I can translate, the full story it's a multi crossover AU composed of various pieces.

The original first chapter it's not added because simply put, it is a resume of the first book of the Overlord LN, it's a little slow in the beginning sooooo, beg you a bit of patience.

Any comment will be appreciated, the same for any grammatical mistake pointed.

Hope my humble work be of your like.


I want to give my deepest thanks to all my readers for your continual support!, this work has reached its end, but the story goes on in 'The Supreme Being of Zero' or 'El Ser Supremo de Zero' that can be found under my same pen name in the fanfiction site, my original work is in Spanish, and I'm not sure when or if is going to be translated to English, but by the fimfiction site rules I can't publish it here, so I'm really sorry, also if anyone wants to know how Albedo and Shalltear got married and pregnant, I leave the link to that story here, 'La Familia de un Overlord', is in Spanish and too sexual for fanfiction rules so its in PDF on my drive so enjoy!

And again Thanks a lot to everypony :pinkiehappy:

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Comments ( 299 )

Why did you make the chapters so long?

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Because his stories are interesting and entertaining so far.

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Is just the begining, later are not that long, normally, it's to not make a lot of resume/chapter hybrids. :twilightsheepish:

Good start. I'm enjoying it. Few edits here and there will fix the English. Mostly spelling or language differences. First of all is just to help you. We don't add ¿ or ¡ to the beginning of sentences that are questions or exclamations. Just a lil' help. Anyway cant wait to read more!

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Thank you for the tip, will keep it in mind for the future.

"It's ma' pleasure to meet ya', the name 's Applejack, I'm 'the element of generosity, you can find me at Sweet Apple Acres, the place where ma' family produce the best apples in all o' Equestria." -Said the farmer proudly while shaking the hoof of the newcomer, who was very strong for a unicorn she noted-

Honesty you mean.

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Uppsss! Thankyou very much! corrected!

I can understand most of what you mean. I would recommend having a native English editor go over your work at some point in the future if this story is going to be 100k+ words in length to draw more readers and improve quality. I am not an editor but I do read a lot almost every day and I find the story enjoyable but also irritating with the grammar and spelling problems. Maybe run the story through the Grammarly app after translating it to help? just a suggestion.

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Well i'm doing all the corrections myself, i only using googletranslate to acelerate thigs, after all it does a lots of mistakes with pronouns, and some times full sintaxis, first to practice my english writing, and second to improve my think-do speed in english, also, if you can recommend an app or point my mistakes to correct them, it will be pretty helpful.

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I haven't used it myself as I don't really write, but I heard good things about the app called Grammarly (I'm not sure if I spelled that right) someone else may have a suggestion that works better for you. I would have to spend more time than I am comfortable doing to point out all my nit-picking.

Hey this is really good I hope to see the next chapter soon definitely worth reading 👍

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Thank you very much!, I will try to translate and check grammar as fast as I can

Hey great work on this chapter really loved it I'm waiting for season 4 I hope they don't cut it off

Heeeyyy there we go this chapter was great and I can't wait to see the next chapter I wonder what fight you will write for it to oh I'm excited

Now I wonder how would crystals react to Pandora’s actor

Nice mate real nice👌 love this series

I wonder what, if anything, she can detect from Ainz. He can feel emotions, even though they're often suppressed. Would he appear to be very tranquil and mellow in emotions to her one moment but have sudden huge erratic bursts whenever he triggers his emotion nullification?

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Ainz is hidden from chrysalis abilities because of his rings.

This story has a lot of potential, i hope you continue writing this since i want to see how all the inhabitants of equus react to a supreme being and how discord see's this.

I cant wait for the next chapter to come out, i wonder how chrysalis will go about living in the great tomb of nazarick?

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That... is boarded in a side story which I will publish later.

Who is the main antagonist of Overlord?

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As far as I know, the platinum dragon Lord could be considered as the main antagonist or unseen players, but that's the beauty of Overlord, the antagonist IS the main character dealing with a lot of pesky heroes.

Most interessting start.

Torture is a extreamly unrealistic way to get information. At one point they say anything to make the pain stop.

Carrot and stick, you don't start with the stick.
Respect as reward over fear and pain :facehoof:

Self inflicted pain and near death was there own mistake. The torture inflicted...

