Seven friends are thrust from their homes on Earth to the world of Equestria. Two unfamiliar worlds will have to learn to adjust to each others rules and how each others interactions can bring change or create new influences on one another.
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Update Ones more do i kill my phones charge for this delight Into adventure
Your story has been the guiding light of my Wednesdays, thank you so so much for keeping a steady update schedule.
Your author's sense of pacing and timing are also incredible, this story has me hooked!
So much so, that I created an account JUST to comment HERE and tell you that you kick ass
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Thank you so much for your kind words, and the next chapter is still set to be released on time, as well as (hopefully) a bonus chapter either this Friday or Saturday. You know, because I want to keep giving you all more when I can. Oh, and just so you know, chapters 62 and 63 and probably two of my biggest powerhouses, story writing-wise. Even bigger and better with more powerful impacts than what I've put out before.
More intense than "Like a Boss," and "A Human Worth Fighting For."
Greater emotional impact than "Almost...,"
Possibly, even greater development than "The Trials of Lonely Hearts: Part 1/2/3" and "Predators."
Also, thanks for following me. Keep an eye out for a future blog I'll be posting. I think it's getting close to about the time I do another interlude chapter, of which, I keep it open for suggestions.
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What sort of "open to suggestion" type of input do you take from the readers? Like using a comment "prompt" to make a side story within the current events? That's pretty sick.
I gotta tell you I have only ONE gripe with your amazing story that stabbed me in the heart when i realized what you did.
You have nearly 600,000 words of build up for the first ever dicking, the veil of (PG-7) being lifted off the ponies in increments by the introduction of cussing in Equestria [language], the appearance of blood and bleeding [violence], and primal urges.....
AND YOU USED A FADE-TO-MORNING TRANSITION ON CHRIS/STARLIGHT'S BIG FIRST MOMENT. THE FIRST FULL COURSE MEAL GETS SKIPPED.
Now, i totally get it if you planned on doing the "true reveal" and a pony's internal dialogue of very first full sexual realization with a different set of characters. But DAMN that was like kicking my soul in the nuts. When you wrote "He lined her up into position" and the next mention is "Starlight backed out of the door giggling" you did em dirty, my dude.
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Being open to suggestions is for parts of the story not normally covered or a focus on characters not normally explored. The last interlude addition was a focus on ponies' reactions to the humans music. That was chapter 49.5 Interlude: So, About the Humans the Other Night. One of my followers wanted to see what they thought about it and how they reacted to it.
As for Chris and Starlight, I, unfortunately, had to leave out the details to both not draw out the chapter, and the scene altogether, as well as there are things from their first time that need to be introduced a little more slowly. That chapter was also largely about the build-up for how these relationships are going to evolve. Even the morning after didn't seem like the best place to dive in that deep. However, they will be revisited so you can see/read what happened after Chris realized he created a monster in bed, and why she said he didn't have to hold back in the morning after. It deserves a little more attention. There's also some more details I'd like to work in before the more intense moments are given out in full detail.
That, and I like to keep my readers guessing. Maybe I'm a bit of a dick, I dunno. Either way, I don't think you'll be disappointed.
Although, since I have you here, what did you think about the part with Derpy home and how awesome of a mother she is to Dinky? Did it tug at your heartstrings like they did mine? Trying to gauge how another entry (different characters) is going to hit. I still get watery eyes every time I review this next emotional entry yet to be posted.
Hello. I created this account strictly because of this story so I can personally tell you how much I've been enjoying it. Now I've never really been a fan of the show but have seen a couple episodes on account of my brother who is a fan (he's seen S1-S9) & by a couple episodes, I mean the 5 final episodes lol. I've found out info about the characters & more again from my brother. Anyway after the finale, I decided to see what fans of the show have done with it as I thought this fandom would be over & done. Turns out that isn't the case & talent still exist inside the group like you for example.
Now onto the story.
I fucking love the relationships that you've established throughout this journey. I have to say I'm quite scared for Chris. I mean Starlight is so damn DETERMINED for that d***. I wonder how his relationships with the other mares pining for him might be affected if they ever find out about how Starlight got all the bases covered, especially Derpy which btw GOOD GOD WAS THAT DEPRESSING. Hope she'll be okay. It also sounds like she might've been in a abusive relationship to the point she blames herself for having Dinky's father leave. Just a thought. A sad one.
