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Fluttershy adores Big Mac. She loves him so much that sometimes she doesn't know what to do with herself. When their life plans are threatened, however, she does her best to make his dreams come true. Even if Applejack doesn't agree with her methods.
When Applejack finds Fluttershy in a compromising situation, she is quick to anger. Will Fluttershy's explanation be enough, or will Applejack still seek to fix what what was broken.
Written for "The Two-Faced Charade" Contest!
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First entry!
Thanks for joining my contest!
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Ofc! Thank you for the inspiration!
Man, that's so sad. I can only imagine what it would be like to want kids so desperately, but not be able to have them with the person you love.
Did you win the contest?
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It's still ongoing! So I have no clue! Although I have a good idea where I'll place lol.
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Yeah, same.
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Well, this is a nice entry. I like your characterization of Flutters.
The reason for her actions became obvious a bit too soon I found, but you made up for it with the last scene, which showed how far she was willing to go. Nice work, I wish you good luck!
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Thank you! I'm pleased to hear that you enjoyed it.
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Thank you, very much, for this review. I can see what you're saying, and honestly, you're right. I should have expanded on the Apple thing. It was meant as an 'everyone in this family has multiple foals why can't we have even one? This makes no sense?' type thing.
Also, I know I need to work on my writing structure (sentence variation and the like) I just don't know how. I've concidered taking classes, honesty. You also mentioned description, which is a very weak point of mine. Any advice for making these better is greatly appreciated.
Again, thank you very much for the review!
I'm guessing that donors aren't a thing in low-technology Equestria, so I get why that's not being considered since that may help produce a child suitable for living on a farm. But, given how big the Apple family is, why doesn't Fluttershy try with another Apple family member? Mac might agree to it since the kid would still be a blood relation and the other family members might see it as morally acceptable (and preferable to adoption) given the circumstances. If Fluttershy doesn't want to tell Mac, there would still be a familiar resemblance to him and it would help avoid odd conversations or questioning if the kid is really his.
Still, a relatively good story with well-written characters. Fluttershy and Big Mac both wanting lots of children is especially true to their characters (the fact that neither has a large family in canon is absurd).