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NCR Ranger Veteran,
BoS Knight,
Lucky Bastard,
Courier Six,
Six, (Anti)Hero of the Mojave Wastes, has been called by many names. But no name rung truer at that moment than idiot. A random quest out to the West, and what does he have to show for it? A new body, and a new world.
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I like this style. A few words misplaced but otherwise, it is fine.
9941155
Could you tell me what is misspelled? I'll fix it when I have time.
I can't help but wonder if you'll do the same companion sys the various fallout games did or if you'll just have a singular companion that your courier ends up positively bonded with. Either way can't wait to see where this goes.
9941214
Option 1: read and find out
Option 3: complain till I explain
Option 5: ask where options 2 & 4 went
A pretty neat start so far, spelling errors are pretty much non-existent and the grammar is well done. Since it's so early in the story a critique of the plotline isn't possible, but if there was one critique I had it would be about the explanations
The little "(a gyrphonic currency)" I think is unnecessary, context will lead most to figure out it's a currency. Explaining what something is can help a readers understanding, but it can also break the flow of a story if done to often or at the wrong time.
Honestly that's the only thing that I have a critique for, everything else is pretty solid so far.
9943175
Thanks for the tip, I'll never ignore good advice, and this sounds like some.
9943175
P.S
Should be fixed by now. If you see anything else wrong could you tell me? I'd rather not have the NCR on my tail for another incorrect form.
AU where Equestria Girls never happened?
9987603
No, it did. But she never had the chance to steal Twilights crown. So she fled the castle, and over the border to Gryphonia where she met Gavin.
9987714
so the Equestria Girls mane 6 are still split up and Sirens are still at large.. big oof
9987864
YES! They might be playing a part in this, but I seriously doubt it.
9991648
The Motherland never denies a follower. May your Germanic ancestors rest in peace herr Luftstreitkraft.
9991648
lange mag das Chaos regieren!
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pics.me.me/the-ncr-has-declared-you-a-terrorist-28697744.png
10007989
Shit... not again.
Needs an editor but other than that meh.
this stuff seems random AF.
good story so far.
chapters are shorter than I am used to but not much I can do about that.
Anyway keep up the good work.
I like where this is going
More
Plz update
No one is perfect.
10141243
Umm...? Clarification?
10141675
The whole not typing down German thing No one is perfect I'm not judging I was just saying like I'm good at Art but not good at drawing people no one's perfect.
10141699
I dislike too much copy paste in a story from google translator. So usually I keep it down to a few one liners, or for comedic intrest (e.g. drunken night celebrating a successful job).
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9941221
I pick number 5
10155214
Somewhere in the abyss, I know Discord knows where it is. But unfortunately the abyss is a bit of a bitch and won't give options two and four back.
10155215
This is a weird crossover I applaud you for that idea ,but all I really have to say is hurry up and keep writing these.
WTF DID I JUST READ!
I applaud you good sir you have officially broken my mind with the Griffin maids antics. Well done.
10156764
For some reason while reading this, I got mixed Overlord (anime) and Skyrim's Lusty Argonian Maid vibes and rode the wave.
10156764
Quick question, would you prefer the next chapter more or less Politically Correct?
10161614
Huh?
10162030
Politically Correct means it isn't offensive or controversial.
10162265
Less politically correct then.
More offensive means it'll be even funnier.
And who cares about controversy?
10162282
In order:
Ok,
I Agree,
And Nobody.
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You my good sir/madam?!
With just a single response have just become my all time favorite writer on this site!
PS don't tell anyone I said that.
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Dossier: Sunsong
Male
Ruggedly handsome (Handsomely rugged?),
Extraordinarily strong, intelligent, romantic (straight),
Favors pistols, assault rifles, bows, swords, and magic.
Availability: How much (money/weapons) do you have?
Preferred survivability of mission (our chances of coming back): 0%-10% (but will take nearly any mission regardlessly),
Did not write this himself.
10162779
Ok.👍
Its great. I'm loving it.
10007989
Oh gods no
Luna responds....thats sweet
10163845
*lowers binoculars from face in the 5th story apartment building across the street**whipsers* ive heard everything...
10185684
well fuck.
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10185684
Hmm... rips out idea laptop.
You will regret posting that comment. notAperson
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*Stares at you**pulls out remote with a single large red button**click* "oh, I don't think I will.." * alarms and sirens start blaring**speaker crackel to life* "ALERT, ALL PERSONAL, AN ABADON CLASS NUCLEAR DEVICE HAS BEEN LAUNCHED! ETA TO TARGET: THREE MINUTES! SEEK SHELTER IMMEDIATELY!
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I was playing Exploding Kittens earlier. So I knew this would come in handy. *pulls out defusing card* "Denied".
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YOU ATVADE MY TRAP CARD NO YOU YOU DENIED YOURSELF
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You vanna' fight! Taste ze wrath of mine Eisenfaust!
10331653
wut is that?
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Eisenfaust: Iron Fist