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elmago02


A Brony from Colombia that enjoys writing and reading about ponies.

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Applejack receives a letter that makes all those dreams and hopes she has turn into a reality...
A reality that won't last for long.


Special Thanks to andrizzi and Krickis.

Chapters (6)
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Comments ( 11 )

This is going to be interesting.

I noticed a couple of mishaps. Nothing serious, you only have to split these paragraphs.

Applejack grinned. “You always have something good fer lunch.”“Damn right ye are.”

“Uhmm… Hi?” Applejack said, not really knowing what to do or what to expect. The bird chirped at her, moving a bit closer and lifting the scroll.
“Is… Is that for me?”

7984677 Fixed. Thank you.

I liked it until the letter as I think AJ's reaction was a little over the top. It smoothed up again after AJ left and Fluttershy got over her shock.

7984863 Well, I wrote that part while thinking that Applejack has been in love with Fluttershy for a long time, so... yeah, she was happy.

so, is this the end or how many other chapters do we have planned left?

7989537 This isn't the end.

TFW that letter wasn't for you. :twilightblush:

This is a really nice piece of work. The final scene of Chapter 5 is pure emotion and joy. I rather enjoyed the take of the story in which Applejack was the more emotionally-vulnerable one, because it's more often Fluttershy cast in that role. To bring out such as unusual aspect of Applejack whilst keeping her believably in-character was quite a feat. Thank you!

8457614
Thanks a lot for your kind words. I was actually kind of worried I had screwed how i handled things as no one commented the last chapter.

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