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AndwhatIseeisme
I write stories mainly featuring small horses having sex with one another, and that is probably all you really need to know about me.
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Please tell me that's grounds for a sequel. I'm eager to see what your version of Fluttershy is capable of.
Fluttershy could really use that strap on horn to her advantage.
I love this! Dom shy and sublestia are both amazing!
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What the title reminded me of. (Milo Murphy's Law)
Celestia being a submissive bitch is hilarious, especially to the doormat that is Fluttershy.
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Please keep in mind, I know I can be overly critical and negative at times. I can always find something to nitpick, even in the greatest works of literature ever written. Please don't take it personally!
-Good job on starting the story later, skipping the boring stuff like the invitation and the travel.
-Some pretty good teasing on the way to Celestia’s room.
-Head-hopping is usually a bad thing, but this story does it well.
-Fluttershy thinks of herself as ‘the pegasus’?
-Lots of problems with capitalization. Some examples:
miss Fluttershy"What may I do for you next, ma'am?"for the throne room miss-- that last example also needs a comma.-Tons of dialog punctuation issues. Example:
"We're not heading for the throne room miss," the guard said, "I'm to lead you directly to Her Highness's personal bedchambers."-- should be a period after ‘said’.-Several improper dialog tags such as:
lead the way then, I guess," she smiled."Have fun," he smiled"Welcome back, Princess," the alicorn bowed-It’s nice how this story actually makes a pretty good acknowledgement of Celestia’s royal status and uses that to make the story sexier.
-Fluttershy being a surprisingly good dom might be an overused trope, but it’s still a good trope, and you used it well, keeping some Fluttershyness in there throughout, rather than just flipping a switch and making her a bitch.
-Celestia’s mischief in taking Fluttershy’s commands too literally is a nice touch and very cute.
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To clarify what these scores mean, check my judging rubric.
Cloppability: 87/100
Allure: 85/100
Enticement: 89/100
Immersion: 89/100
Prose Quality: 70/100
Total Score: 420/500
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Fetish Fuel: Royalty
Get ready to spend a lot of time on your knees -- it’s time to bow before royalty. Your clopfic had the best scene involving a prince, princess, king, and/or queen.
The guards aren't always reliable at seeing through disguises...
We are so proud of you, Flutters!
Should Celestia be exited or intimidated?
Good story!
I enjoyed reading it.
This story absolutely needs more likes! I loved it! fantastic read from top to bottom. I only wish there was a sweet kiss after she tucked Fluttershy in🤗
Welll, you know you're doing a good job when the introduction has me cheering that Fluttershy doesn't mess it up as Celestia addressed her. I think her reassurance was a bit too much, but that is an exaggerated nitpick on my part.
Fluttershy's feelings afterwards were perfect though. Ah... shouldn't timber-wolves be a pack?
Anyway, I always love it when the authors allow the characters to "break out of their characters" for this kind of games.
I mean....
"Good. Then, um, follow me to the bed and -- and remove my shoes," Fluttershy commanded her servant, "and um, do it with your mouth only."
This is perfect.
Writing female orgasms is kind of hard, isn't it? I feel that descriptions often fail to invoke the intensity and feelings, which is why I tend to prefer visual descriptions of pulsating vulvas ans squirts. But this is yet another nitpick on my part and more of a stylistic choice.
Excellently written clop, by the way. Hitting all the boxes without looking like a list of actions the characters performed.
A couple of grammatical mistakes here and there that are of no consequence to the enjoyment. So, who cares? Not me.
In conclusion, thank Harmony Fluttershy is not actually some tyrant evil-doer queen. Great clopfic! I'm giving this one a star!