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lurado


welcome to the void, we don't bite

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Ok, now that I have started to read this, you need at least a spelling editor, I’ll do it if you want some help

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I would like if you can tell me what spelling errors you have detected

Are u going to continue this?

9568788 yes it'll be continued

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Awesome looks absolutely adorable

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Does he have powers like a natural nine tailed fox or not?

9575958 lol wait for it bro I'll continue it I promise tonight or tomorrow I'll update it.
I'll personally tell you when we put it up

Omg the innuendo at the end and yes he is godlike but has no control it seems

"OK it's super awkward, let's get it over with, yes I eat meat, no I won't eat you... unless you want me to." I stated flatly, it took a few moments but realization dawned on the ponies around and their faces turned each a bright red, smirking confidently I turned my attention to Celestia who was looking at me amused "so what's actually going on?"

*laughing*

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Someone found it funny

Keep going it's good so far

"I think I can help with that." Celestia answered taking a sip from her tea once more

At that very instant, Prince Blueblood suddenly felt all the hairs in his mane stand up.
"Time to take that trip to Prance that I've been wanting for years!" he nervously exclaimed, rushing out of his quarters, not bothering to pack anything.....

I need to reread previous chapters because I don't remember much......

So every year a new chapter?

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No I'm sorry for being mia I had situations to deal with but, now that its quarantine time I got time to write

Finally a likable version of Celestia and Luna

You won't believe how many unlikable versions are there.
I think, I even saw a couple of times, situations where the author tried to make Celestia likable, but it failed and even backfired.

I think there is somewhere between 60-70% of Celestias who will make you angry while reading, on a scale between a bitch to a power-hungry racists tyrant

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Would you believe that's why I write her this way?

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Thank you for sticking around it means a lot

If its possible plese update more.

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Funny you should ask

IT'S ALIVE!!!!!!!!

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Damn was it missed that much :derpyderp1:

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Your story is interesting and funny, a bit of typo here and there, but it's a good story. Waiting for the next chapter, keep up the good work!:pinkiehappy:

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I think it's the difference in dialect, I am from the Caribbean so it's absolutely more broken than what you're used to

He was in the void?
How?.....
What type?

Never mind that, he is lucky he encountered some low level, on bottom of the food chain, low in hierarchy residents of the void

He would have been screwed if he met Cthulhu like creatures

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If you wanna know stay tuned and find out
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"Princess I must beg you to reconsider we don't know what this thing is capable of." the commanding guard stated "If he wanted to escape he would've done so already," Celestia pointed out "the reinforced magic chains you had around him is in not holding him, so why should this gate, if he meant us hard, we would've been hared already."

Harm

"Are you sure about them?" I asked "after all you don't know if I'm playing you" Celestia turned her face to me "Are you playing me Vreizo?" she asked

New paragraphs when different people talk

"Including my sister and I," started Luna "five" "Five onli, wow that must be hard knowing you're the only of your species" I said shaking my head "and what about the butt tattoo?"

Bruh, you need an editor, and the para above

That's......a bit gory, maybe you should change the story rating to M?

Comment posted by lurado deleted Apr 6th, 2020

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Honestly never crossed my mind, well you can look away now sorry for ruining your reading pleasure

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No, could you send me a copy of wherever you write your stories so I can do some editing? I wouldn’t mind doing so

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It wasn't a problem for me actually, it's just catch me off guard, and your story was E Rated before so I'm just reminding you that something a bit gory is categorize as M rated story. Keep up the good work

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Thank you very much

Standing the stallion picked up the stained blood stained hoodie from the floor and walked out the ally and into the bustling night of the city. The bodies left behind were mangled with missing organs and body parts.

stained two times?

My time with Luna was short lied when she noticed a young filly having a nightmare, bidding me farewell she descended into the dream, but not before promising to continue our conversation in the real world soon as possible. With Luna gone the magic keeping me in the dreamscape disappeared and I was plunged into darkness.

I think you mean short lived not lied

The other filly couldn’t contain her laughter and fell over laughing she started to couch due to over laughing. Calming herself down, she looked up at me with watery eyes and a wide smile.

I think you mean cough not couch

“Don’t touch my cinder,” Twilight called after them as she turned back to me

Probs ment cider not cinder

“What’s white the bite sized snack?” I asked as the bunny somehow managed to flip me the finger “it’s rude as f-“

Probably meant what's with the white sized snack not.whats white the bite sized snack

“This’ll be fun,” I said licking my lips “I haven’t hand meat in almost three weeks.”

Had not hand

“Why not, many citizens probably think she got a nice flan as well,” I laughed ducking into another room “besides, who else is gonna tease sunbutt princess.”

Not sure if this one was on purpose but you said flan i think you meant flank

I don't think I found anything wrong with this one good job

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Are you enjoying the story though

I didn't find anything wrong with this one so good job

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