Cerb, Fluttershy & Rarity's relationship? I love the pacing & now that it seems to me that he knows that they are crushing on him, I wonder just how far it'll go til he tells them IF he truly does know they are.
Applejack & Lumberman? This is the sweetest relationship in the whole story. Love how they work off each other & their dance back in "The Dance part lll" is pretty telling me that she might as well be falling for him & vice versa with Lumberman.
The trials that Becky, Benny, Kelly & Sniff are facing are something I'm slowly getting accustomed to. I'm so focused on the above 3 that these 4 are forgotten in my mind. I'm ready for Sniff to just give in. It was foreshadowed with him calling himself a bigger brony than Chris anyway. You know you want to Sniff.
Also him & Twilight? Yeah I could see them together & Twilight's sleepy dialogue definitely tells me she wants him all to herself.
There's so much in the story that I'm enjoying.
Your upload schedule is amazing as well. My Wednesdays get better when I see this story get updated. Keep it up & stay safe while outside.
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Thank you so much for your support. You made my day by the kind words you've shared.
The relationships have been such a vital part of my story. I wanted everything that happens with these characters to make sense. Sure, for some of them, you have to read along to understand why they act they do. For some, not everything is really understood to explain why they are the way they are.
With Chris and Starlight, this is a dangerous combination of someone who has always wanted but never had, and another who has been denied and then essentially given the keys to the candy store/the zipper to Chris's pants.
With Derpy, her story will take a while to be fully understood, like much of these characters and the story as a whole as it unfolds... but you might be right to worry about Chris.
Cerb with Fluttershy and Rarity has required a lot of care for me to work out. Adding the level of desire they have for him, while not destroying their characters has been a challenge. Even with Cerb himself, slowly eroding his defenses and giving him the reasons to want to trust them, while making it understandable... fuck me. Just the same, keeping their urges in check while they struggle to understand why they feel the way they but lack all knowledge they thought they knew... fuck me twice over.
Ahh, yes.... Applehat and Woody. I might have said before that they are my favorite two writing together. Aaaaaaand that still might be true. Really close with Chris and Starlight now. Although, yes. The Dance Part 1/2/3 took up so much time to get down. Everything from the music, the parings of dance partners, how they would dance, their reactions... getting them all drunk, all while still working in different clues for you all to hopefully pick up on.
Becky hasn't really had a reason to stand out yet. Although, she's kinda used to sitting on the sidelines, given her health. She'll get some more attention, but she has a long path to travel.
Benny has suffered more than what's been shown already, but don't count that Squid out yet. He just might surprise you. Also, I love having him mess with Pinkie.
Kelly... oof, Kelly... I'll say it's hard watching someone live a life so compelled by sex that it becomes their identity. Even harder when they try to change and have to deal with confronting their past, people treating them like trash, them believing they're trash, and having to question if they can or if there is a reason to change at all.
Sniff is a lot like Kelly, only for different reasons. And you'll find out a lot more about him to help put things in perspective. But dealing with learned behaviors and addition can be ugly. As for where he ends up, or with who? No Spoilers! No Spoilers! No Spoilers! No Spoilers! No Spoilers! No Spoilers!
I'm hoping you'll enjoy the next chapter, but get ready for that rollercoaster after it. In fact, my current plan is to release 62 on time, like normal, 63 on Saturday, and 64 on its normal time again the following Wednesday. A week would be too long to wait between these next chapters.
Also, not sure if you've picked up on it, but you can't always read into what you think is happening based on what characters say. Even how some events turn out, it might be misdirection or end up changing. Although sometimes things happen exactly as you think they would. It's a mixed bag I guess. Enough to keep you guessing.
Thank you for the response. Now you got very excited on Chris's arc which has essentially gone full on Harem mode.
No spoilers! Aww damn. It'll be worth the wait tho considering your hype for these chapters.
Best ponies? (Never thought I'd type this lol)
Applejack : (Her arc with Lumberman is amazing)
Fluttershy : love everything about her arc with Cerb & how he's made her feel. Also I never thought having this one discuss masturbation of all things would be so interesting. Good on you for that I guess lol.
