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Sonic_Applejack2005


I am taking time to think about my actions and may or may not return.

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Comment posted by RoyalBardofCanterlot deleted Mar 20th, 2019

What a...........charming...tale...
And such a....a....unique take on Twilight's personality.
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Darling. Darling. Let us talk comedy and vulgarities. You see, darling, if you need to reach into the swear jar for dialog, you aren't writing comedy. Tis a simple matter of...
...
This....this is not a comedy.
...............
huh.
I....what IS this?

*Opens up story*
"It was the start of a new day in Equestria, and to Twilight Sparkle that meant a new day on the unending quest for knowledge."
*Stares at author's name*
*Stares at M rating*
*Closes story.*

*Decides I'm being too judgmental and decide to open up the story once more*
"Don.'t you ever fucking correct me in my classroom again. Do you understand, you moldy piece of shit fruit?"
*Closes the story and temporarily shuts down my home's internet.*

Even porn would kick this to the curb.

I've been waiting for this...

... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... ... .. .. .. .. .. .. . . . . . . . . (Speechless)

Yet again, we have another train crash of bad grammar, nonsensical plotting, OOC moments and what the fudge content. (Though the fact I like Cozy Glow may bias me somewhat.)

How do you manage to write this badly?

9532249
Only God knows for sure my friend...

9533331
Gotta love the beach boys.

9533667
Cozy certainly got those in this trainwreck.

This is beautiful.

The class crowded around Cozy Glow like visitors to a zoo. Despite knowing what she'd done, the three crusaders couldn't help feeling a little sad for her. She was just a filly, though one who had made much bigger mistakes than they ever had. Her front right hoof hung limply, and her jaw was clenched in pain. Sweetie Belle frowned. She hadn't remembered her looking like that when she first entered.

is Sweetie Belle a dumb fuck?

9549584
In the show, or the story?

The answer is yes.

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