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The Loner


The world of fantasy is where I feel at home, where I can write whatever I want and not feel judged by the world

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Celestia prepares to raise the moon as she watches her sun sink past the horizon when a flash of green shoots up into the sky and briefly illuminates it before quickly fading away, drawing her full attention as she did not cause that in any way and looks to her steward and says, "Find the subject that is responsible for tainting my sky with that green flash of light and bring them to me at once!" She then stomps a hoof and scowls in aggravation at how her beautiful sunset was ruined and quickly raises the moon, crossing her arms and huffing through her nose as she taps a hoof in annoyance.

That was uncharacteristically rude of her!!! It's just a green flash, not something like a bombing raid?!

Terrible first impression, Celestia. So disappointed!

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Of course it is a bit rude, but in her defense, this takes place 300-400 years before Luna returns.

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Why so long ago? To before the first episode of the series entirely? The Mane Six ( Including their parents ) aren't even born yet.

And I doubt that our favorite pirate and his crew will live that long?

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Anything could happen for them to become immortal

Some stories you can become immortal by sleeping with a princess or they a just being pawns in something much bigger by a god sense gods like to use others like playthings

As Jack's father said; the trick isn't living forever, it's living with yourself forever that's the real trick. Paraphrased quote.

“Why is the Rum gone?”

“Again?”

lovely job! :rainbowdetermined2: I like. I am new, but enjoy this.

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That last part is always the most disturbing one. Those gods better NOT act like that. Otherwise, I better call Kratos, and they will soon be dead gods!

Don't forget the show the pirate's code they are more than just guidelines

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Can you send me a message listing the pirate's code, I might be able to use it in the story?

Oh nothing could possibly go wrong with this, right? Right?

I really like this! :pinkiehappy:
There's no way any of this could go wrong... right?

Oh God, I can imagine all the hijinks that they will get into

I'd like him to see him be honest with her at some point other then that keep up the good work

As for that Lullaby, it is supposed to follow the music from a song in The Witcher called Lullaby of Woe. Just replace the original lyrics with the ones in the story and it will sound better.

Noice 👌 can't wait to see another chapter

Nice, this is really good. Hope Jack and Celestia remain friends, maybe even more than friends. :ajsmug:

While I was writing this chapter and talking to my girlfriend about what Celestia should do, her google spoke up saying 'clap someone in irons'. After we heard that, we both started laughing about it and how nosy her google can be.

Might want to change the rating to T, as it is currently set as E for everyone. :twilightsheepish:

Other than that, good chapter.

He is cornered and defeated, then left to die. With his ship intact, and what crew are left alive, he calls for aid which comes in an unexpected form.

Why do people keep doing that? Just leaving him for dead and not just making him dead period? I know nobody has any way of knowing that he's the main character and everything, but surely after all this time, people should realize that Captain Jack Sparrow has a way of cheating death. Sometimes literally.

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nice work indeed! but i wonder... when will William Turner and Barbados come into play?

Nice, but entire encounter with Celly feels forced. A lot. She's 800 years old ruler of a nation and then suddenly breaks down into tears in front of a complete stranger. And not just that, but asks him to help her rescue her sister and apparently have an idea where to begin. If she already knew then what kept her from doing so for 600 years and why ask a complete stranger for help? And she even agreed to pay for all his expenses without having any idea how he could be even remotely useful.

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Are you reading books backwards and haven't reached the first chapter yet? 'cause it starts with that.

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No I'm not.

I think I misread what Starlight Nova was putting. And found out that they quoted some words in the summary.

Your jumped to E to M-Rated???!!!

I think I know why. Seeing Sex tag.

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Technically, I jumped from E to T, then T to M lol

Celestia sits up in bed after hearing the story and pulls him into a close hug saying, "Don't even consider offering her your life, I would rather you repay the debt by conceiving a child with her instead. With that matter settled, let us begin trying for a child of our own. After all, you have to the end of spring to make me with foal, and six years to try for our first."

Um, WTF Celestia???!!! What is with you and children??!!


Plus, why do you think this Griffon even want her father's murderer's child????!!! Just why??!!


Speaking about that? Why doesn't Celestia take care of this stupid Griffon bitch herself?! I mean, she SHOULDN'T let anybody or everyone try to hurt or kill her Jack! Not on her watch!!!!

She gets a little closer to him and raises her voice saying, "Do you remember the female griffon that you gave a family portrait to that was in a silver frame, that was my mother. I was there when you sank my father's ship, I was hovering in the sky watching over my mother when she went to go claim it from you. I hold you responsible for my family because when you attacked Griffonstone, my mother and my uncle lost their lives and left me as the one responsible to provide for the twins that survived your attack. You are also responsible for the princess's newfound freedom when you beheaded her father before her, you ruined her life and drove her to come here to work in a brothel, hoping to forget seeing her father's head stop before her paws. So Captain Jack Sparrow, Lord of the Celestial Sea, you have a debt of blood to settle with me. I shall give you time to reach a decision, return here when you have found a way to satisfy the debt."

Are you f******* serious?! This again?! Why do you make Jack's life a bit harder?!

Besides, they are in a WAR!!! And if I remember, the Griffons are the enemy, and Jack only just stop and won the war by Celestia's request.

Jack sighs and looks away briefly and gazes into her pain-filled eyes saying, "A blood debt means that no amount of coin or treasure will appease it, the only way to satisfy it is by paying the price with my blood. I shall honor this and return when I have reached a solution to the blood debt, might six years be too long to decide such payment?"

If it were up to me. I just shoot her, and be done with it.

Galanda nods her head at what he asks, saying, "Do not forget about the deadline or I shall hunt you down and take your life as payment." She removes one of her feathers and makes a small cut on her hand. She places the tip of the feather against it to stain it red, then hands it over to him saying, "You have six years from today to make a decision, Lord of the Celestial Sea."

BITCH!!!!! You have to go though Celestia herself to mess with her pirate!!!! :pinkiecrazy:


Wait a second? If Jack and his crew will eventually get a longer life span or even have "immortality"? Enough to be in the present day of the MLP series. Then doesn't this "blood deal" be a bit pointless anyway in the end? If Jack all has to do is outlive her, and her bloodline or something like that??!!

What's the name for pirates that raid other pirates only I can't remember the name.

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there is no name for them really, nothing comes up in search.

You probably didn't responded to my questions, and my reactions?

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Lol, I liked your reactions, they made me laugh. were you asking me why I was making Jack's life a little harder?

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