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Your summary wasn't very encouraging.
This ... is .... AMAZING
U did a great job making these few chaptures u made, hope u make more.
9138939
Thanks pal, I am happy that you liked it , and I hope you will like the future ones too
hey buddy just a friendly tip you should add more to the description the more thrilling it sounds the readers you will get and this description is a bit short
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good luck
(again this is just some friendly critique)
9139311
I am always open for constructive advice.
9139567
ok good
my only issue is claiming that spreading order could create life, life is chaos bound by the smallest amount of order in harmony. pure order has no change and no life. pure chaos has no constants
9142977
I, or in this case Auriel never claimed that it was order which created life. Auriel just tried to explain it with what she liked and already knew in her vocabulary since Chaos was an unkown element for her. From what we read so far you could see that she often said blue, brown or purple Spell because of how little 'real order' she understood. But you have spotted an important detail, pure chaos and pure Order can't bring life, but already a slight amount of either of them, in ths case Order, is already enough to stop Auriel from creating sentient life.
9138834
and yet you didn't even give the chance to read it and instead your judging it just by the desc
not cool man
9144693
Tell me what the purpose of a summary is. I'll wait.
9144727
sum·ma·ry
[ˈsəmərē]
NOUN
summaries (plural noun)
"a summary of Chapter Three"
synonyms: synopsis · precis · résumé · abstract · abridgment · digest · compendium · condensation · encapsulation · abbreviated version · outline · sketch · rundown · review · summing-up · survey · overview · run-through · notes · recapitulation · recap · tour d'horizon · wrap-up · epitome · conspectus · summa
ADJECTIVE
"summary financial statements"
synonyms: abridged · abbreviated · shortened · condensed · concise · succinct · thumbnail · compact · terse · short · compressed · cursory · compendious · synoptic · brief · crisp · pithy · to the point
antonyms: lengthy · in full
law
(of a judicial process) conducted without the customary legal formalities.
"summary arrest"
synonyms: immediate · instant · instantaneous · on-the-spot · direct · forthwith · prompt · speedy · swift · rapid · expeditious · without delay · without hesitation · sudden · hasty · abrupt · arbitrary · without formality · without notice · without warning · peremptory · without discussion
antonyms: dilatory · slow
9145010
So you copy and pasted the definition. Now that you (hopefully) know the purpose of the summary, do you see why your first comment sounds dumb?
9145444
Dear Damn Hamster, I initially didn't want to write this comment, but seeing how you are passively insulting my Readers, forced me to do this.
1. The big text under the title of the Story is no summary, nor is it in any Fanfiction on this site. What you are talking about is a description. A Description is something that is supposed to give you a small idea of what this Story will be about, what you can expect, and what things definitely won't happen, a summary is telling you what and when something will happen in a Story which is precisely the opposite of what a Story suppose to do. By accusing one of my readers of not knowing what a summary is, even though you apparently don't know it yourself, you embarrassed yourself.
2. You openly accused one of my readers, and his words, being stupid and even questioned his basic knowldge and his capability to learn by adding a '(hopefully),' but you, like mentioned in the previous point, made yourself look bad.
3. You told me that my 'summary' wasn't very encouraging, that was a normal and constructive comment... if you would have at least told me what was exactly was bad and how to improve, the comment in this state only means 'Your 'summary' is bad.'
4. I know a small bit about your behavior on this site and it's pretty obvious that you wouldn't just 'attack' something so little as a description while leaving the whole Story alone unless you didn't even read it.
5. I am going to be as blunt for this as I can be and I will give you the truth no matter how much it hurts, which probably won't even be bothering you considering I am just a random guy on the internet, like you. I despise you to the bottom of my being, and I hate Bullies of all kinds. You have already insulted so many new writers that it already disgusts me, even though I have never had received nor wrote anything to you. What do you expect from a new writer? I don't even want to hear your answer, so I am going to say it myself, all of them are bad in the beginning and you won't write a good Story on your first attempt, I know that as a guy who wrote the worst crap in the beginning and had to rewrite everything several times. So I am going to get right on the point, I don't want ever hear from you again, goodbye, Damn Hamster or as you were previously known, Hamster_Master.
Th is story is what authors should aspire to write in terms of quality and world building. Great job sir and may you continue to write your stories and tomes in piece.
9161582
I am thankful and flattered that you feel this way about this Story and I hope that many other Readers see this fanfiction the same way. Also, thanks for the nice comment, it made my day
9162777
your thanks is noted and welcome good sir. i just can't wait for the next update in this work of literature. keep up the good work.
~ frost, the bat of shadows and crystal
It was good so far keep it up
9182756
the next Chapter is already at 6k words.
Thanks
I am intrigued. You seem to have good grammar and definitely skills with details. We shall see where this goes.
9145740
You miss/sir have earned my respect. Along with a good laugh.
That's awesome and I NEED MOAR CUTE. I DEMAND IT.
9184019
" to: "GIVE ME MOAR!!!! 
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It's quiet funny how you changed from: "I shall read it
9184761
Yeah talk about personality flip XD. Also sorry for the triple comment. They are all in different chapters.
9185511
I am always happy about comments, so do not hesitate. As long as it isn't an insult, but just something polite or constructive criticism, shout it out, I would be honored to have someone judge my work. Oh, and the next Chapter will come out tomorrow, maybe even today.
9185523
My reaction
*ahem* I think I speak for us all when I say
MURPHY LAW HAS BEEN INVOKED!!!!!
Great story so far can't wait for more!!!
9185758
We will see who will win.
The maker of Equus or whatever the planet is going to be called vs *a big applause* M-M-M-Murphy's Law!!!!!!!
9185885
I am happy that you like it.
great chapter hope to see more soon
9212675
Thanks, I try to make these Chapters as good as I can and seeing that I apparently succeed in it makes me happy.
I absolutely love this story and cant wait for more! I also love all the awkward moments keep it up!!!
9216841
I am glad that you like it, as for the awkward moments, many more will follow in this new and weird world for Auriel.
Wait, so discord is defeated forever ?
Great chapter
9233373
Thanks
As for Discord, I am not sure yet. He is a character that made me rethink the progress of the story several times now. Not that A rewritten Past didn't went through many conceps and ideas before.
9233401
Pls don’t change it I like the flow
9249547
No worries. I just meant I had many many many many many prototypes of Auriel. The first version of her was almost the opposite of her now.
9249781
Oh few
When you have time, go thru the chapter 1 more time and fix the errors (there are a lot of small misses). Other than that a nice chapter, good content driving the story forward. Lets hope Celestia and Luna are not ignorant children that make a possible bad situation worse.
Yey for new chapters! Also, if you need small fixes, I'd be more than willing to help you correct them!
9303299
Thanks, that would be nice. Could you maybe pm me and write which Chapter the error was, the the paragraphs with the error and just marker the error in red (or if you have time, maybe explain the error so I maybe won't do them again?)
9303156
Aww, thanks
great chapter i hope to see more soon
9305511
Thanks and there will be plenty more Chapters in the future.
👍
Keep it op
9354424
... Do you mean 'keep it up'? If that's the case, thanks
Crysalis moaned silently while consuming the apple as if she hasn't anything in a thousand years.
Dont you men Auriel?
9354485
nope. The Chrysalis moaned as if she hadn't eaten something this good in a thousand years.