This story is a sequel to Brothers
Whipstitch, an eccentric seamstress, meets a lonesome draconequus, and insists on learning how to try and better control the chaos in her own life. However, Whipstitch is hiding secrets, and it will be up to her friends to help her through the rough times.
Even if those rough times include periodically turning into a giant monster and trying to eat them all alive.
Though her teacher often sends her on strange errands and doesn't always seem to make sense, Whipstitch takes it in stride the same way that she does the rest of her life.
No matter how bumpy that life may get.
((Featuring events and major characters from my other story, "Brothers."))
Chapters (12)
1854931 Well, this was supposed to be a oneshot...
But, depending on the reactions I get, I could be convinced otherwise. 
JunkyardGypsy has actually already read it and LOVED it!
Nothin wrong with this...nothin at all. Keep up the fantastic work
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The REAL Whipstitch is LOVING this, so there will definitely be more soon!
Yay! More reading material!
1996360 Well, if you want reading material, I woud advise you to look at some of my other stories, as well!
This....is...awesome! You deserve alot more of views than this!
Already a odd and unique, possibly insane mare learning chaos. Freaking awesome.
2012471 Thank you! I'm glad that you like it!
This has been a LOT of fun to write, and Gina (the REAL Whipstitch) has been loving it! 
This story actually helped us form a partnership, of sorts, so there will be much more on the way! 
Every now and again you'll come across something so well thought out, hilarious, and well written that you can't help but laugh along with the characters.
This is one of those stories.
A literal diamond in the rough. You deserve some recognition, hell, the front page!
Happily yours,
Svgb
2013598 You, good sir, just made my day!
Thank you so much! I truly appreciate feedback, and you're more than kind with yours!
As for the front page... That would be nice, but may stay out of reach for a little while longer.
I don't know if this one is ready for that kind of recognition.
But thank you! As I said, your comment made my day!
Sincerely flattered,
Pennington Inkwell
2013670 Well your story made mine, it's good to know that I helped a little in return!
This holds the honour of being the only fic I can recently call to mind that not only made me smile but also made me fave it before I've even seen the first page. You sir are awesome.
2014652 And it is quite the honor to hold, good sir!
Thank you so much for the favorite and, even more, for reading and enjoying the story!
It you happen to want to read more about Eclipse Tumult, you could also find him in my story, "Brothers."
That one's more about him, though it isn't quite as funny as this one. 
1854966 I feel as though I should weep in joy that you were willing to continue this. If you had honestly kept her as a one-off it really would've been a loss for the entire community.
2014853 I will definitely seek it out! Also small typo you said "brining" when I'm fairly certain you had meant bringing
2021881 Thanks...
Everything I put on fimfiction is a first draft, so I don't go back to look for mistakes very often... 
It's good that you pointed it out, thank you! 
I won't lie, I did a little fluttershy squee when I saw this had updated. Another fantastic chapter. The pacing fits really nicely and I love the description of the strings of fate.
I see a bit cross over from Happy Adventuring, Twilight in this with Lily kinda neat haha.
Excellent crazy chapter as usual on this one, when will Happy Adventuring, Twilight's next chapter come out? :D
2075654 Thank you so much!
I've actually had this sort of imagery in mind ever since one of my chapters in Daughter of Chaos... But I wanted to expand upon it!
2075671 I am drawing ever-closer to the next update on Happy Adventuring....
It's difficult, though. Killing a main character is touchy business, and I don't want to wind up sending the story into another "wallowing in grief" tailspin like I did in "Daughter of Chaos." 
2075706 Wait
you're killing off Penny/Scorching?
So Whipstitch/Gina got me to read this. She promised to read some of my hubby's stories in return and then we can chat and trade thoughts and what not.
It's been fun. For me the whole thing really got going when she got to Canterlot. I do have a few questions, if you don't mind. A few bits confused me and maybe you can clarify or smooth those points of the story.
