This story is a sequel to The Golden Eyed Sage
I was once nothing more than a mass of highly condensed magic, given to someone to help protect their mind from a dark influence. Soon, thanks to another powerful artifact of my host I gained sentience and a semblance of a soul. I was given a name and had brother in the form of my host but it did not last as soon the darker influence found my and ripped me from my brother's body. I granted my host once last gift in an effort to save him, just before I WAS DESTROYED.... or so I thought...
This is a spin-off story from an earlier crossover in the Golden Eyed Sage story. I had thought of doing this for some time but never got around to it. This story is about Stone Elric, a Sage Stone of the Mind given to Optimus Prime by Edward that gained awareness and a soul of its own. The Stone was destroyed but its spirit lived on and was reincarnated in its own Equestria. This story explores the concept of a Second Generation Displaced, A Displaced born to a Displaced, or a child of Displaced who is then Displaced.
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welp that happend.
I really like this
Thanks
I like how this story is beginning. Great introduction chapter.
Shouldn't that be wild weather and feral beasts? I'm not sure if weather can be referred to as feral.
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All the stories and Comics I've read from the MLP Universe any storm that is not made at the weather Factory for enhanced by pegasi is classified as feral weather so another words any naturally occurring weather phenomenon is feral weather
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Excellent story keep up the good work.
And I give this story a 10 out of 200 wich is a good score
I think I'll skip this chapter for now as it is not directly relevant to the main storyline of this specific story. I have not read the other this is a crossover with. I'm also ignoring all human aspects and I find the spear of longness to be funny.
Other than that, I am very much enjoying the main story.
I cannot make sense of this.
Do ponies ride themselves?
Are trains also balloons?
Isn't is supposed to be cheaper to use a train since it's carrying multiple per journey.
Finally, the 'disguised alicorn gets hit by a stray cloud' idea. I've been waiting to see this one for a long time. Although you never implied if anypony actually took note of that incident (other than RD who already knows of his alicorn status)
I also wonder if Bright has every tried flying before, or come into proper contact with a cloud (eg cloudwalking).
Pinkie's line in the end = funni. Yes. Also I am still pretending these are non-humanoids (except spike, spike is humanoidish). Although the spelling and grammar is lacking, the overall story is good enough for me to overlook it all. Although I must ask, why anthro?
I like how you're using some canon of the show as a loose baseline, but you're still being original and taking things your own route.
I haven't read the other fic this is technical a sequel (The Golden Eyed Sage) but that's mostly since it's M-rated and I don't read those.
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This is more of a side story to Golden while also being a bit of a sequel. The rating it set that way due to implications of sex behind close doors, heavy language at times, and morbid details from time to time in fights or gore scenes like my other works. Unfortunately I have but one dedicated editor and he sticks to my Asta story. The anthro is just because I prefer it over ponies. I do have a story with ponies it being Levi’s.
I was slightly worried about how you might handle this part, but it went quite well. You make sure not to just recycle everything from the show. Stone didn't solve all the challenges, even if he did seem unfazed by them all. At least you never went 7th element. I've not actually read those before. You are quite good at writing a unique and original story.
The only issue is grammar and spelling, which really isn't very good. At least most of the sentences make sense, but there are the occasional contradictory ones that I just cannot work out (throughout the story as a whole). I'd suggest looking for an editor or spelling-correction software (I've been recommended Grammarly before). This issue doesn't really take away from the story, but may be difficult for some readers to read and could turn away potential viewers.
The princesses seem persistent.
Celestia also seems to forget or disregard his statements: of being born an alicorn rather than ascended and not wishing to become Equestrian royalty.
I look forward to seeing how this will proceed.
How far will the princesses push him?
Will they announce his status as an alicorn against his wishes?
What motives do they have to make him royalty other than being an alicorn?
Will he ever visit Canterlot and interact with nobility?
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Being one of only four alicorns in the current timeline is a bit of a given for the title, but Celestia is present because Stone is a male alicorn and she sees it as a sign that he is meant to stand with them and bring forth more of their kind, especially being an alicorn from birth
Haven't seen an update on this story in a while, glad to see it's not been forgotten about.