Starlight : From her interactions with Chris & how far his species has changed her, I'm excited to see how what she's learned might affect others if she chooses to share her knowledge with the other ponies
Twilight : I really wanna see what's the scenario with her & sniff & to see if like Starlight, she too might develop a strong liking toward their human.
All the human characters I enjoy.
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No problem with the reply. I try to engage all my readers. If they take not only time to read my work, but to actually comment on it, I think they (much like you) deserve it.
And yeah, I've only given spoilers out on two occasions, nothing vital. Actually, I think both were spoilers were for Chris and Starlight, but most people say it coming the second time. Although, I like to think the first time no would have expected it to happen in the chapter it did where she almost blew him up.
Best ponies?
Applejack and Lumberman will only get better as it goes on.
Fluttershy was a little hard for me to work in originally. The trick was the angle to use on her initial interest she would find in him. After that, it was all about showing how vulnerable he actually was so her nurturing instincts would take hold. Then, getting him to open up revealed all the more positive traits he would try to instill on her to build her up. Kinda cliche, but at least I didn't make either of them one-note characters with no flexibility or room for growth.
Starlight was actually really easy for me to work into the story. This was still at a phase where she was wanting to make herself better after nearly destroying the world as well as redeem herself to Twilight by learning the value of friendship. At the same time... she kinda sucked at it. Even after her time turning Trixie into a real friend, her tolerance for others wasn't that high and she could be insensitive or try to take the easy way out. Which... of the latter, she might still be doing, when you think about it.
Regardless, nothing made me prouder than having her step up and let her passion and dedication for making things work with Chris merge with her desire to practice friendship have her throw down with Rainbow Dash. It was a good time to show character growth for both of them, being how at that time Rainbow Dash still had her doubts about Starlight really being reformed or taking the friendship lessons seriously. You can look forward to them fighting side by side in the future. Not a spoiler, because I'm pretty sure you know there's another conflict that's going to happen again sooner or later.
Twilight, her biggest arc so far has been mostly dealing with the pressure put on her about Chris's comments and her initial difficulty engaging with Sniff. Combine that with how much he helped her cope with the stress she was under only to turn around from being the human she could barely tolerate at first. He quickly became the kind of human not only gave her a challenge over intellect and her own specialty of friendship, so many other positive traits that drew her closer while having to adhere to Celestia's order not to get too close.
Having her realize that it's already happened, that she is too close, in part, is the reason she snapped. Albeit a day late and a buck short, which is why she's still panicking. Anyway... Watching her try to balance her friendship with him, her royal responsibilities of taking care of him, trying to understand what else she feels for him (hinted at by AJ and only complicated by Fluttershy and Rarity encouraging her to look at him as something more than a friend) while trying to appease her mentor and surrogate mother, yet still keep the safety of her friends and the entire nation at the forefront? She is overloaded with stress and now she's afraid that she might have ruined her relationship with Sniff? After everything, he's done for her?
You kind of have to root for her.
However... not to be outdone or glanced over, Oven Fresh has opened up, been forward, understanding, accepting, patient, and... well, you know... that time she made his pee-pee hard. She's in many aspects done and been a lot more for him than Twilight has. Not only that, but they both also have a lot of hardships in their past that made them struggle, yet still succeed in life, despite still having baggage from it.
You can't really argue she doesn't deserve a chance to make it work with him.
However, both of their arcs when viewed against Sniff's arc, you have to wonder if any of it could or would work out. After all, he's a player with no intention of settling down. He's frustrated with himself for being so compelled to appease them, yet disgusted with himself for sexualizing more mares than just Twilight or Oven Fresh. All of this while being so desperate for affection that he's seeking them out for said effection, but keeps falling into this vicious cycle of being kind, appeasing them for their affection, and failing to realize that he's seducing them until its too late. It's so bad that he's having difficulty separating appeasement and seduction, yet keeps pushing for their praise while allowing their attraction to grow because he can't stop himself.
He's in the most troubling position because he could give in at the wrong time or in the wrong way with either of his two most likely future lovers. At the same time, he could just as easily fall to his temptations towards so many others if he becomes too pent up sexually, overly desperate for affection, or another mare effectively seduces him and just goes with it like Oven Fresh almost did. But that's only if he doesn't self-destruct or shut down before he gets that far. For as far as he's gone, he still has some moral compass that stops him from outright taking advantage of them to feed his lust and depravity. He even knows it's really only a matter of time before he cracks. After all, he doesn't want to hurt any of them.