In chapter 4 it was implied she was lying to Celestia that she had plans to meet a friend for lunch. It would be easy enough to change that to a truth and she's just leaving out the additional reason she wants more leisure time. That could help set up and establish the opening for Chapter 5. But Chapter 5's start felt confusing and took some thinking to figure out because I didn't expect her to *actually* be going to lunch (Perhaps at the same place Celestia suggested?). And I had to wonder if Lily is an OC, someone she's drawn who is a friend in real life, or some obscure pony that I didn't remember.
Between 'super effective' (props for the pokemon reference) and 'you're kidding' felt like a jump and left me wondering what happened. I guess they sat down and started eating, and saying that would have bridged it.
Isn't Pennington too old to be a foal? I was under the impression that was for much younger male ponies.
This last bit made me realize it was the same day as the previous chapter: She's still sucking the lollipop which Eclipse said last chapter would be finished about 10pm that night. So it must be the same day. But that also raises the question... how is she having sandwiches and milkshakes while sucking a lollipop?
So please don't take this critique to mean anything bad. I am enjoying the tale and look forward to seeing where it goes. I just figure, at best maybe I can help it be even better by lending my thoughts. In any case, thank you for writing and thrilling my friend by using her character! :)
My sole and very small critique for this chapter is you have the phrase "some kind of destination" used twice almost on top of each other. That aside, I very muchly so enjoyed this and can't wait to see how much crazier things get!
And... defying gravity... makes me want to listen to the Wicked soundtrack...
2078220 I'll answer your other questions as soon as I can
, but this one I can answer quickly and easily. 
I should have used quotation marks around "Some kind of destination." I was trying to imply that it was what I was calling their destination... Thanks for pointing out the confusion there!
It was a poorly thought out joke, and I should have put a little more effort into it. 
You've actually brought up a LOT of good points, and I'll be happy to explain them all or correct my mistakes!
And before I have to run off to class
, thank you so much for coming to read this! I know that Gina really likes it, and I'm always happy to make someone else happy! 
What are your husband's stories? I have finally started putting aside time for reading other people's stories, so I'd love to take a look at them! 
So thank you again, and I'll be back soon to answer your first set of questions!
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Okie dokie... Well, I have to say, first of all, this is truly an eye-opening set of critiques!
This is EXACTLY the sort of thing that I LOVE to see, because it makes me a better writer! 
About the lying thing, I'm afraid that was a bit of a slip-up on my part. At the time that I was writing it, I wasn't actually sure if she WOULD be going to lunch with Lily, since I make everything up as I go along. (excuses, excuses...
) I myself usually feel that I'm lying if I don't tell the entire truth, but Whipstitch wouldn't. That was a mistake of slipping a little too much of myself into the character. 
I'll be going back to fix that soon! Thank you for pointing that out, it's definitely something that needs fixing.
Now that's I've gone back to re-read it, you're absolutely right about the start of chapter 5 being too sudden, I'll be adding a revision to show that more time has passed.
Perhaps even an entire day (in order to compensate for Eclipse's comment about how long it would take to consume the lollipop, which she's being forced to eat around... I've done this many times when I didn't have a place to put it down. I didn't think that I was the only one who's done this, but perhaps I'm just weird. 
I'll make a note about that when I go back to make these edits. ). 
I'll answer your question about Lily last, because that's going to have the longest answer.
But Lily is like an older sister to Pennington, which is one of the reasons she calls him a foal. This, along with the fact that (And this may only apply to my particular head canon
) "foal" could be used as an insult or derogatory term for an adult ("Foal" = "Fool?"), is why I chose the particular term. (Let's face it, when you're finally old enough to consider yourself an adult, being referred to as a "kid" isn't always entirely pleasing. 
)
A lot of the time, I actually see what I'm writing more along the terms of a movie, and whenever the scene changes, I'll usually put a large space to show that a significant amount of time has passed. I neglected to put one of these spaces between "Super effective" (Thank you! I was kind of raised on Pokemon.
) and "You're kidding." I've actually gone back in to fix this, but I may add in a more significant edit later. 
