Twilight
Twilight
“Your a fool Twilight Sparkle” The dark pony said with a chuckle, his piercing green eyes boring into her with his gaze. “You maybe an alicorn now but your still no match for me, especially while you are separated from your friends.” He smiled evilly.
“You will never succeed Sombra. If I have to I will defeat you here and now. I will defeat you, free my friends and save Equestria!” She said assuredly. I need to stay calm and not get mad or he’ll just get stronger.
Sombra chuckles, “You are truly foolish you have no hope of defeating me!” Sneers. “It will be so much fun to beat that hope out of you!” He laughs trumpently like he had already won. “Prepare yourself Twilight Sparkle...” Darkness filled the world around them”... for your end!”
The world around her changed to a gray landscape, like the world around her had frozen in time. Sombra stood before her in his solid form. She readied her stance preparing herself for his first attack. Sombra smiled wickedly. Shadows shot out along the ground from his hooves. Before she could react the shadows reached her and launched upward from underneath her in the form of a dark mass knocking the wind out of her. She was sent into the air. The alicorn attempted to stabilize herself using her wings, but before she could the shadows shot out of the ground again, this time grabbing onto her and slamming her into the ground. She could feel her ribs crack upon impact. Spitting out blood the mare stumbled to her hooves.
“My, my you’re a lot more resilient than I expected, just makes it more fun to see you suffer” A sickeningly murderous grin spread across his muzzle. Once again the darkness sent twilight into the air before throwing her back to the hard, unforgiving ground. Sombra began to laugh at the sight of her being tossed around like a rag doll. “Can you not see now how much of a fool you are. You are no savior, you will never win, your friends and your precious equestria’s fate is now in my control.” He exclaimed. Twilight landed before his hooves. She attempted to stand up but he kicked her sending her rolling along the ground. “You will die here by my hooves.” He walked up to her and lifted up her chin. Her muzzle was broken and bleeding, her left eye was shut closed and black, the rest of her face was covered in lacerations and abrasions.” You are weak!” The dark stallion yelled and threw her a few meters away. Twilight once again tried to ge to her hooves but before she can even get one hoof against the ground sombra was already above her.” You don’t deserve these wings.” A dark shadowy mass formed around his front hooves. He reared back before bringing them down on her left wing. A sickening crack ringed through Twilight’s ears before the pain of her wings being broken finally registered. The mare let out a cry of pain. Before she could even register what was happening next the stallion kicked her onto her back. Once more he reared back and slammed down on her other wing. Twilight cried out once more, tears now leaked from her unharmed eye.” You don’t deserve your magic either you have no right to bare the title of the element of magic!” Reaching out with his own dark magic he grabbed a hold of Twilight’s horn. Cracks began to form along the horn before it exploded into thousands of pieces. The alicorn screamed and writhed in pain. “Yes cry and scream it makes me more powerful!” He exclaims towering over her. His horn once again lit up. A black shadowy spike formed above Twilight. “You are failure. Your kingdom and friend’s fates are sealed. Oh how much fun I’m going to have torchering your friends and fellow princess!” He laughed maniacally.” NOW DIE!” The dark spike plunged down towards the doomed mare…..
my friends….. the princess….. they... . they're all doomed…. I couldn’t save them…………….
….NO!
Twilight’s eye snapped open, a wave of magic exploded out of her and slamd into the dark pony, sending him several meters from where he was just seconds ago.
“WHAT!?” Sombra exclaimed in shock and anger! Getting back to his hooves he saw a sight that makes his blood boil. Standing before him was the beat and battered princes, her one good eye glowing with white light. Her main waved in an invisible wind as magic poured out from her body. A purple aura of magic surrounded her body causing her to glow like as bright as Celestia’s sun. “ You fool your anger will only make me more powerful”
“No…. your the fool Sombra, this is not anger. This is my love. My love for my friends, my love for my fellow princess, and my love for my Equestria, my home.”
Sombra snarled in anger. He sent shards of dark magic towards her, but they disintegrate just before they can reach her. “WHAT!?” A massive spike of dark magic formed above him before he sent it hurtling towards the alicorn.