Anyway great chapter! Looking forward to more :pinkiehappy:

A wand with an encrusted bloodstone, scarlet gauntlets with precious crystals encrusted, black diamond lenses encrusted with silver on the ring-shaped bridge, a statue of a dog made of obsidian, a dagger made entirely of amethyst, an altar encrusted with countless white pearls, crystal lilies emanating rainbow-like light, delicately carved star-ruby roses, tapestries embroidered with the pattern of black dragons, a wreath made of platinum adorned with gigantic diamonds, a gold-plated incense bowl of precious gems, a pair of male and female lions made of sapphires and rubies, cufflinks inlaid with fire opals that looked as if they were on fire, a coat made from the skin of a golden beast, twelve plates made of Apoitakara *,silver anklets inlaid with four jewels of different colors, a magic book with a green andradite cover, a life-size statue of a woman made of gold, a belt with different pieces made of imperial topaz sewn to it, a chessboard with each piece made from a different type of precious gem, a figure of a fairy carved from a single piece of emerald, a black cloak with countless small gemstones sewn into it, a cup carved from a unicorn's horn, a gold inlaid tabletop of glass spheres, and more. a chessboard with each piece made from a different type of precious gem, a figure of a fairy carved from a single piece of emerald, a black cloak with countless small gemstones sewn into it, a cup carved from a unicorn's horn, a golden table inlaid with crystal spheres, and more.a chessboard with each piece made from a different type of precious gem, a figure of a fairy carved from a single piece of emerald, a black cloak with countless small gemstones sewn into it, a cup carved from a unicorn's horn, a golden table inlaid with crystal spheres, and more.

This needs edits you have it 3 times!

Great chapter. Hope they are more careful in taking prisoners... Having someone more important, famous or infamous could have made a desaster unavoudable...
So far the three are fair game ¯\_(ツ)_/¯

Great worldbuilding.

Hope they show restraining when collecting dragons.
Problem makers and over violent ones at best.

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Corrected!, thank you very much!, I don't know how I have missed that, is a common bug with Google Translate when using it over a lengthy script; maybe was because have started to use Grammarly and did not verify it again.

Ains fucked up hard... He just kidnapping of all nations? Waaay to make himself a target and rob himself of allys...

Imagen: Momon being the nessecary evil. Being the Boogyman so to speak but in actually be the neutral party doing what is neccesary and sometimes beyond anyone moral for the greater good...

Lizard People war reinactment :rainbowkiss:
But the lack of character development on the D-Dog shows :duck:

Haaha, it's very boring to be reading all these reports, even when I only read between the lines, remembering only names or things of interest, I just dedicate myself to signing them, after all, Albedo and Demiurge are much smarter than me, so there shouldn't be a problem... this is a great opportunity, I will be able to see in person the rulers that can move the sun and the moon, I am almost sure that there should be no problem; even though we have not had the opportunity to see the elements of harmony up close in action, their carriers are quite weak, according to what we have found out so far, none of them is a threat to us, the only real problem is the special abilities of some of They, the most dangerous would be the farmer who is a walking lie detector and the one who can talk to animals, at first I thought that the pink one would be the biggest problem, but blocking her was much easier than I thought.

That would be very unwise... But i guess if Ains has no true enemys he will be his own worst enemy...

Would'nt it be better to go for space tech than try take over Equestria? Celestia own the bloody sun after all :duck:

Damn good or bad... I pity Chrysalis...

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That's why he ordered to be just criminals or problematic individuals, (knowing that trying to prevent his subordinates to do evil things, he gives them limits)

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It's hard to do because there is not much told about them in MLP either, at most a kingdom visited for Trixie it's shown an in an only chapter, so I tried to not 'put them in a rigid box' or something like that.

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Jejeje, keep reading and you will find out

Curious on how far this would go, since knowing the trope usually Ainz and his tropes would basically have advantages against mlp members. I mean it all comes down to personality with the characters in Overlord are not known for mercy except death, so odds are would kill their foes for even the little reasons if Ainz didn't order it. However would be curious what are the chances of Ainz with or without his group would face with Discord, the elements, and above aka the tree of harmony and such. Since they would classify as world class items due to warping reality to a stupid degree. Of course, can disregard that and simply state Ainz has a counter against it due to something in the anime. Plus already know a fiction that made Luna and Celestia celestial manipulation abilities as fake, so wonder if you would belittle that as well or simply go by shows version of it.

awesome chapter dude keep up the good work!!!

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Well, I'm using cannon references and inconsistencies to mesh both series, hope my future chapters continue being of your like.

Damn fine chapter. I wonder what the plan is...
Take over the Stormking territory in a benevolent rule so they generate massiv income for Nazarik ?

"I was hoping you didn't choose the hard way."

Isn't it the easy way? Because normaly not compliance has consequences and leave to the hard way ...

You know... Maybe a fun idea in the future would be to place the story before the main story and make Nazarik the actual plot armor of the story.
Its always luck or logical loopholes saving the main character but how about if it was Momonga/Ains and Nazarik protecting from the shadows for the simpel reason that Equestria is a stable income to keep The Tomb running at peak efficiency ♡

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That is... an interesting plot, but I think I'm not that versed with both series to pull it off

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On youtube you find about a day worth of audiobooks in text to speech video. In case you want to check current Overlord state of the story :twilightsmile:

Another chapter so soon? This is a blessed day, clearly. Cheers!

I'm actually feeling a bit sorry for the Hanzos. It can't be easy watching over these bumbling colored equines.

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