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WurkyWilk358 0w0


Just your average Brony here to read and write stories about the show the rest of us bronies and pegasisters have come to admire and still enjoy watching from time to time.

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Co-written with The Saiyan Brony.


Two gamers are brought together by their love of their favorite video game, Sonic Forces. However it's their love of this very game that gets them both sucked into a world not their own, in bodies that are both strange yet so familiar. Follow these two on their journey in a whole new world with adventure around every corner. What wonders will they see? Will they be able to face the dangers that come their way? How will they return to where they came from, if they even can?


A shoutout to RebyTheLion for making our new cover art! Check out her page, she’s really talented! I’d also like to thank Blizzard-Chill and PinkeyApple for taking my commissions as well. They’re both incredible artists and I hope you all visit each of their pages!


Chapters (3)
Comments ( 27 )

A revamped? Hopefully, Rainbow isn't so racist/xenophobic to our Mobian protagonists this time. :ajbemused:

Okay... reading time...

So don't get me wrong I loved the old version of this story but what made you reboot the story is it the same reason why you reboot your other story?

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Sorta. Goken and I both felt that the old version of this story wasn’t going anywhere, and was just dragging on. Honestly, at the time, we just started writing in the spur of the moment. So after some years of thinking it over and really thinking about how we could improve it by coming up with a different plot, we decided to give it one more go.

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....I mean...probably not??


Also I never saw the original but I like this one already

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Do you plan to keep some elements form the old version of the story or is this a full rewrite 🤔

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You’ll just have to wait and see. 😁

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No, I don't want to see it repeating. :facehoof:

I hope this revamped can be better off without that stupid drama.

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Rest assured, there will be no xenophobia or racism. We as the authors realize that it was unnecessary and over the top in the old version.

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Well it's both fair and unfair.

It's unfair because of no spoilers, but it's also fair because,since it's in comment form, it's to everyone.

Not to nitpick but, why are they fanboying in a crisis situation?
You won't see a hostage in a bank robbery point to the window and yell "Is that Robert Downey Jr!?"

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..ah...I mean..it IS a mew version so they have to shed stuff then put new stuff

Spotted some potential mistakes. They're in bold.

“Aaah! Wearwolf!” The bird creature yelled and crawled away.

Wearwolf?! I’m not-!” Crimson snapped until he looked down at himself.

Werewolf. Unless it's a foreign spelling I've never heard of.

The first thing he noticed was that he had red fur all over his body. He wore tan-green cargo pants, green black tipped boots, black tank top, green and white gloves, and a utility strap that went over his shoulder and around his waist. When crimson touched his face, he felt that his mouth was stretched outward like a dog’s muzzle. Crimson was already in the process of having a panic attack, and he felt something move beyond him. When he looked back, he saw a bushy red tail that was sticking out from where his tailbone was.

Should be uppercase since it's a proper noun.

“If this is a dream, then let me stay asleep and never wake up.” The avain moved his arms and legs in long arks like you would when making a snow angel. “I don’t even care that I’m some bird creature.”

Avian. Either arcs or arches. Ark typically refers to either the biblical ship Noah build or the tough-as-nails survival game.

Jet thought long and hard about it before snapping his finger. “We’ll just say we are wearing customs, and are attending a friend’s cosplay party.”

Costumes. Unless it's a slang term in this instance.

Unfortunately for them, a couple of the creators noticed their hiding spot. They growled threateningly at them before making a break right at them.

Creatures.

That's all the potential mistakes I noticed while reading.

I wonder if crimson going to get lucky again

Oh cool you revamped this I can't wait to read this

I'm curious as to why Shadow and the Black Arms are there.

This was a good chapter definitely different from the original and I liked it

Jet helped his friend to his feet after ripping some of her shirt to tie around Crimson’s injured leg. “Fine by me,” Jet said.

um, wrong pronoun or did i miss something somewhere?

Ooooooooooooo!!!! This was badass!

They will eventually find out, someway or another. Secrets just can't be kept forever. :facehoof:

Those were great chapters keep up the good work

great start!!!

cant wait for more!!

pretty sure the Red Wolf is named generally "Gadget" the E3 avatar.

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