A rewrite of the season 9 finale where Grogar is not Discord and he executes his plans to take over all of Equestria.
edit: grammar and spelling have been improved
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Ouch... this needs work.
I agree with The Blue EM2. This needs a lot of work in the grammar, punctuation and spelling departments. Have you considered reading Ezn's site writing guide? Try adding your story to the 'Looking for Editors' group to get a pre-reader. I really don't mean to be rude, but you could use some help in your English.
How about an official rewrite for whole damn season?
http://chng.it/PxmNkwqq
Besides some spelling and grammar I like the story
I want to like this, but it's really rough and needs a lot of work.
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Oh not this again...
Look, if you want to rewrite S9, go ahead.
I haven't even read this yet.....
BUT WHATEVER YOU HAVE COME UP WITH...
YES!!!!
33 Years..... that's how long i waited folks..... 33 YEARS!!!!!
So anything that gives me the fear, respect and admiration i deserve i support....
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AMEN!!
Do you think the part where everyone laughs at rainbow can lead in to where grogar could manipulate rainbows mind showing her all the bad stuff the mane 6 did to her including grogar changing some of rainbow dash’s memories into thinking they were bad ones so she turns to the dark side, and twilight and the others have to bring rainbow back to the light? Just an idea since rainbow dash was the one who brought the mane 6 together with the sonic Rainboom and it could be used to grogars advantage.
There are many spelling mistakes in this chapter
Really fast, full of typos and why are the mane six just ignoring Tirek, Chrysalis and Cozy Glow for two weeks?
It really bothers me that apparently Luna got take out but Celestia was still standing when Grogar showes himself.
It really made her look like she is even more in Celestia's shadow and inferior to her.
With how this was worded, Luna didn't get taken out but only one of the other pillars but apparently suddenly Luna was already taken out despite the scene said otherwise. That just bugs me..
Sorry.. how the finale handled Luna really just left me pretty bitter, I just really hope Luna doesn't end up getting shafted like in the actual finale there..
The sisters got pretty bad sendoffs there..
I wonder where was Spike though? He kind of just disappeared I think..
Does Luna still have her magic or apparently did she lost it?
I hope my previous comment wasn't iffy.. was it?
It’s really hard to read through this with that many grammatical errors and spelling mistakes.
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And its kind of hard to tell if Luna had her magic stolen or not.