Lavender magic shot out from the aura surrounding Twilight and slammed into the dark spike destroying it upon impact. The mare began to walk towards Sombra.
“NO!” The dark stallion yelled as he continued in his desperate attempt to harm the princes of friendship. It is to no avail as she continued to advance towards him. The lavender light began to burn him as she grew ever closer. “ I WILL NOT ACCEPT THIS YOU SHOULD BE DEAD SO DIE!” He screamed in rage while sending attack after attack of dark magic.
Twilight continued to advance unhindered by sombras offencive. “I can not be stopped. You are a threat to harmony so you must be stopped.” Her pace quickened.
“NO NO NO NO NOOOOOO!!!” The evil stallion yells as he desperately attempts to slow the mares advancement. “I CAN'T LOSE! EQUESTRIA IS RIGHTFULLY MINE!” He returns to his shadowy form in an attempt to escape.
Magic tendrils shootout ward and surround the darks king stopping his retreat. “I can not allow you to escape you must be stopped.” The tandrals slam into his shadowy form forcing him into his slid form.
“AAAARG!!” Sombra cried out. He could feel his body being pumped full of the lavinder magic, as cracks began to form over his body. “AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHRRRRRRGGGGG!!!!” He screamed before his body explodes into lavender light before his thoughts ceased to exist….
Reality around Twilight began to return to collor. She stood there staring off into the horizon…. The lavender aura continued to swirl around her…. I did it…. I saved Equestria! A tear ran down her cheek. I did it….
…. To be continued?
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For God's sake, I hope not.
8814294
You obviously didn't like it, why is that?
8814749
So, the reason I didn't like it is because it was just too violent and inconsistent and edgy. The characters were out of place, there were spelling and grammar errors galore and so on.
I think if a bit more work in the refining process was put in it'd have been better.
8814755
I can understand spelling errors, but i don't get the rest. The story is mostly meant to be a fight scene set in an AU. Also complaining about being edgy and violent is a bit odd when I have put a violence tag. Could you elaborate more so I can understand?
So... this is a dragon ball z crossover, right? It's a bit... melodramatic.
8815618
No just something I did on a whim.
*waits for more*
Can you use the Long Description box for a summary of the story too? It's nice to know the notes behind it but I got no clue what the story is about.
8815888
Hmm yeah that's something I should definitely keep in missed. Thank for the advice, I don't know why I didn't think of doing it in the first place.
8816003
It happens.
8814749
oof, you should space out the action into different paragraphs to make it less intimidating and easier to follow.
The bigger the paragraph, the less likely it is to be read. The biggest paragraph is nearly 1/4 of your story. (405 words)
a description would be nice, so i know the gist of what i'm about to read
Description is meant for the story. Authors Note is for your personal notes. I don't have a clue what this story is about.
Nice descriptions, but many errors.
8816231
I'll keep that in mind, thanks for the advice.
8816745
Could you point out the errors so I can avoid them in the future.
8816517
8816479
Yeah I know I'm just now getting around to it. Thanks for pointing it out though, it really helps.
8816790
ah much better, thank you
8816844
No problem.
What do you mean by that? Did you write a story starring him or something?
8817426
Yes I did. In fact the story was named soarin.
There's alot of consistent errors, i.e "your" instead of "you're" suggesting that author either doesn't know grammar or doesn't care. And that is said by someone for whom English is third language. This can't be an accident, because one of those error is first word of the story. It's impossible to miss.
Offencive, tandrals, collor... and factual error that Twilight's magic isn't lavander, it's purple/pink.
Paragraph devision is horrible. And villain is as flat as floor board... with alot of "WHAT?" going on.
8914914
Um thanks for the help. I have problems with your and you're because I really heavily on spell check.
I've always had problems with spelling and I'm still working on it.
As for the color of Twilight's magic... that's a bit of a nitpick don't you think? I said her magic was lavender because that's the I perceive it as.
I thank you for pointing those out and I'll attempt to fix them in the near future.
No.
9063299
Okay
More?
I want to see a sequel.