(I have a REALLY bad habit of trying to start scenes with dialogue, rather than description. 
)
Alright, so back to Lily.
Lily is actually one of my OC's. She's also featured in my other story, "Happy Adventuring, Twilight!" as the keeper of Pennington's second identity, since she's the one who actually dyes his mane and coat for him to work under a pen name at book signings and the like.
Lily is, to use a literary term, a foil to Pennington. A foil is basically a character that exists to emphasize the qualities in another character by contrasting them completely. (For you literary buffs out there, think of Hamlet and Fortinbras!
) I actually created the two of them together. She's always worried about something, while Pennington wouldn't be worried if he were standing in the middle of a puddle of gasoline and holding a lit match. Lily struggles to keep a business afloat in Canterlot while Pennington has a best-selling set of novels, but refuses to move from Ponyville. She was actually going to be his romantic interest in a few story lines that I had thought out, but after I started writing "Happy Adventuring, Twilight!" she wound up getting friend-zoned... 
Maybe in another universe, they hooked up. 
I have a small cast of characters that tend to float from story to story, creating a web of ponies with deeper stories and more involvement than any of them may realize... Sometimes I just have to toss in an OC and hope it doesn't sink under the pressure. Lily's good for when I need an original element/character, but I can't bring in any of my well-used OC's or a canon character. She's really a character I'd like to use and expand upon more over time, since she actually has a really good story behind her (I won't go into it here, or it might take up more room than the rest of this comment itself.).
Anyway, I know that this is a lot to read, and probably a lot of poor excuses, but I try my best.
Hopefully I answered the majority of your questions, and if you have any more, feel free to ask! I don't mean to beg, but PLEASE ask! This has been an absolute joy for me, and it's a good feeling to know that there are people who enjoy what I do.
((BTW: "Defying Gravity" was one of my favorite songs from Wicked, closely followed by "No Good Deed Goes Unpunished" and "Dancing Through Life." I actually had the privilege of seeing it on Broadway in New York. A life-changing experience.))
So, I anxiously await your reply!
-Pennington Inkwell
Thanks for the huge response! It cleared up a lot and I look forward to your edits. I'll admit my grammar sucks, but I try to catch what I can. I do this for my husband, Paleo Prints, too, as a kinda pre-prereader. Though I've been slacking and need to get caught up on his works.
Link to his page, since you asked and for your convenience: http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Paleo%20Prints
I've never been able to eat with a lollipop, but then maybe I just haven't had enough lollipops.
Also, if you do skip a day... she'll have to sleep with the thing! And then it will be way past 10pm that night, instead of finishing early as chapter 6 mentions. No biggie, just tweak the mentioned times to fit.
I do like Lily, and you're right that foal does make sense as an older sister type. So it just needs a small Lily intro for people not already familiar with her.
I was able to see Phantom of the Opera on Broadway in NYC, But I keep missing Wicked when it rolls into town!
Someday I will catch it!!! ::Shakes a determined hoof to the sky:: 
Just a FYI: I like this so much, I'm going to encourage my readers to take a look when I post my next chapter of "Monster". Very good work.
2305472 I really can't thank you enough, and I'm sure that Gina would, as well, if she had a fimfiction account to comment with. This is really her story, I'm just putting it into words.
I would love to look into reading your story later, as well! (as if I could ever catch up on my reading list XD). Every viewer helps both Gina and I immensely, and mentioning this to your readers is more than I could ever ask for. Thank you.
2305472 Try to bring attention to his other stories as well, they're good as this one :P. Kudos to any authors supporting another!
(I should do the same on Silent Dreamweaver).
A hairy situation put right. Very well sewn.
Ooo, now some history of Whipstitich have been revealed! Who have she killed before?
*grins* Fun stuff, I meant to comment on ch 8 but got distracted, it really bugs me and feels Mary-Sue ish. Just the idea that surely folks are aware she goes off because she's a danger and yet they still blame her when they fail to protect their kid? And nobody else has ever killed someone? They just act like she's this incredible abomination when surely others have similar issues.
