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BleedingRaindrops


Just a critic who happens to write about pastel colored magical talking ponies

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She'd lost everything even before the Ursa attacked, but now, two years later, Trixie stumbles across Ponyville, looking for a fresh start, and an old friend.


Trixie fans, you're gonna love this. Trixie haters, prepare to have your opinion changed.



Special thanks to:

Applejinx
Your Antagonist
Raharu Haruha
Soundslikeponies
Khakispony

for your help with proofreading and editing this story

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 26 )

:raritycry: shit...I don't know what to say. I wasn't expecting Sarif to be dead I..... just keep writing. This is really good.

I DEMAND MOAR!
Politely.

Always politely...

This is very good. As somepony who's never been a fan of Trixie's character (fan interpretations or otherwise) I can safely say that you managed to improve her image for me... just a bit. The ending was especially touching.

Keep up the great work!

this made me cry. it was beautiful, absolutely beautiful.

A beautifully touching story.:pinkiesad2:
If I may ask, why isn't this story complete? Just curious.:twilightblush:

Glad to see it posted. Now come to my favorites list....

1042077

You must be from GREAT and POWERFUL Trixie, you keep following me to their new additions.:rainbowderp:

Thanks for all the nice comments guys. Do not worry you will all have more Trixie soon. I am in the process of typing up the next chapter as you read this. Actually that's not true, I'll porbably be reading Background Pony when you read this, but after that I will be writing the next chapter.:scootangel:

Only light shall evershine, Betwixt the pages of evertime. In laypony's terms, thank you for the excellent story.

1041507 Yes, this was my reaction as well!

You did good job BleedingRaindrops as well, using wording to make Serf seems like still being alive but only find out it wasn't at end of this chapter. Let see the next chapter already! Haha.

1042077
Wow, I must be terribly unobservant to have missed this. I'm revisiting this story--finally--and will be posting the new chapter as soon as it gets tossed around the meat grinder known as Ponychan's /fic/ board. :twilightblush:

I figured I've kept you guys waiting long enough. This is only the first draft. It's currently undergoing some changes, but I'll let you chew on this for now. :raritywink:

I couldn't help but gaze at the ending of the story. I couldn't say anything because nothing was needed. Well done writing my good sir, well done.

*salutes Sarf*

1304899 a bit of the story is missing....

1305278 I'm right there with you.

*turns* "ATTEN-HUT!" *Snap to attention*

"PRESENT ARMS!" *Rifles lifted and armed*

*sounds of a three gun salute*

Ya did good Sarf.

1305529
Is it?:rainbowhuh:

Wow :facehoof: thanks for catching that. Fixed.

Very touching story. I have to go back and look, but I think Dawn was the one that threw Trixie out in the street in the previous chapter. Two things I noticed though.

Her azure coat, her deep violet eyes, even the way she conducted herself.

Then a few paragraphs down,

Trixie looked up at him with enormous olive eyes.

What color are you having her eyes (even though I also thought they were purple/violet)? Also,

ntain his composure any longer.

Where's the rest of the sentence?

1305986
violet/olive eyes
Thanks for that. I'll fix it.:derpytongue2:

Where's the rest of the sentence?
I fixed that didn't I? :rainbowhuh: Yeah, it's fixed.

I re-read the previou chapter. I was right. Dawn was the one that put Trixie out in the street. So when do we get to read the next chapter? Will it be on Dawn's life? Will Dawn and Trixie ever meet? I'm just curious.:twilightsheepish:

1310971
I'm not spoiling anything, you'll just have to wait. :twilightblush:

1311941
It seems that either you lost interest in this story or can't figure out what to do next. I'm so sorry to see this story cancelled.

1984974
I had the storyline for the next chapter planned out, and then Golden Vision reviewed the first and second chapter. He showed me just how broken the story was, and I didn't see a way to fix it, or even a reason to. So I left it. I'm working on three other stories atm but I could probably work on this if I get too much writer's block. If for no other reason, not to leave it unfinished.:twilightsheepish:

Here's the the review if you want to see it.

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