I think most people look at Sniff and try to paint him as just a player and a poon hound... which he is. But!... He is more than that. He does care about those he forms relations with, does try to help them, and as mentioned to Spike, he's honest with them with what he says to build them up.
Looking back at everything I've done with him, and knowing where things will eventually go with him... he is by far my most complex character to work with.
I wonder if that room in Canterlot is still open for him?
Edit:
Jesus... I wrote a fucking thesis for you. My bad.
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Truly, you have made a universe here that combines intrigue, shipping, full species mental conditioning/amnesia, sick combat, social pressures, internal revelations, wholesomeness, raunchiness, and goofs into my number one favorite story of all time on FimFiction.
Your pacing is perfect!
I can really conceptualize your story by a timeframe where Trixie pulling the humans into Equestria has made the planet's "rating block" tick from Y sloooooooowly to MA, and both the realizations/consequences of all parties already shown AND the consequences for them to come.
It's all good. That thesis was really enlightening anyway. Got me to know a lot about Sniff & Twilight's struggle.
Only I have a question. Why would Chris's comments put pressure on Twilight? It was just a compliment & we already know how Chris gets down. That is unless she's now feeling that way toward her preferred human in Sniff.
Poor Twilight, hope she can get this all sorted out for her sanity. Must be hell to be ordered not to get so close by your teacher while simultaneously breaking said order. Maybe, just maybe it'll all work out in the end.
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Thats a good way of putting it. And your favorite? Damn... if ever there was a compliment, thank you.
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Why would it weigh on Twilight? Because it made her feel awkward and embarrassed. She's never had a romantic life, and the first one to take interest in her was Chris.? Combine that with Pinkie suggesting she take Chris on a date, then days later, Sniff asked her about her dating habits which only stirred up her own confusing feelings about him that she was repressing.
At least right now, she's focusing on Sniff as possibly her best friend if you really stop and look at how she's pigeonholed him. Although, that's almost exactly how things went with Starlight and Chris if you think back to their timeline of events.
A rough start, leading to some common ground, being good friends, almost fucking things up only to come back and be better friends... then a kiss. Okay, so the last two things haven't happened with Sniff and Twilight (yet?). Although, we're not sure how Twilight is going to act towards all of Sniff's gifts either.
Sorry, got off track.
You said Twilight has pigeonholed Sniff. What do you mean & is this bad on her part?
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She pigeonholed him into the friendzone to appease Celestia. Now it's hard for her to even allow herself to even properly confront or address if she even can or does feel something more than friendship for him. At the same time, since she has him held in the friendzone, but can't admit that she feels more for him than just being friends, she's put that friendship on a pedastole.
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I know right? Can only hope the first 'action in detail' lows the mind sky high
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Derpys foal is the cutest and Derpy in general is diabetes inducing sweet
Guess hes a lady killer in bed to get her addicted to dick
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Don't think abusive behavior is a thing... Oddly peacefully to the grade its from time to time creepy...
Cerberus first time will be epic im sure ♡
Probably get two nymphomanics instead of one like Chris
Lumberman and Applehat are so far whomesome right after Derpys familie
Becky and Rainbowdash probably will be ironicly the slowest couple
Kelly and Big Red will party hard im sure. Wonder if Luna joins some rounds
Skirtlover is probably not to far of enjoying someponys donut soon
Twilight... Bot really sure...
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The build up makes it all the sweeter. High hopes for all of em ♡
This will make Flathead trial a bit more complicated
But overall a MASTERPIECE i can't find a equal in human(s) in Equestria.
Applejack your favorit or just because the story developed like it has?
I still love the bellyrubs. Very relaxing to read
Someone mess with Pinkie Pie... That normaly the opposent direction the case
This will be F-U-N ♡
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Jesus... I start to wish comment section had a 'auto-read-function'
Totaly worth it
The calm pleasure before the hard storm...
The good and bad kind
There are some fine points to Adresse in the coming sequel, looking forward to it
The comment section re-reading every chapter jogged my memory well.
Just one thing remains for them to follow:
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Seems like the smart choice to make.
Not sure if the tongue in the butt applies here, though.