2462562 Well, the thing is that nopony except her grandmother knew what happened to Whipstitch. It hasn't been talked about, yet, but every pony in Fairytrail is responsible for their own problem, and it's considered taboo to talk about your problem unless you consider it a gift, like her grandmother does. While ponies dying in Fairytrail isn't unprecedented, Whipstitch takes what happened really seriously, more seriously than most others did. Whipstitch is really hard on herself about it, but I don't see how she's coming across as a Mary-Sue.
2465871 The issue to me was the town getting mad and ostracizing her. It made it sound like she had this "big bad power" and everybody else's was just minor stuff.
Like I said, if everyone has equally horrible curses, yes keeping it private makes sense but if you tell folks, "I'm going to this cave, for my monthly issue (Hur hur period joke
) and then people get mad at you for their not being able to follow basic common sense....
Well it kinda grates.
This was the specific line that bothered me and set me on that trail of thought.
I hope I am making sense. I still love this fic and I love Whipstitch and her creator I'm sure is as awesome as you are. I don't want to suggest I feel otherwise, just that I felt that specific part gave an impression I wasn't fond of.
If Whipstitch herself had ostracized herself despite others attempts to include her that would fit for me. but to have pretty much the entire town shut her out felt off.
2471733 You make a very good point. I'm probably going to go into more detail about how much of that was all just her beating herself up and how much was actual treatment. Later, we're going to meet her grandmother, who explains a lot of what REALLY happened afterwards.
I guess things about this backstory need to be better explained, but that's what later chapters are for! 
Thanks for cluing me in to this, it was a minor mistake in my writing. 
2473784 *Phew!* I feel so much better knowing that. I won't deny I was a bit confused, because it seemed way different from how you had been writing her.
Interesting again, still can't help but feel this is really giving of the feel of building up to Whipstitch having magical Mary-sue powers though
2555398 There is drawbacks remember? Note the previous chapter or two.
is this a sequel of something, if so plz provede link i kind of want to read this
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It's not a sequel so much as it is a tie-in to my other stories.I like to give every character their own story, but they all affect one another. There are two stories that you really ought to read if you want to expand on the characters.
"Brothers," the story about Eclipse: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/31813/brothers
And "Happy Adventuring, Twilight!", the story about Pennington: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/36974/happy-adventuring-twilight
Lots of people enjoy my stories one by one, but they just get better when read together...
This story actually takes place at the exact same time as "Brothers," and that first story really ties into this one.
Hopefully these links help!
Just to give readers an idea on how upset Pennington was, equines almost never throw up. It's practically impossible for them to do so.
Moonstone was right to jump in.
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Well... I certainly learned something today!
Thank you so much for bringing this up! I really didn't know this, and it adds a new dimension to the story! Little tidbits like this are really the things that are the most fun to know! (I'm one of those guys who constantly brings up "Fun facts...")
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Another interesting chapter :) It was a bit confusing following Penningtons fic as it sometimes wasn't clear to me about when it was Eclipse or Pen or Moon etc. As well I'd suggest rather than using such a large page break just simply use a couple of asterisks or similar. It feels more natural.
"you wished then and there that you cloud just be stricken dead on the spot." I think you meant could.
Lovely chapter, the tense change works really well at conveying the terror of the situation, bravo!
Awww why can't i be in her position
Well done
Very nice it seems evenhorror stories you can write with great skill
Your image credit appears to be wrong.
3233477 I don't see what you mean... The picture was drawn by my friend, Gina, better known as "Junkyardgypsy" on Deviantart.com.
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http://www.fimfiction.net/story/45525/Junkyardgypsy
Yeah, but you're normally supposed to link to the original picture in your Source. Unless it doesn't exist on their Devart, of course - that happened to me once.
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Good point. I always leave a link to her page(s) at least SOMEWHERE in each of my stories, along with a note saying that she does all of my original art, but I suppose that I'd better put a link in the source info instead of her username.
Thanks for the advice!